...In Love And War

Player Rating5.63/8

"#88 overall, #12 for 2012"
based on 1449 ratings since 05/24/2012
played 23,079 times (finished 1,594)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

You are a young woman whose betrothed has gone off to fight in the war. You dream of his return and pray for his safety every night. Before he left, you promised you would wait for him. But you begin to feel lonely. Now the question that eats away at you is not whether he is still alive or not, but whether you are willing to wait long enough to find out.


Note: There are three possible endings, but a few different ways to reach them. This is also my first storygame, so constructive criticism is appreciated.

Player Comments

The premise and even the outline of the story was good, but I found the execution lacking. I've been wanting to read a romance storygame that was more plot heavy and was less about one person's great love for another. I would have been interested in a proper love triangle. I felt as if the development of the woman's relationship with the brothers was not nearly developed enough to make a definitive choice. If the end choice was also meant to be a difficult decision, the story did not build up to that well. If not, than I think Tyson's courtship could have been more likeable, instead of pushy. Not having a clear idea of Issac's character did not help, either. In order for this story to work, there needed to be that emotional weight, which I could not get.

That being said, while I was not fond of the execution, the overall story was solid, made good use of conflict, and the setup was perfect and logical. The series of events that happen are reasonable and make sense. I could believe any of these scenarios could happen. While I do have some personal issues with how light of a read this was, everything you wrote was important. There wasn't anything superfluous. This story was by no means a bad one, but I wouldn't say it was one of the greats, either.
-- TaraGil on 10/2/2014 4:24:28 PM with a score of 0
First off- it was decently written, there was definite effort put into this story. I would certainly read more from this author. That said. . .
I didn't really like the protagonist, she was whiny and passive. Honestly, my biggest problem was that Tyson was creepy. I kept telling him no, and the story kept insisting that he loved me. I could get if the author was going for "the pressure of trying to stay faithful to your true love despite unwanted advances," but it felt like it wasn't just Tyson demanding my affection, but that the story/the author were also trying to insist that the "right" choice was to give in.
-- Sethaniel on 3/30/2014 2:02:42 PM with a score of 0
Beautiful.
-- Fermosa on 6/3/2020 8:35:11 PM with a score of 0
Oh my....That was...something.

This wasn't the best, but certainly not the worst. Sure, it did have some moments where it didn't make sense or was a little too passionate and violent, but in the end, it was heartwarming, a mixture of good and evil, and overall a great first storygame!
-- AestheticLlama on 4/14/2020 3:26:29 PM with a score of 0
AMAZING story but it definitely still has room for improvement. Loved the love triangle based story but it was more of a straight line to Tyson....rather than a triangle. As much as I seriously enjoyed this book and lemme tell you.. I reallyyyy enjoyed it (please tell me you'll write an actual book)... but if you're going to write a piece with a love triangle there's got to be tension building up and making the decision between the two hard. A book where the reader decides in a good book but a book where the reader gets to think...HAS to think about their decision before they make it now that, my friend, is a great book. so basically I just wish Isaac had a bigger role rather than the only reason a reader might choose him is because of maybe obligation because they supposedly loved him before he left.. or just because they're betrothed... or because they don't want Isaac to injure himself, or they simply don't want to be a cheater. I felt no emotional tear when there was a decision. Tyson was always the one that appealed to me and probably to most readers. there was no emotional attachment to Isaac because we didn't really get to know him. besides this it was a great book and you are a SERIOUSLY talented author. keep up the good work and hopefully you'll see this even though it's now 2020...
-- Paige on 4/10/2020 12:48:32 AM with a score of 0
Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!! It was so sad but so happy I made so many bad things happen
-- Poe Rachel on 2/5/2020 5:35:07 PM with a score of 0
This was an amazing game!
-- JustinCasieCase on 11/17/2019 10:27:55 PM with a score of 0
um you where a little umm savage and you now why
-- hannah on 11/11/2019 7:37:02 PM with a score of 0
Nice
-- Moonyasnow on 10/31/2019 8:23:40 PM with a score of 0
it was a good story
-- sylvieallain19 on 9/19/2019 12:14:34 PM with a score of 0
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