Player Comments on In 3

Rated this a little higher than I would have in order to counteract Ford's trolly 1/8. But it's still a FUN game that deserves more attention than it's been getting.

It's a really good use of the prompt, the time that's counting down is kept as the focus as you're hopping from place to place. The villains and even the benevolent Togen being kept pretty mysterious works in the story's favor; this is one of those sci fi stories where the how and why is not the point, but rather the human drama in this high pressure situation.

I know you said you had to rush for the deadline, and I obviously wouldn't mind seeing it expanded to include more colonies, but there's a decent amount of branching here already, and some pretty pronounced variety in the places you end up in.

Sentences in a few places were a bit odd, nothing I can really put my finger on so nothing too major, just a few places where the wording or structure was slightly awkward or unclear. A later editing pass when not in such a hurry might improve that. There is still a lot of cool and imaginative imagery here though, and a lot more things done right than wrong.

An ending I found really underlines that it was the right choice to avoid any hard science. The image of these planets just spinning off their separate lonely way into space is such a bittersweet one regardless of the realism. The Earth ending was really something as well.

Imaginative story. No cheap tricks on the choices given - I managed a fairly OK ending just by choosing wisely. Interested to know if there's a way to save the sun though!

I simply wish there was a bit more to the story but I enjoyed it.

I enjoyed this - some good branches to follow and I got a good sense of place and urgency. I would have liked to read more as it felt like there was more to understand and explore in the world - I'd definitely read another story set in the same world to find out more about the different colonies. Thanks for writing

Fun and lively read with a variety of end points. interesting problem to try to solve. I think I found the best ending and even that was not all that hopeful. I hope that there is a more hopeful one out there that I haven't found yet, but I plan to try.

Few grammar or punctuation issues jumped out at me other than the rare odd word choice or missing article. A few of the endings were quite a surprise, and descriptions are handled well.

This was a great read. I will enjoy going through different paths when I come back to it. The story was very well written, but the plot lost me a bit with the ending I read. Maybe I missed something.

Pretty dang good.