...In Love And War

Player Rating5.62/8

"#86 overall, #12 for 2012"
based on 1409 ratings since 05/24/2012
played 22,339 times (finished 1,537)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

You are a young woman whose betrothed has gone off to fight in the war. You dream of his return and pray for his safety every night. Before he left, you promised you would wait for him. But you begin to feel lonely. Now the question that eats away at you is not whether he is still alive or not, but whether you are willing to wait long enough to find out.

Note: There are three possible endings, but a few different ways to reach them. This is also my first storygame, so constructive criticism is appreciated.

Player Comments

The premise and even the outline of the story was good, but I found the execution lacking. I've been wanting to read a romance storygame that was more plot heavy and was less about one person's great love for another. I would have been interested in a proper love triangle. I felt as if the development of the woman's relationship with the brothers was not nearly developed enough to make a definitive choice. If the end choice was also meant to be a difficult decision, the story did not build up to that well. If not, than I think Tyson's courtship could have been more likeable, instead of pushy. Not having a clear idea of Issac's character did not help, either. In order for this story to work, there needed to be that emotional weight, which I could not get.

That being said, while I was not fond of the execution, the overall story was solid, made good use of conflict, and the setup was perfect and logical. The series of events that happen are reasonable and make sense. I could believe any of these scenarios could happen. While I do have some personal issues with how light of a read this was, everything you wrote was important. There wasn't anything superfluous. This story was by no means a bad one, but I wouldn't say it was one of the greats, either.
-- TaraGil on 10/2/2014 4:24:28 PM with a score of 0
First off- it was decently written, there was definite effort put into this story. I would certainly read more from this author. That said. . .
I didn't really like the protagonist, she was whiny and passive. Honestly, my biggest problem was that Tyson was creepy. I kept telling him no, and the story kept insisting that he loved me. I could get if the author was going for "the pressure of trying to stay faithful to your true love despite unwanted advances," but it felt like it wasn't just Tyson demanding my affection, but that the story/the author were also trying to insist that the "right" choice was to give in.
-- Sethaniel on 3/30/2014 2:02:42 PM with a score of 0
This was an amazing game!
-- JustinCasieCase on 11/17/2019 10:27:55 PM with a score of 0
um you where a little umm savage and you now why
-- hannah on 11/11/2019 7:37:02 PM with a score of 0
-- Moonyasnow on 10/31/2019 8:23:40 PM with a score of 0
it was a good story
-- sylvieallain19 on 9/19/2019 12:14:34 PM with a score of 0
-- dylandacalos on 6/30/2019 10:02:20 PM with a score of 0
Shorter than what I would normally have wanted in a love story, but, surprisingly, it gets the message across.

Very simple too, yet it quite effectively captures the setting of a lonely woman. I appreciate how it all seems to be very realistic; trying to resist temptation in a world where you're not even sure if and when it's all going to end.

Love stories aren't my forte, but it's pretty clear: this is a good work, no more, no less. You look like you'd have a good future here if you keep it up. Here's my token 6/8 to contribute. Cheers!
-- AgentX on 4/26/2019 7:43:30 PM with a score of 0
this story is the same thing that happend to my ex
-- serefina on 4/10/2019 11:24:06 AM with a score of 0
It was a great story...I should tell.First is I'm a loyal person when she say that she'll wait for him..I know that at the end I must be with Issac so I deny all option with Tyson but not all...I'm still concerned about Tyson health but not his feeling...he still need to think what better..Seeing your love one live happily is what you do when you love someone and can't have them....Ohh Tyson.
-- Ila on 2/7/2019 8:40:29 AM with a score of 0
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