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A poem I wrote

2 months ago
I wrote this poem and want to see what people think! Please give me suggestions on things I can improve and things you don't like about the poem. I know it's kind of sad but I was depressed when I wrote this.

I have this fear that I will never be free.
I have these nightmares that haunts my dreams.
They break me and hate me, tear me apart.
They make me feel like I'm not smart.
I tell myself I'll be alright but the truth is I'm dying inside.
I have this fear that finds a way into my mind and under my skin.
When will these nightmares come to an end?
I can't tell others how I feel, it might hurt them, or tear them, or break them within.
I can't seem to get to win.
I can't fight the nightmares I have
They have demons and monsters that break my mind
The demons tell me that I'm not enough.
The monsters ask me when will I give up.
The darkness wants to swallow me whole.
It never wants to let go.
The only escape os when I'm asleep 'cause the nightmares I have are not real dreams.
People tell me that dreams come true but they forgot to tell me nightmares are a kind of dream to.

A poem I wrote

2 months ago
It doesn't rhyme

A poem I wrote

2 months ago
I plan to add music to it so it's going to be a song but yes I know it doesn't rhyme very well.

A poem I wrote

2 months ago
It doesn't rhyme at all

A poem I wrote

2 months ago

A poem I wrote

2 months ago

I wonder what he was doing on that computer.

A poem I wrote

2 months ago
Trying to buy more GME stock on Robinhood.

A poem I wrote

2 months ago
In the 90s and early 2000s, many people did think the data they were angry at lived inside the monitor.

A poem I wrote

2 months ago

It does say "The only escape os" after all.

A poem I wrote

2 months ago
Omg, it does... I am so sorry. I made a typo...

A poem I wrote

2 months ago
That typo ruined the poem for me and I actually can't stand you right now. I'm going to actively seek to cancel you.

A poem I wrote

2 months ago
I'm sorry, it was an accident. I didn't mean to make a typo. Please forgive me...

A poem I wrote

2 months ago

Seriously, Ford is totally crazy when it comes to typos.  He's merciless.  Ford, this seems like an innocent one.  You can let it go.

A poem I wrote

2 months ago

I like it, but I have to agree with enterpride: it doesn't rhyme.

A poem I wrote

2 months ago
Maybe meter is too advanced to worry about right now, but you can improve the flow of things like this a lot just by getting your syllable counts consistent.

A poem I wrote

2 months ago
Okay, Thank you!

A poem I wrote

2 months ago

I recommend reading a lot of great poetry.  Just work your way through the Norton Anthology.  That will teach you more than anything anyone could tell you here.