Player Comments on The Pictures from the Prophecy
Well, I must say that this storygame was rather cute, all things considered. I actually read this once before and I remember comparing it to that of a children's book, which I meant as a compliment. There is definitely a moral lesson to learned with this story, and I believe that the lesson told at the end within this story was one that was told well enough.
I liked the use of pictures in this, I felt that they had a much larger impact than usual due to the premise of the narrative of the story, and thus they didn't feel out of place at all. You could say that the pictures did well in accompanying the story and benefiting it in the long run.
There were some qualms with the grammar however, more often that not there were typos that were present in some of the pages of this storygame. I don't feel that they were too bad, but there were typos that I feel could have been avoided if you took a closer look and decided to proofread. Or perhaps gotten someone else to give a glance over at your work. Still they didn't detract from my enjoyment too much, and for the most part the writing was indeed coherent.
Though this wasn't truly a long story by any means, I don't feel that you should necessarily make the reader have to reset from the beginning if they so happen to get a choice wrong. At least that's my opinion on the matter, because I often found myself trying to see I there were alternative paths to be taken in this storygame, but it seems like this story was one that was rather linear when everything is taken into account. Perhaps more effort in branching wouldn't have detracted too much from the message that was trying to be conveyed with this story?
In the end, I felt that this story was quite imaginative and rather creative in the way it was told. This wasn't bad by any means at all, and I found myself rather entertained from the writing in this story.
on 11/10/2017 5:00:49 PM with a score of 0
It felt much like a fable. You called each thing what they are (ex: Rogue, Warrior, Lizardman). I mean, it's not wrong, but it does cut down the story's potential.
It was a pretty good storygame, but very easy. It was super easy to convince the Lizardman and Warlord to be nice, which was a bit disappointing.
Your sentences need some improvement. Too many commas exist, and the sentences just run on and on, though are generally correct word-wise. Also, at some points, the dialogue was all jammed into one paragraph. Use correct paragraph division please.
Overall, it was a decent storygame, but quite basic and could use fleshing out (especially with setting).
on 12/4/2016 10:26:50 PM with a score of 0
I found it clever and well made
on 6/12/2017 1:40:12 AM with a score of 0
Ugh. Your spelling was bad enough that it was downright distracting. And maybe don't tell us exactly when to use each item? I think most people realize when they come to a locked door that they should probably use a key.
on 5/30/2017 8:05:11 PM with a score of 0
... C'mon! Even if the maturity ranking is only 3/8, I expect some action. Or some romance like EndMaster. He writes some good porn.
-- them action/love expert on 5/30/2017 6:52:41 PM with a score of 0
Nice gameplay, fairly easy to beat, but with some chances to fail.
-- dolphin06670 on 5/20/2017 9:41:32 AM with a score of 0
Umm, well I think this was pretty fun, like a children's book actually. That is meant to be a compliment.
on 8/26/2016 9:18:57 AM with a score of 0
Da fudge is this s?
on 5/3/2016 9:16:27 PM with a score of 0
So... You meet everyone in the prophecy AND stop the warlord by talking to him all in one day? Also how likely is it that saying a totaly of four sentences will stop someone from taking over the world? Other than that it was a very good story and I think you did a pretty good job.
on 8/23/2015 9:22:13 PM with a score of 0
on 5/20/2015 1:07:00 PM with a score of 0
A couple of spelling and grammar errors, but overall, it is fun and has some plot to it.
on 4/25/2015 10:36:05 AM with a score of 0
Well, it is quite easy
on 4/23/2015 10:19:26 PM with a score of 0
Feels like a children's story... and like a low budget version of the Lego movie.
on 10/10/2014 1:37:50 AM with a score of 0
Wow! This is a lot of fun! Certainly better than a 4.. Great use of items and pictures, as well as a funny story with a good message.
on 9/18/2013 1:43:05 PM with a score of 0
on 8/22/2012 9:38:27 PM with a score of 0
High point of the story: "I haven't started or took part in any wars, people just call me warlord because I'm mean."
on 7/14/2012 12:50:45 PM with a score of 0
Such clumsy moralizing you tend to. . . .
on 2/29/2012 5:48:48 PM with a score of 0
It is good. Not alot of fun though
-- RandomBOB on 1/22/2012 7:46:46 AM with a score of 0
Eh, it was alright. too linear, very obvious what you had to do.develop the plot a bit more, then you'll be good.
on 9/22/2011 3:11:57 AM with a score of 0
That was surprisingly fun, Good job.
on 8/4/2011 4:30:49 PM with a score of 0
on 6/19/2011 9:31:26 PM with a score of 0
Story was pretty good, but I really hate having to use my items in certain places. Create a link that opens up when a person is holding an item, so they don't have to guess what to use, when. Also, very linear. Work on that.
on 1/4/2009 10:39:52 PM with a score of 0
A creative effort with an underlying theme of ethnic and cultural equality (unless I'm reading way too much into it). Nice drawings. Some problems with tenses and could be proofread a bit more. Reasonable use of items. Good effort chucklemoowebs, looking forward to more.
on 6/12/2008 9:25:49 AM with a score of 0
Not a bad first game. I liked how you went advanced. Nice username too btw. I thought the storyline was slightly shallow but overall, not bad.
on 1/12/2008 6:22:25 PM with a score of 0
this gane was good. i like how the story was and how the ending turned out. 5/8
on 12/1/2007 12:22:04 PM with a score of 0
The writing technique was decent, but the storyline could have used some work. Nice use of pics and items.
on 11/29/2007 11:06:20 PM with a score of 0
nice attempt at items and such. glad you have tried it. however, the story was lacking a bit of depth and there were spelling errors that could easily have been fixed with another run through before publishing. cant wait for your next contribution.
on 11/29/2007 3:54:54 PM with a score of 0