Journey Through the Wasteland
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
Played times (finished )
"Run through the jungle"
"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"
"Must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
This game is a game and all games are games so really this game is actually just a game.
No idea what the hell that description's supposed to be.
The grammar here isn't exactly dog shit. There /is/ some kind of a story too, so that's another plus. But the story is just...bland. It's essentially the beginning of Fallout 4.
And good god..."part 1." DON'T. DO. THAT. The only exceptions for splitting one story into separate storygames is when the story is big enough to be able to split into storygames that are long enough to stand alone. If the length of this "part" is just 2/8, consider writing more. This is a writing site, after all, and there is no deadline to publish a storygame unless you're submitting a contest entry. Or just don't split your story into separate storygames. Create one big storygame, and possibly use the advanced editor to create chapters so that it's all organized.
on 12/5/2016 4:18:23 PM with a score of 0
very short not much detail given to the story, characters, or background making everything seem to happen suddenly. You've got a good start but far from a complete story here.
on 12/5/2016 2:26:31 PM with a score of 0
This wasn't bad for your first game. It had story, and it was okay. Perhaps a tad bit linear, but that's okay.
I think you could improve this story a lot, by giving the protagonist a wider ranged backstory, and a more thorough description of the details of where we go, and what the places look like. As I said, not bad. ^_^
on 12/5/2016 10:03:04 AM with a score of 0
Way to short, no way that this could stand as it's own story either. You should go and take your time, don't rush the story just to get something out.
on 12/5/2016 8:21:11 AM with a score of 0
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