A Fantastic Journey

Player Rating4.58/8

"#312 overall, #22 for 2013"
based on 141 ratings since 05/11/2013
played 2,644 times (finished 184)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

My first story on here, and also it's a  story I have been working on for years but never got around to finishing. So it's more of a story than a choose your own adventure (thus can get long in some places). Depending on how well it is liked I may continue on with it and flesh it out a bit. 

There are several possible endings, two of the endings are considered 'best'  

Player Comments

Good job!

No, this was so good that I feel the need to expand upon how good this story was in the various points that I usually dish out upon other stories.

1) The main character was actually quite decent. I mean, he wasn't expanded upon very much, but the point of that was to probably allow to place yourself in the shoes of the character, not just pure laziness, which is always something I appreciate with a main character.

2) The premise could have been screwed up, but you did quite well to spice things up and by the end of it, I wished that it would have gone on since I really needed to find out who that voice in the good ending was.

3) Your grammar and punctuation is very good, or at least there were no mistakes that I could notice in the story as I played it, though someone with keener eyes than me might say otherwise.

4) Of course, nothing's perfect and the fact that you wished to make this in parts really killed part of the joy I got from playing/reading this storygame. I mean, when you post a story, either post the entire thing or not at all, breaking it up in parts isn't viewed very kindly upon on this site, unless the parts themselves are excellent, like in Homo Prefectus... and what's worse, you ended it on a cliffhanger(at least the ending I got was a cliffhanger) which isn't entertaining in series or in stories.

And with all that, I rate this game - even though it ended on a cliffhanger and I may never see the next part again - a 6/8, though I know that there are people who will disagree whether this actually deserves such a high score.
-- Claw2k11 on 3/3/2017 5:55:52 PM with a score of 0
I got the second best ending. So not bad. The story was pretty good.
-- Francesca1986 on 10/4/2018 2:44:13 PM with a score of 0
I got the second best ending. Its a nice story, but a little too short for me. (Maybe the best ending has a longer story idk) i enjoyed it though. Solid story, no errors
-- SolarSFS on 8/12/2018 4:39:32 PM with a score of 0
Wait what?
-- DetroitShani313 on 1/9/2018 5:08:48 PM with a score of 0
-- Dave (fake) on 3/23/2017 9:07:48 PM with a score of 0
Hiya! :-). Great story. Well done you. I liked how I played, (fought till the end :-) ), and happpy with the ending. It's amazing what happens when you believe in your own power, even in a game. :-). So great work! The only improovement I feel you could make, is, extend the story. Write about the character exploring his powers, or, uncovering the true mystery of his abduction. My 3rd suggestion is, getting the main character to finnish the aliens off. You could make a big dramatic execution.
-- Rahila on 1/3/2017 9:33:33 AM with a score of 0
Yay found the most exciting ending
-- CeruleanFlare on 12/17/2016 5:07:02 PM with a score of 0
I sneezed and the game lasted just as long.
-- crusader on 6/24/2016 5:45:40 PM with a score of 0
It was Fantastic. Pretty basic storygame.
-- Jimmysutton on 3/31/2016 10:23:52 AM with a score of 0
I got the most exciting ending first try! It could have been made longer though.
-- lolitup4 on 3/29/2016 10:26:13 AM with a score of 0
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