Player Comments on Luigi's Adventure

bad as can be bad

The events were happening in a blink of an eye, this was short, linear, and choppy, the dialogue was written out like a play instead of a story, and some of the choice's outcomes made really no sense. You've got to work on improving your writing abilities by being more descriptive, fully flesh this story out so that it isn't so linear and following only one path, and creating some build-up between events so it isn't happening all to fast. Try explaining the world we are in, and the characters themselves.

I can't believe I just died 2 times

it was short. But fun.

eh..........
random 8/8!

Protip: don't give up to win

best story ever

I LOVE LUIGI!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This game is incredibly simple and is very linear.

short, but fun.

3/8...
Eh... I can't believe, being the huge Mario fan I am, I didn't Comment on this earlier.
The Good:
It was creative, with the Go-Karting aspect. You gave a bit of humor to go along with the story.
The Bad:
They were all(?) two option questions, and one led to death, while the other led to progression. I recommend an increase of options.
You didn't really let the Reader think. It all came down to logic. You don't rest while you're off saving a princess from a crazed ape.
There wasn't much of a story to it, which I feel is the primary aspect to any Mario story (RPG games included).
Overall, it was short and linear, but with a nice humor added in for comical relief.

It wasn't horrible, but the writing was bland-ish.

Well, it would be nice to see some of the other paths have stories to them. But other than that cool idea and fun to play

It was fun, but short

Great! but maybe more Attacks at the fight?

You never even said "Lets'a go!"

... *blink* It's called a "choose your own adventure" for a reason. Please make more choices. >_> If there are only two per page and one of the choices always forces you to restart? It's... not much of a choice. Or an adventure.

Okay, this was a little dumb. XD You have a good story, but way too linear, and what you did write felt choppy and short. Work on that. Make it longer and more paths and whatnot. BUT.... I am extremely biased towards my favorite Mario character Daisy. :D and I loved the Daisy + Luigi sprite at the end. So you get a totally unbiased 8. Lawl.

it was ok

really? it killed time..1 minute...and was way too easy, not that entertaining

It wasn't the best but could have been worse. Most of the choices in the game I had to guess to continue and it was really short. I did like that it was very Mario like and the fight with DK was interesting.

I think this could use more effort but you did a decent job.

4/8

It was fun, comical, and I really liked the 'Daisy/lazy' rhyme. Two thumbs up!

it was ok

A Cool Game!

It was a good idea although I didn't like how it was just one path is right and the other is wrong.

...i liked the pictures...

There isn't really anywhere to go, it's either right or wrong.

luigi is one of my favorite characters from the mario series. he seemed pretty flat in this story. try to add some more deminsion to his character. to the story period. good try though, i struggle with story writing myself.

Eeenngh...this is pretty simple. Very predictable and linear.

cute? not much here though.

This game was very, very disappointing. The writing, for one thing, was bland and uncreative. This could have been saved, though, by good gameplay. But it wasn't. The game starts out with three pointlessly filler "back out of the adventure and let Mario handle it" choices, which lead to stupid endings. When Luigi does actually start chasing DK, there is no interaction! You get two choices, and if you pick one, you die, if you pick the other, the story progresses for you to make another progress-or-die choice until you abruptly reach an ending. Since there's no strategy whatsoever required for the gameplay, winning was hollow and I only rejoiced because it gave me a chance to post this comment. Finally, the premise is not remotely realistic (why would DK capture Daisy or hire Koopas?) and this whole thing flopped. Too bad, because I can see a great game behind this premise, but t

This was a weird game. Very short and undescriptive.

Meh. Gd pictures but too a simple plot.

This story deserves a 5, good job!

Awesome game, well done.

that was good but make it longer than it is right now

Slightly interesting. Not enough choices, though.

Pretty nice.

Fun story,and funny too.

It was pretty interesting.

LOL!! This game was good. It was short, but good. I liked the koopa too. Yeah, I think you did a good... |_|

rubbish

Random

stupid

ok, a little too short, and not too many choices. You win anyway. I wouldn't reccomend it, but it's something to do.

It is a good game, and yes it is kind of a rip off of mario jonjon's game, but with luigi, I don't know why but I like an adventure with Luigi better than Mario... hmmmm, maybe I just like Luigi better than Mario, good game though. I don't care how long a game is, it can be short it can be long, I don't really care just as long as the game is fun is all that matters.

p.s.: Funny ending with koopa.

This game should continue with Daisy marrying Luigi. Then me, the Beastie Boys, and Linkin Park show up at the after party. Linkin Park does a song for their first dance and then the Beastie Boys give Luigi & Daisy their album To The 5 Boroughs. Luigi then gets a new suit and tie for his costume to be King of the Mushroom Kingdom.

Luigi should have asked Daisy to marry him. She would say Yes. They would make out and a few months later at their wedding, The Beastie Boys and Donald Trump show up at the wedding but Daisy is captured and Luigi has to rescue her again. Then they get married. Then Mario & Peach die by being burnt. The End.

The ending was funny.

A little too much like mario adventure island, supermariojon's games, but always a good time i guess. This game was pretty well made, and not half bad.

It was really COOL!!!!!!!!!

I like the game its fun but I wish it was longer.

that was interesting make another one.

I say it was okay, but could've been a LOT better.

May I borrow your snake.

Wow...that was a true ripoff of my games, but not to bad...It had potential man if you woulda just made it longer, and the intro to your game is kinda thrown my game down, were in a friendly envirement her at My adventure Games, lets not do that... But anyways...besides the fact that you copied my idea, not a bad game! Unpublish it and make it longer, Id love to play a longer version!

This is a short game. But it's still fun! Mario rules above all! (Luigi included with Nintendo)

Great short basic story. We need more short stories.

fun but short

Hey Bro! That's short!