Player Comments on Try Not To Die!

Well, it wasn't the best written story that's for sure. But I have seen worse on here, so I won't dock any points on that. I also added you one point, because you had two ways to reach the ending of the story. A good idea, and the story is interesting in a mysterious, don't know what is going on kind of way. But bad choices, and WAY TOO many deaths, keep this from being one to recommend. Sorry, better luck next time.

Seriously, how do you expect anyone to enjoy that? The outcomes had nothing to do with the choices, no clues were given, the only way to proceed is arbitarily clicking random links.

Also, computers do not contain explosives. Also, they don't talk, as you have clearly set the story in the modern world.

If you are going to make a fantasy world, elaborate on it, don't just take the real world and make crazy, unexplained shit happen.

Finally, your writing really sounds like a little kid when the "winning" path is to run home to mummy. Please. Don't do this to our minds.

How are people to know what to do? You leave no hints as to the best possible action, this is really frustrating for your player because he dies a lot without having any real input. Also, don't worry about indenting. Make sure you complete your story before publishing next time. Not a terrible first effort.

This is one of the worst games I've played on this site. The "good" ending, prefixed with the words "Finally it's over" pretty much summarises my entire experience with this appalling shitcake of a game.

What on earth is good about this? I guess you can spell, and form cohesive sentences. That might be a plus. But why put so many unnecessary death links? It's as if you made a link to a new page, but then couldn't be bothered to put something interesting there so you just put DEATH instead. Death death death.

Tbh I think this would be a kinda cool story if you just made less "dead" ends and added more story and less random; the thing with computers and checkpoints is a cool theme; maybe make it a kind of like matrix thing?

Bad length, bad difficulty... and an iffy maturity level. But the rating is correct:
3/8

Need MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Yeah like a boss. I didn't die once! Boom!

What the....

Did I lose? I ended up with endless nothingness.

Decent story with good writing .

its hard but its a challenge and really fun

too short, you could have just continued the story from where you left off. its also too easy, I only died once before I finished it

Feels kinda random and is lacking in description. I find it hard to be really immersed in a story when it's got little detail, especially horror.

Not too bad but it isn't brilliant. The sudden deaths were a bit annoying and they could definitely be more detailed to involve the reader in the story more.

Quite interesting, I liked how you linked the choices with each other (i.e. in my first playthrough I got hit by the car, but in the next playthrough when I chose another choice, the car still appeared, I just didn't get hit by it). Don't forget to spell check, as well!

Very interesting, if not random and senseless. Lot of grammatical and spelling errors. I give it a 5/8.

For me, there were too many ways to die in this short movie. It would be nice to see more ways to survive and no deaths after making a logical move. Some stories on here give you a chance to redeem yourself when you make a bad move. Maybe on your next death story, you should try to give redemption options :) but at the end of the day, once i found out how to survive. It was an enjoyable story. Well done.

This game was fun. I can imagine if this game was a light jumpscare 2D horror game. I died about 5 times before i beat the game.

I love it!

Well it was very short and it was simply a case of make a random guess between choices with all but the indended one leading to near instant death. I didnt give it a 1 as the spelling a premise was basically sound.

every single other link killed you 1/8

creepy...

I can't tell if I just won or lost...

That computer's a brat :p

I think I died 15 times before I got to the end...... and almost ripped out all of my HAIR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

So, this game is just one big trolling session, I see.

Not very bad !!!!

One word: hints. You really need to help your readers try to survive because we have no idea what to do. For me, I was just choosing choices randomly and most of them ended in death. You need to explain more.

2/8

this could have been better but everything you did killed you

stay away from this

Not much choice beyon die or continue

That was just stupid. At least have the decency to include end page links.

Stay away... far far away

you HAVE to choose the right path. i don't care if this IS your first story. you should have known to make more of a tree path.

Bad plot, very linear and only 2 endings 3/8

A whole lot of deaths that force the player to restart the game, random branching, not very well-written. Certainly not the worst story on the site, though.

it's basic stuff, a little hard which is good, and you just need to use your head ;)

Wayyyy to many ways to die.

Well, it...seems as though you made this up as you went. Unpredictable events consistently took place, eliminating the chance for strategy, and there's little explanation for anything. Barely even a hint of a story, you could have at least extended the story enough to give some plot.

There didn't seem to be much of a plot. No real hints as to what to click.

If you elaborated a bit more, put out more choices that didn't send you to the very beginning, this would be awesome.

i truly dispise stories like this. having to go back all the time just to get further.

LINEEEEEEAAAAAAR.

Pretty good for a first story.