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Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

Week Five! For anyone who doesn't know: this will thread will contain a week's worth of writing exercises to be completed each day. I'll give out 5 points per regular exercise, 10 points per bonus exercise, and 15 per "super bonus" exercises. You may do as few or as many of the exercises as you want. Anyone is allowed to join up at any time, but please let me know in a PM if you want to be added to our tag and scoring list.  

Our goal here: Ultimately, fun, but I very strongly believe that the encouragement of your peers, a little friendly competition, and some light-goal setting combined with consistent practice is an excellent path to becoming a better writer.

ONE IMPORTANT RULE: DO NOT REPLY TO ANY OTHER WRITER'S POST. I will indicate where to reply to post your work and if you want to praise a fellow writer, please do it in the appropriate "feedback thread" that I posted. We don't want writing posts locked here, it isn't fair to people who want to edit later.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

Monday! Late, I know. I was out cold when I got home from work this morning and it took a while for me to remember that I was re-starting this week. Also, I haven't forgotten about scoring last week, I've just been sincere about that break.

Anyway, let's get started with our theme. It's Monster Week! For today, we'll begin with the concept of planning. Pick a group of characters, either pre-established in your stories or just made-up on the spot, then write a zombie apocalypse strategy for survival and how well it would go for them.

Bonus: if it goes badly, write a scene about the last survivor's final thoughts, if it goes well, write a scene that's set a month after the end of the apocalypse from the POV of anyone in the group.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

@31TeV @ecoLyte @TheNewIAP @Ogre11 @SpartacustheGreat @Morgan_R @Swiftstryker @betaband @nmelssx @Sethaniel @Malkalack @Briar_Rose @MatGods @Wolfmist @bjhovey @AWarriorFan @FazzTheMan @Claw2k11 @Romulus @ISentinelPenguinI @GrottyStatute74 @WarriorCatsRPS @Confused @jamescoker1226 @pinkalily21 @NeoTheCreator

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

"Well, family. Man's arrogance and tolerance for queers has finally paid off, as God has elected to smite this with righteous zombification. Nuthin's changin'. I still expect you to follow MY orders. I'm the man of the house, still. We  gonna go to Jeb's farm, first. We gon'  pick up his guns, an' shit.

No, dammit. You may NOT go out with his boyfriend, you sinful whore!

Then, we gon' head home and pray for a little while. Mebbe God will show mercy on us if we pray real hard.

Anyway, - would you shut the FUCK up? I don't care what kinda dance you want to go to. - we gonna put up fences and shit. Zombies are slow and stupid, 'cause God punished the drunkards, gluttons and atheists first. I never met a left-wing atheist pussy who done a day of hard work.

Then, we gonna eat the neighbour's cow. He's a black, so he doesn't get to own no property. God made Man in his own, image after all. He ain't really a person, once ya get down to thinkin' bout it.

Also, remember to keep Jeremiah alive. He needs to repent for his queerness 'fore he gets chewed on."

Found in the wreckage of an old farm, twenty-years post zombie assault.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

Lily age 10

Micheal age 15

Sarah age 18

Cara age 18

James age 23

Lisa age 48

Don age 35.  Died on Day 2

Zoey age 13 Died on Day 2

DJ age 20 Died on Day 3

Melvin age 75 Died on Day 5

Devin age 21 Died on Day 7

Vicky age 42 Left On Day 8

Murriel age 72 Died on Day 15

Julie age 56 Died Day 42

Tyler age 16 Died Day 129,

Group formed day one of the Apocalypse. 

Plan to survive:

1) Gather weapons stealthily Managed with two causalties 

2) Start to clear mall of zombies Managed with three causalties 

3) Gather food and medicine Completed 

4) Finish clearing mall of zombies Completed with some injurires 

5) Build defenses to keep hostiles out One left, good riddance 

6) Figure out generator Completed with one causalty

7) Train kids to defend and take care of themselves Ccompleted with one serious injury

9) Survive until Apocalypse is over Completed with 2 causalties 

- Written on the wall of Swayville Mall in the food court.

 

We survived. I never thought we would. I thought we wouldn't last the first month. Maybe James was right to take the position as leader after I broke down when Zoey died. Maybe his ways of doing things were correct, even if I thought it was wrong at the time. Maybe the only way we survived was to leave a trail of bodies behind us. I can only see images of other survivors, of mothers and children that we killed. Sure, we never held a gun to their heads and pulled the trigger, but we couldn't pretend that raiding other's supplies and denying entrance to our sanctuary hadn't resulted in more than a few dozen deaths. We sacrificed others so we could live.

The man sitting in front of me is a monster. His true image would be covered in blood and guts that he feasted upon. We should all be such beasts. We're alive and it's over. We're the last monsters left. The military group escorting us to the evac zone doesn't know. We'll just cause more misery. We're stained, ruined, unsavagable. 

 

 

 

 

 

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago
Chuck: The big guy with the guns. He has lots of guns. He has lots of ammo. And he knows how to use them. He doesn't really have anything else. But he has a lot of guns.

Julie: Julie has other "assets." You know, the type of assets that bring in the 18-25 year-old male crowd. And why not, we'll go ahead and make her the blonde, too.

Mike: He is the brains of the group. He is skinny, but he can think through most problems.

Sally & Jim: They are the couple that are always together, Sally usually grabbing Jim and getting in his way. But hey, she's scared. They're going to be the first to die, you just know it.

Fred: Fred is the fat guy who thinks he has a chance with Julie. In fact, he will likely come back later in the story as a zombie, still trying to get Julie to like him.

Strategy:
In this case, they each have their own strategy:

Chuck: Shoot the zombies in the face. All of them. Then shoot them again.
Julie: Run and hide behind Chuck.
Mike: Knowing zombies are dumb and slow, outwit them and evade them.
Sally & Jim: They don't really believe in the zombie apocalypse, so they don't have any strategy.
Fred: His strategy is to have a snack, get Julie to like him, and live happily ever after.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago
Bonus:

Mike sat up in the attic of the small farmhouse. He couldn't believe they got Chuck. He never thought they'd get Chuck. He just kept shooting and shooting, and the zombies just kept coming and coming. There was so much carnage. Mike gagged a little as the images flashed through his mind yet again. Then he thought of Julie. She was nice, most of the time, and he really liked her...but then that image of her with half her face missing appeared in his mind yet again. He shook his head and tried to focus on the farmhouse. He could hear them downstairs, "Brains... brains..." They must be able to smell him somehow, and he was already in the attic. There was nowhere else for him to go now...

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

Day 1 - Dusk

Where to begin? I never thought a day like this would come. The dead walking the streets, eating people alive or transforming them into fellow zombies with their infectious bites. I knew something bad was coming, but I never foresaw this. Even as a believer in magic and other supernatural things, I'm having a hard time accepting this. I am a magician after all, I know how easy it is to deceive others with some misdirection. This could easily just be some biological weapon gone wrong, or a natural disease that's mutated to this state. I'm no scientist, but I've read enough books to come up with such theories.

Why am I writing this? Well, to keep myself sane I suppose. I was fortunate enough to find this unused diary (such a waste) in one of the houses our group scavenged and it seemed as good a way to pass the time as any. There's not much else I can while we wait here for the zombie horde to pass, except think, and that I can do while writing. Leader actually loved the idea of me writing in this, though that's due to his visions of grandeur. He expects this will become an epic tale of our survival by the end of all this. As naive as he is, I hope he's right.

On the note of our fearless leader, I suppose I should document our group's current composition. I'll start with Leader and just work my way down in order of group seniority.

Leader

Male, 26-years old

The heart and soul of our group. He used to have a small street gang which is why he has a knack for leadership and urban survival. Apparently he gave up his real name long ago and proclaimed himself “Leader”, and has been such ever since. I must admit it's a great way to discourage competition, especially when you're so effective. The man's just as skilled with his fists and anything he can carry as he is with a firearm. His favorite weapon however is a shovel, which he puts to good use against the zombies. A quick sweep to knock them down then a thrust and stomp to finish them off.

His greatest trait however is that he never gives up, no matter how grim things get. He's pulled more than one of us out of despair with his pep-talks, even after terrible losses. I just wish that didn't come at the price of naivety. He has good instincts and street smarts, and is even good at battle tactics, but the man doesn't know when to quit. His belief that effort and courage can overcome anything may just get him killed one day... probably in an attempt to save the rest of us. I hope that day doesn't come.

Wrench

Female, 25-years old

The mechanic of our group. She was part of Leader's gang since she was a little girl and grew up with him on the streets. Despite this, she's worked numerous jobs including being a car mechanic and a blacksmith's apprentice. Add to that her ability to throw almost anything with deadly effect along with her brawling experience, and she's an invaluable member of our group. Leader never puts her in the thick of the action, which is understandable as they are lovers, but she can nonetheless hold her own when necessary.

On more than one occasion she's saved one of us with a well-aimed rock or tool to a zombie's head. Her favorite weapon is her a wrench, which explains how she got her name. It seems to be tradition in Leader's gang for him to rename people based on their traits. At any rate, while Wrench is one tough woman, she also has a tender side. She disguises it in the form of lectures and rants, but she fusses over us after every battle to make sure we're okay. I am beginning to understand how a street gang can feel like family, assuming you're in a good one.

Numbers

Male, 32-years old

The brains of the group. I was shocked to learn that he used to be an accountant at a prestigious bank. Apparently he'd been suffering from severe depression for years and one day ended up wandering into a bad part of town while in a drunken stupor. Leader found him and recruited him into his gang. Being around Leader and co must have fixed his depression, because he's quit drinking and seems perfectly stable. In fact he's the least emotional person in our group, which makes me wonder how he became so depressed to begin with.

Regardless, he's been an incredible boon to us. His skill for rapidly calculating numbers and odds in his head has helped with both inventory management and swift tactical decisions in the heat of battle. He always knows how much of any vital supply we have left, including ammunition and explosives, and he keeps accurate count of known zombie populations in each city block. He's even started mapping out the city.

His only short-coming at this point is he's not much of a fighter. He can't handle melee combat and while he's gotten some practice in Leader's gang, he's still not great with a firearm. That hardly matters though as Leader doesn't put him in danger. Further, Numbers does something far more important than calculations or combat: keeping Leader out of trouble. Whenever Leader comes up with a ridiculous plan, Numbers always pulls him back to reality with some hard numbers and facts. Given how stubborn Leader can be, it's fortunate that he always heeds Numbers' advice. I must admit amusement at Leader's choice of names for his people. I can't say it's not fitting though.

Khan

Male, 24-years old

The magician of the group. Ah, my entry, what to say? I'm so much better at writing about others than myself. I'm a magician by trade, well, retired magician. I started working odd jobs after I quit. I still love magic, mine and the supernatural variety, but I just couldn't keep performing for people who didn't appreciate my work. Each performance would have one less believer and one more skeptic, trying to analyze my tricks and reveal how they work to everyone else, spoiling the show. With the prevalence of magic tricks being broken down and exposed on the internet, it was a losing battle for me.

It's not all bad though, the skills I've learned from those days have proven surprisingly useful in these apocalyptic times. Not only am I excellent at keeping up morale with my performances, but I can also think of many a disappearing act to pull on zombies, a far less analytical audience. Misdirection is incredibly effective against them, and my use of it has allowed us to maneuver through even heavily infested portions of the city. All it takes is a little noise and light, then one zombie's attention is drawn and shortly all others will follow. I don't think they have any sort of pack instinct, but the active sounds of one inevitably seems to lure the others. At any rate, I suppose I'm both the entertainer and strategist of the group. I plan out our shows with the zombie horde and ensure we're always a step ahead of our audience.

As far as combat is concerned, I'm a lover, not a fighter. Nonetheless, I did some fencing back in the day, so I can at least keep zombies at bay with a light melee weapon and my aim isn't bad with a gun. I'm still nervous firing them, but hopefully I'll improve with practice. Hmm, what else? Ah yes, I am also quite good at scouting and scavenging. A magician's eye is ideal for picking out the goods among the wreckage, as well as detecting potential traps. Both natural and artificial. It's not just the zombies we have to worry about, fellow humans can be just as much of an issue.

As for how I joined the group, well, I was actually trying to hide out in my home until things blew over. A foolish endeavor in hindsight, but I wasn't confident of my chances of survival on the streets alone. It is therefore fortunate that Leader decided to raid my apartment complex for supplies and stumbled upon me in his search. He was surprisingly diplomatic in our encounter despite having broken down my door and keeping me in his gun's line of fire. It took a while for me to calm down and adjust to the situation, but Leader has a way of making one feel welcome. Soon, his gang was like family to me, and it's been too long since I've felt a part of one.

There's not much else to say about me, other than I suppose a clarification about my name. I am not related to the Mongolians in any manner, honestly I don't know why my father named me that, but it doesn't matter. It's my name and I'm used to it, and Leader has graciously allowed me to keep it as it allows me to respond quickly to being called. I suppose it helps that my name is rather easy to remember and can be spoken with haste. At any rate, that's all I have to say about myself for now. I sincerely hope I live to make another entry and perhaps to elaborate further on my past. I've always wanted to write an autobiography.

Felix

Male, 5-years old

My dear Felix, what a wonderful companion he's been in these hard times. Not only is he fully capable of feeding himself, but he has repeatedly saved my life by warning me of unseen dangers. Zombies playing dead, floors ready to collapse and scentless gas leaks, he's kept me clear of them all. Truly, those who say dog is man's best friend know nothing of cats. I suppose it helps that I trained him since birth, and he seems unnaturally intelligent even so, but I can't imagine any other animal filling the same role. There's nothing quite like petting a purring cat in your lap after a tiring day of fighting zombies and scavenging ruins. Nor can a dog hope to easily escape the dangers we face like a cat can. I must admit that I dread the day my precious black cat's luck runs out, but so far he's come out of every occasion unscathed. I've even convinced the others that he's bad luck for our enemies. An amusing superstition that I'm starting to believe myself. Well, he has always been my lucky charm.

Eel

Male, 20-years old

The electrician of the group. He was recruited about a week after I was. We found him hiding out in a warehouse, holed up with some supplies and a gas-powered generator. The man was almost living in luxury with all those electronics! That seems to be his passion as well, and he's been a great asset to us since joining. The warehouse itself has served as an excellent new base of operations, and his talent for taking apart and repairing all things electrical has helped us get a significant edge over the zombies and other survivors. He helped rig up a system to electrify the chain-link fence surrounding the area, and while we've had to ration the fuel supply for power, watching some old movies on the TV together certainly did wonders for our spirits.

In the time he's spent with us he's been training for combat and seems to have a talent for firearms. Must be all those video games he's played. That man's reflexes are second-to-none, which has made him an excellent scout. In addition, his favorite weapon is a tazer, and while it isn't very helpful against the undead, it has made recruitment far easier for us. Thanks to its non-lethal nature, we can afford to shoot first and recruit later, which means a much lower chance of us getting shot first. A final quirk worth writing about is Eel seems to be completely devoid of passion or emotion most of the time. Show him anything electric though and he's giddier than a schoolgirl on prom night. I've begun incorporating the occasional sparks in my nightly performances and I must say his excited reactions are terribly amusing. Oh, and as for his name? He chose that as soon as Leader introduced the idea. Leader liked it, and so it stuck.

Zaz

Male, 17-years old

The scavenger of the group. He's the most recent addition to our merry band. The poor boy was absolutely traumatized when we found him, and I certainly understand why. He and his family had been managing to survive by scavenging in a safer part of town and avoiding conflict, but they were soon found by what I can only describe as monsters. Worse than zombies in many respects, these degenerates, these insults to humanity, this gang of heartless thugs captured the lot of them and... I can hardly bear to write about it.

I suppose I'll put it bluntly, his mother was raped in front of them, after which his father was killed. His mother kept him alive by threatening to kill herself if they touched him. It is unfortunate we couldn't save her, but we had no idea they would start killing innocent people when we first encountered them. Zaz only survived because he was locked up at the time, and we were able to finish them off before they got to him. Needless to say we welcomed him to the group and have been trying to help him recover.

It's been about a month since that time, and while he's no longer in shock, he's psyche is still rather fragile. He is constantly on edge and I fear the tension will kill him before the zombies do, but it does have its advantages. Out of everyone in the group, Zaz is the most alert, and can always be counted on to keep watch. I dare say he's even better at detecting an ambush than my cat, if only because he's so paranoid that he considers possibilities we'd never entertain before it's even a problem. It can be tiresome, but it has honestly helped us avoid some trouble and I can't fault him for it after his experience.

In combat, Zaz is an absolute coward, but still surprisingly effective. I wouldn't trust him with any sort of firearm, but Wrench has been teaching him to throw things and he's become rather good at it. Given his penchant for picking up anything of interest, he's never short on projectiles either. On the note of which, the boy has a real talent for scavenging. He doesn't even seem to realize how useful the items he picks up are, but whenever we're in a pinch he usually has what need somewhere in his overstuffed backpack.

Like Numbers, Zaz tends to be kept out of combat if it can be helped. Leader also allowed him to keep his name, given the trauma with his mother. It's an easy enough name to remember anyway. The last thing of note about Zaz is he's incredibly superstitious. It took tremendous effort on my part to convince him that he was not in any danger from my cat. Thankfully I was able to convince him with the saying that black cats grant luck on approach and take it away when they leave. It's led to him being unwilling to go anywhere without Felix around, but that's a small price to pay. I sincerely hope we can help him through his issues someday.

Day 2 - Dawn

Oh my, have I really been writing that long? I suppose so. There was more to cover than I thought, and I suppose I do ramble even on paper. Well, I should wrap this up. Leader is calling everyone to discuss our next move. The zombie horde seems to have moved on, but we can't be sure until we do some scouting. I'll check on Felix and see if he's at all skittish before we even consider going out. Whatever happens, I'm glad I was able to become a part of this family. I have faith in our group and I believe we can survive this, but if not, I have no regrets.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

Sarah sat down on the ledge, her legs dangling down over a hundred floors above the rest of the world.  They were barefoot, as recommended by Thomas, and her pale toes wriggled in delight as the updraft tickled them.

She'd kill for a cig now, but she had to keep herself in check.  She promised him she'd get out of the habit, starting with cutting the patches' size into halves, now quarters.  Soon she'd be doing eighths, and then thirty-secondths.

The process would be taking the rest of the year.

[TBC]

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

Tuesday!

Monster madness continues! Let's talk vampirism. Not just blood sucking, but the more sensual versions such as the incubi and succubi demons, and the more "practical" versions of feeding off of others, like extortion, manipulation / using people, bullying, or 'feeding' off others emotionally in general.

Write five sentences concerning at least two of the above examples.

Bonus: write a full scene about a "feeding" and the "vampire's" thoughts on it.  

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

@31TeV @ecoLyte @TheNewIAP @Ogre11 @SpartacustheGreat @Morgan_R @Swiftstryker @betaband @nmelssx @Sethaniel @Malkalack @Briar_Rose @MatGods @Wolfmist @bjhovey @AWarriorFan @FazzTheMan @Claw2k11 @Romulus @ISentinelPenguinI @GrottyStatute74 @WarriorCatsRPS @Confused @jamescoker1226 @pinkalily21 @NeoTheCreator

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago
1. "Look, buddy, I really don't care much about that -- I say you were speeding, and you're going to pay me cash now, or I'm going to take you to jail."

2. Julie pouted, "Oh, come on Jimmy, please...pretty please?"

3. Timmy cried, "Of course I love you, now help me with this project, won't you?"

4. "Yeah, that's wrong, come on, everyone storm the police station!"

5. "And you, too, can have the automatic thingy for only three easy payments of $49.99 -- but wait, there's more!"

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago
Bonus:

John looked around and realized that they were alone. It was just him and the cop. The cop repeated himself, "Pay or jail, your choice pal."

John said, "Hey, do you take VISA?"

The cop didn't even crack a smile and replied, "Three seconds and I'm going to drag you out of the car and claim you hit me."

John scrambled about for his wallet and pulled out all the cash he had: $62. He handed it to the cop.

The cop took it and said, "That'll do this time. But if you want to drive through this county in the future, you better carry some more cash than that. Now get lost."

John quickly sped off as the cop returned to his car. He counted the money and called on the radio, "Hey, Fred, I got us a little more. I'm buying the beer tonight."

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

They say that, as you grow older, time seems to pass more quickly. I have come to learn that this unfortunate effect persists even after you stop physically aging. What I perceive as seconds, a normal human perceives as a lifetime. This horrifies me in a way. In the first two centuries after my "death", I formed many long-lived relationships with human women, but each one grew subsequently shorter, even if it lasted twice as long. I've tried prolonging my relationships through...obvious means...but it seems that while I show the traits of vampirism, I am not a carrier. This is unfortunate, but I can not say that it is uncommon among vampires. The others, those who can pass on their vampirism, call us "dry bites".

I digress, though. I still occasionally go into town for "company". I've gradually, learned, though, the pointlessness of extending a relationship beyond the satisfaction of my physical needs. There is a certain brothel owner who allows me to "keep" some of her girls. It was hard to reach that understanding with her, until I demonstrated that she was no less disposable to me than any of her employees. I find it quite annoying that normal, death-fearing humans think they still have leverage over me. I often find myself having to show them that I am not bound by their mortal fears of death or loss.

Feeding is an issue as well. I often do feed from the whores I sleep with, but as the issue of disposing of the bodies can be quite troublesome, I try to find other sources of nutrition. I have found that bribing guards can result in a few prisoners "escaping from custody and ending up with a few oddly shaped bullet holes in the neck". No fuss, no extra cleanup needed.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

Audio excerpt: Hospital room security camera, 2:30 AM, date unspecified.

They call me a monster... And maybe I am, but I do my best nowadays. It's not like I want to do it.

I've been here in cellular form ever since the first life on earth began, and I grew with the wildlife. When the dinosaurs rolled around, there I was, an inescapable pair of jaws. I was always in the form of the dominant species on earth. It changed when Homo Sapiens became the dominant life form. I was different back then. I once had an animal's body, with an animal's brain. I didn't know what I was doing, and I didn't give a shit. I killed to live, I killed so that other creatures could live. Just swallowed them up. It's easy, you know, once you're able to do it... Too easy...

But it's different now, because you humans think. and now, so do I....

I'll be honest with you, I don't know where they go, or what happens, I just know that once I became sapient, like you, I've had thousands of years to think about what I've done. I've had thousands of years trapped in a body alone. I've been branded insane, lynched, shot at, swung at, burnt. It seems the only people willing to sit down and talk with me are people like you. Sick, dying people who were about to see me anyway. It's kind of funny, you know, how addicted to life we all are...

Oh, I'm sorry, I didn't mean to scare you. Really, I didn't. Please don't make this harder than it is...  I'm so sorry...

... I... I wish I could touch people. Not even as a carnal thing, I'm fine with being alone. I've been alone for literally a billion years... I'd give the world just to be able to shake someone's hand, to pat them on the back, give them a hug, anything, for the love of all things good, just to make it less ... Impersonal, or at least less rude... But I can't. Not without killing you, at least.

Sorry, I've been rambling on for a while now. Don't add me to the burden you bare... By the time the sun rises, this'll just seem like a dream anyway...

I just thought that... Maybe it would be nice if I came a few days early. A forewarning, y'know? Just promise me you'll say your goodbyes, and get your affairs in order as best you can, promise me you'll sleep well. Heh, "Live like there's no tomorrow!" as they say. Just promise me you'll be ready when I... When I really have to be here. It would make my year...

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

Wednesday! (I need a damn vacation from work.)

Monster Madness 3, Boogey's revenge: We've already touched on zombies and vampires, so you knew this one was coming, I'm sure. Lyncanthropy! Pick or make a character who has a change they can't control. Into an animal? A man? A woman? Or is it something more subtle? Describe the character, their change, how it inconveniences them, and what triggers it.

Bonus: write a scene where it benefits them for a change.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

@31TeV @ecoLyte @TheNewIAP @Ogre11 @SpartacustheGreat @Morgan_R @Swiftstryker @betaband @nmelssx @Sethaniel @Malkalack @Briar_Rose @MatGods @Wolfmist @bjhovey @AWarriorFan @FazzTheMan @Claw2k11 @Romulus @ISentinelPenguinI @GrottyStatute74 @WarriorCatsRPS @Confused @jamescoker1226 @pinkalily21 @NeoTheCreator

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago
I wasn't always like this. I was born normal, and I was happy once. Everyone treated me as an equal - some even looked up to me - but it's disturbingly easy for that to change. Once I became... like this, the freak of nature that I am, there was no place in the pack for me. I'm really no different inside than I was before, but they don't care about that. I'm different, and different scares them.

It wasn't right of them to outcast me like that, but looking in the lake at the reflection of myself, I can see why they did. I look hideous. Every time the full moon comes out all my hairs fall out. My face contorts and squashes into itself. My teeth dull and become horribly rounded. My paws grow out of control and protrude into grotesque, spindly little digits. Worst of all, my tale rots away and falls off, smelling putrid and leaking blood all over the place. I turn away from the lake to look into the woods.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

Peter was always a normal guy. That was up until the day when he discovered his powers. He was sitting in his high school math class, trying not to fall asleep. Not a fan of math, it took most of his energy to do that. His teacher was absorbed in his work. 

"And this, class, is how you multiply by ninety-two." he explained.

Ninety-two.

Ninety-two.

Ninety-two.

Ninety-two.

NINETY-TWO!!!!!!

His eyes turned red. The tips of his fingers turned black. Suddenly, his entire body burst into flames. He wasn't hurt, but the same couldn't be said for his desk. Students jumped from their seats in surprise.

Peter was a human torch.

 

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

I've never lost control entirely. Contrary to what others would like to think, the thoughts don't go away; they just become...simpler. With enough practice, you can maintain a good bit of your mindfulness and avoid any problems. Sadly, by the time you get to that point, there will already have been a few accidents, and people likely won't forgive you for those. I don't think I've ever done anything to push myself beyond the point of redemption, but there are a few things I can tell you from experience and observation:

  1. If you feel the dread of transformation coming on, isolate yourself and remove your clothes. This may sound strange, but if people see a wild animal tearing through someone's clothes, they're going to jump to conclusions. Fold your clothes neatly, set them aside, and wait.
  2. Don't eat chocolate, at all. A lot of us take the form of a wolf or something similar. Needless to say, there are certain things that don't mix with your lupine physiology, and you don't want those things in your body when you change.
  3. If you meet someone with apparent transformation issues, befriend them. It helps to have someone who can clean up after you, hide you during your transformations, and, if worse comes to worse, offer you a chance to die with dignity, rather than at the hands of a mob. Of course, you should be willing to return the favor.
  4. Do not schedule wilderness retreats in the middle of a trophy hunting season. That sounds like a joke, but you wouldn't believe how many lives mistakes like that cost. Though, if you can find a safe opportunity to isolate yourself from society, take it. You will do less damage outdoors and have time to get better acquainted with your transformations.

I hope that the knowledge I have gained from my errors will keep you safe. Many of us have died due to either foolish mistakes or lack of knowledge. We do not need to.

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9 years ago

Blog update:

Just a tip, never trust a bored and/or broke wizard.

I decided that I really didn't want to put up with that shit every 28 days. It was painful, disgusting, drove me insane, and I wanted absolutely nothing to do with the weirdoes on the internet who were actually into that kind of thing... Not that I ever actually encountered those people, but I'm not sure if all 250 of the ones on 4chan could've been joking... 

When Marlow, or "Merlin" as the local frat calls him, casually threw out the idea that it was possible to get rid of my period without being an anorexic, of course I agreed. The condition was that the magic would only work if I gave him $20 and if I was willing to exchange one form of suffering for another. But neither of us were... At our best, mentally at the time, if you know what I mean.

I thought he was just going to give me drugs, like he usually did with other students, but it turns out, he's an actual wizard, and the alligator on his ceiling isn't actually an extravagant party decoration... Of course there was a ritual, I ate a raw steak off of God knows what with God knows what on it, and a bunch of other thngs I wouldn't like to talk about just in case anyone actually tries this... Anyway, when it was over Marlow told me that I wouldn't be all that different when it happens now, (that smartass!) but I wouldn't have to feel any pain. And that asswipe even had the nerve to make it sync up with the full moon!

I guess you can tell by now that he made me a werewolf, and that he's moved a few states away now. To be fair, it's not really that horrible. I only got attacked by a priest once, I get a lot of unwanted attention from furries, and the Hungarian foreign exchange student happened to be descended from a long line of lawyer/doctor/monster-slayers. But I've cleared the air with the priest and Helsing junior, and hopefully if they ever try to kill me it'll be because of real interpersonal problems and not supernatural racism, so really there's only one problem.

Although I don't like spending the whole evening as a dumb-as-bricks animal with superhuman abilities. I mean, it's fun for a while, but you'll find yourself missing your advanced motor skills soon enough. Especially when your family treats you like a real dog. I can't tell you how many times I've woken up tied to a tree in our yard. Or in a freakin' dog's bed, for that matter. It's also really, really awkward at parties. You know, like when you go out  by accident and forget what day it is?

But really, the biggest problem I have is when people make a big deal out of it. I mean, yes, it's a really big deal, but, I'm tired of answering stupid questions. That's the real curse! If I had known this would have happened, I would have bound myself up in a room every full-mooned night in order to keep the secret from getting out, just like the stereotypical werewolf good guys.

Other than that, it's okay. I don't get really big and rip my clothes or anything. Sometimes I shed, if I'm wearing skinny jeans my, uh, fur can chafe a little. If I don't set myself up for a wardrobe malfunction, it usually doesn't happen. I guess that's all a dude thing. Not that I know if there actually are any other werewolves out there... If you ever actually see "me" out on the streets somewhere, note that I'm usually wearing a collar with some phone numbers on it. Don't be afraid to approach, I don't bite. In fact, people taste like crap. Not that I've actually eaten a person, but I don't find myself very appealing. Just try not to be too big and imposing, my Id doesn't like that one bit. Call the number(s) on my collar, and send me home, my friends and/or family will be there to pick me up eventually.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

All I did was look over at the desk beside me. The kid is drawing a tree. It's a terrible tree, but it's fairly distinguishable as a tree. Then my head started to hurt. Really fucking bad. I couldn't scream or do anything, I had no control over the body. That's when I picked up the pencil. I drew the most beautiful island I had ever seen. It was so real. After a few minutes of drawing, I noticed a silence. I had been drawing for hours. Everyone had left. I'd been in this shitty art room for hours. Every single piece of paper in the room had art on it. I was never good at art, but these pieces were beautiful. Did I do this? I must've, no one else was here. I picked one up, it was a woman standing posing for a portrait. I'd never seen her in my life.

I drove home, everyone in my house was asleep. I picked up a guitar that had been gathering dust for years. I looked up a video on YouTube of someone playing guitar, just to see what happened. I woke up later with the guitar in my hands, but nothing to show for it. I tried it again but this time set up a camera. When I woke up I played the video. It made my cry. It was the most beautiful song I had ever heard.  Since then I've done this with math, cooking, singing, science, and everything else I could think of. Everything in life now is somewhat a letdown. No one is as good as me. I haven't eaten for weeks. They put me in a hospital bed. They didn't think I'd survive. It was a miracle.

In the hospital bed, they let me watch TV. One of the nurses put on a show. No. This can't be happening. I try and change the channel, but it's just a little to slow. Why did it have to be fucking Dexter?

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago
Character: Phil Jones

A change they cannot control: A turtle. Oh, and Phil doesn't turn into some super-powerful Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtle, oh no. Phil turns into a plan box turtle. You know, the slow reptile. Oh, and because it's beyond the capability of his lycanthropical powers, he doesn't even get a shell. Yes, Phil turns into a large, slow turtle without a shell.

How it inconveniences him: Really? Do I need to expand on this? Tell me how much you would like to be a turtle without a shell, the only cool thing about being a turtle?

What triggers it: A sneeze. Yes, really. Fortunately for Phil, even the transformation is slow (he is a were-turtle, you know), so he usually has time to sneak away before the transformation is complete. He usually turns back after a certain amount of time (around an hour most of the time), but sometimes even that can be a little... slow...

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9 years ago
Bonus:

By the time he spotted the pepper shaker, it was too late. He reached up his hand to stop her, but Gwendolyn ("Just call me Gee") was already shaking it, and pepper was going all over the place. She kept talking the whole time: "And I do like pepper. Do you like pepper? I think it makes everything taste great. I put it on everything. I don't know why everyone doesn't put it on everything. My mother says that it even tastes good on ice cream. I only like it on some flavors of ice cream..."

Phil looked over at "Gee" and sighed while he sneezed at the same time. He'd never understand why he agreed to go on this date. The woman was beyond insufferable. But he promised, so here he was. At least now he had a real reason to get out of the date. He felt his body start the long, slow transformation. He wondered, briefly, what "Gee" would do if she saw him transform right in front of her. He figured she probably wouldn't stop talking and might not even notice.

He stood up and waited for a pause in the "conversation." Gee kept talking, so he just walked away, headed for the bathroom, wondering if the drains in the restaurant's bathroom would be large enough for him to sneak out after he transformed...

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

Thursday! (I mean it. I need a vacation. They're trying to kill me.)

Tomato in the mirror! Write a scene about a character unknowingly becoming something that they once hated or feared.

Bonus: write their reaction once they realize the truth about what they are now.

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9 years ago

@31TeV @ecoLyte @TheNewIAP @Ogre11 @SpartacustheGreat @Morgan_R @Swiftstryker @betaband @nmelssx @Sethaniel @Malkalack @Briar_Rose @MatGods @Wolfmist @bjhovey @AWarriorFan @FazzTheMan @Claw2k11 @Romulus @ISentinelPenguinI @GrottyStatute74 @WarriorCatsRPS @Confused @jamescoker1226 @pinkalily21 @NeoTheCreator

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago
"Because I said so, that's why!"

"But Daaaad..."

"You move it right now, mister, or I'm going to tan your hide."

Jill stomped away and pouted.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago
Bonus:

As Tim watched Jill walk away, he stopped suddenly. His jaw dropped and he realized what he had just said. There were echos in his mind from is childhood, and he could hear his own father's voice in his head, "Because I said so, that's why!" He froze and remembered his own words as a child, as he stomped away himself, "You're so mean. When I have kids, I'll never be as mean as you. I hate you!"

Tim stood there, staring after Jill for a long time.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

Friday! We're wrapping up monster week. I've had a lot of fun with these themes, but in the interest of being newbie friendly for our less experienced writers and productivity promoting for our more experienced people, next week will have a bit more of a pure approach to building stories. Before we close out this week, though ... 

Let's go back to the concept of the reveal. Not in the mirror, but to someone else. Take a character and make them a secret monster or, alternatively, a perceived "bad guy" of some kind. (The bad guy thing is, of course, open to different interpretations and perspectives, but do try to make it clear why they're "bad.") Write their confession about their horrible identity or alternately, an accidental reveal to someone they care about.

Bonus: in a single scene, write the other character's reaction to the reveal.

Super bonus: write two reaction scenes instead, one positive, one negative.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago
Selena carefully moved the old flour bin aside and reached in to pull out the old, dusty book. She looked at the worn leather cover and sighed. This was her diary, and she needed to read it. She needed to know what happened yesterday. She sat down in one of the chairs that looked like it was from the 1950s carefully. She set the book on her lap and looked at it, hesitating again before she opened it. Finally, she opened the book.

The pages creaked as she turned through them. There were a lot of pages here. The handwriting was familiar, but she knew it wasn't hers. Instead it was... HERS. She did not want to think about it, but she just had to know what happened. She flipped to the end of the book and then turned back a few pages until she found yesterday's date. She started reading:

"It was a good night tonight. There was so much blood, I felt like I could have taken a bath in it. And still, no one has any idea who is doing these things. I wonder if I should start to leave more clues, just to entice them and make them think they're making progress.

"Tonight I found a new place. I think was just a regular county animal shelter, because it didn't have any security at all. I just walked in the back door and there were cages all around me. Sure, there was some night-time whimpering, but it didn't take me long to get the whole room howling.

"I wonder what they will think when they walk in in the morning. I'm not sure there is one inch of that room that doesn't have blood splattered on it..."

She couldn't read any more. She closed the book and put it back. Then she went to read the news on the Internet, even though she didn't want to.

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago
Bonus:

Jim saw that there was something behind the flour container. He looked around, but Selena was nowhere to be found, so he pushed the flour container aside and found the book. It looked very old and worn. He wondered why it would be in the kitchen, clearly hidden behind the flour. He pulled the book out and felt it's warm leather cover. He looked around again for Selena, but thought he heard the floor creak on the second floor, so she was still far away.

He opened the book and started reading on the first page: "This is my own personal diary. I am writing about all of my adventures so that I can share them with others. For some reason, Selena doesn't want to remember or share these adventures, so I will share them myself!" The page was signed, "Selena."

That didn't make much sense to Jim. He didn't know Selena's handwriting that well, but he supposed that this could be hers. He turned the page and started reading the graphic descriptions of the killings of dozens upon dozens of animals. His jaw dropped as he continued to read page after page. He noticed the dates and realized that these stories went back years.

He was pulled out of the book when there was a crash at the entrance to the kitchen. He looked up and saw Selena standing there, a dropped, broken glass at her feet. She was staring at Jim and the book. He looked up at her and then down at the book as he involuntarily stepped back away from her. Selena screamed, "I can explain!"

When she stepped towards him, Jim said, "No!" He threw the book to the floor and backed out the door, the entire time repeating, "No, no, no!"

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9 years ago
Super-Bonus: (Really? A positive reaction to this crazy woman? Hmmm...)

As Jim read through the book, a smile cracked his face. He looked up when there was a crash at the doorway to the kitchen. Selena stood there and there were glass shards at her feet where she had dropped a dish. She said, "I can explain!"

Jim turned to her and smiled again. He said, "Really? Please do. This sounds wonderful!"

Selena paused and looked around. She wasn't really sure what to say. She started, "Years ago, I..." but she stopped. How could she explain this horrible behavior? And why wasn't Jim upset?

Jim sat down with the book and flipped a few pages. He said, "No, this stuff is great! I don't know how you come up with it. I never knew you had so much of an imagination!"

Selena's shoulders slumped. Then she smiled and said, "Yes, that's it. I'm writing a book..."

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

YOUR FIFTH WEEK SCORES:
(Subtractions from regular 5, 10, and 15 point additions are made for missing sentences and incomplete scenes. Keep in mind, please, that you are allowed to work on scenes / sentences for the entire week, I will count exercises that you went back and finished, but once Saturday hits, the work you've done is judged ... with the exception of weeks where I am late in giving you guys your score.)  

@31TeV - 5 
@ecoLyte - 0
@TheNewIAP - 0
@Ogre11 - 90
@SpartacustheGreat - 0
@Morgan_R - 0
@Swiftstryker - 2
@betaband - 5
@nmelssx - 0
@Sethaniel - 0
@Malkalack - 5
@Briar_Rose - 0
@MatGods - 0
@Wolfmist - 0
@bjhovey - 5
@AWarriorFan - 0
@FazzTheMan - 0
@Claw2k11 - 0
@Romulus - 0
@ISentinelPenguinI -  20
@
GrottyStatute74 - 0
@WarriorCatsRPS - 0 
@Confused - 0
@jamescoker1226 - 20
@pinkalily21
- 0
@NeoTheCreator - 5

This Week's Winner: Ogre11

Second Place:  A tie! ISentinelPenguinI & jamescoker1226

Third Place: NeoTheCreator  & bjhovey & Malkalack & betaband & 31TeV (... five people with five points. Uh ... huh.)

Sadly, I cannot give out bonus points just because I especially like your idea or because you did a particularly awesome job because that's a little too subjective on my part. Nevertheless, you guys did great.

Important Note: I need suggestions or assistance. If I can't get some help with weekly themes / exercises or maybe just help with scoring, then if nothing changes, I'll be stepping down after week 6. If that ends up being the case, thank you everyone for participating. A special thanks to our most consistent winner, Ogre11, whose efforts were particularly encouraging. You guys all submitted interesting entries and it was great to read them, so you should all be proud. Except for people who signed up and posted absolutely nothing. You should feel a deep sense of shame. -_- Shame.

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9 years ago

Yey

I'll PM you a week of excercises if you want. smiley

Writing Exercises - KF: Week Five

9 years ago

@bjhovey Oops, how'd I miss this...? Please do and thank you.