Island Attack: Raid
, #54 for
Played 1,164 times (finished 130)
"March in the swamp"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"Aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
Part of Series
Sci Fi, Serious, Distant Planet Adventure
Kudos for working with variables and publishing a story within your first three days as a member. You seem to understand the basics of what makes a storygame good, which does show. However, the "You Died" pages appear without any explanation of why. This seems to be a result of inexperience with the system. If you revise and proofread your future stories, as well as fiddle a bit more with the system, your story-games might turn out to be pretty good! For now, however, it is only mildly enjoyable, and could use serious work.
on 2/23/2012 8:37:47 PM with a score of 0
I just got recommended this community by a friend. I just got my account. I'm a vetted writer but green to this site and this is pretty much sums up what this site is about for me. I see this is 9 years old but good work.
on 5/30/2021 12:58:10 AM with a score of 0
Nice quick fun. Loved the bird. You might want to fix "here an alarm go off" on "Go Right" and "the helicopter shoot all the guards" on the final page.
on 6/16/2020 2:54:31 AM with a score of 0
I won!! I won I won I won, and with 14 health left!!!
— Hi on 2/16/2020 6:01:16 PM with a score of 0
Too short and has no plot...
on 5/17/2018 9:51:20 PM with a score of 0
yaboi said ok its pretty good man :)
— yaboi Jeff on 2/4/2018 5:11:55 PM with a score of 0
Fun but short.
on 6/25/2016 2:54:09 PM with a score of 0
Death pays for death.
— walker. on 5/26/2016 12:47:15 AM with a score of 0
Short but should definitely get a 7 or 8. There should be more like this.
on 4/1/2016 1:25:54 AM with a score of 0
Certainly not bad, but pretty short. There needs to be more storygames like this.
on 7/15/2015 4:28:40 PM with a score of 0
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