The Challenge Rooms

I played it several times and got both endings. It was very interesting but it needs another ending not necessary to be a better one just another outcome.

It gave me a good laugh. The puzzles are not that good, but that doesn't matter when you have every oppurtunity to mess with the instructor. Yeah, gotta bump up the score on this one.

Pretty good story. Is there a “good” ending though? I could only find the meh and evil ending.

I think it was very good for your first time! Next time I would give more details on the main character but other wise it's great!

Overall, your writing is pretty good. There are a few misspelled words, but not many. I wish there was more story to your game though. We start with no idea of who our character is or how we ended up in this place, and that's never really explained. Even more problematic is your lack of endings. We can either die by failing (which is hard to do without trying because they're fairly easy puzzles), there's an evil ending or a meh ending. There's no option for a good ending, no way of winning, not even an option to even sacrificing yourself

"Meh ending
Congratulations, you have reached the meh ending! You aren't really bad, but you aren't really good.

This is my first ever Chose Your Own Story, you you know what that means...

Tear it apart! Please, tell me everything I did wrong and what I need to work on. That way, I can learn what to do for bigger, better projects!"

It is indeed a pretty good game with an interesting story and a wise twist. I think that explains much about the doll of the Saw series, so it wasn't a haunting but rather a 'live circuit' after-all! LoL! ;) 5/8

Pretty good for a first time story. I couldn't find a good ending if there is one. Just the 2 endings. This could be a good beginning to a series of escape type stories.

This doesn't seem like a first story; it's like you've been doing this a long time! Super awesome story. The story line was great and the endings were perfect. Amazing job!!

It's your first ever storygame, so you want me to tear it apart. Normally I would be brutal, but... there's not much wrong with this story.

Very clever. Great idea, well executed. Aside from a couple grammatical errors, I can't find anything wrong with this...

Love the ending. Definitely will be recommending to friends. Please make more games. You've got talent.

Wow, this was a pretty fun read. Even though this was your first storygame, I can tell you put thought and effort into it (something I sadly don't find much of). You do need a bit of tweaking, but there's nothing seriously wrong with this story at all. Like with most first storytellers, I recommend reading a bunch of storygames in genres that you like, to get a feel of dos and don'ts. Other than that, keep going. I see some potential for future stories here.