An Escape from Ruin

Player Rating3.49/8

"#662 overall, #48 for 2011"
based on 166 ratings since 06/14/2011
played 2,013 times (finished 194)

Story Difficulty6/8

"wandering through the desert"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

Your character is trying to escape a city that is collapsing on itself from within. It's easy enough to survive but less certain what type of person you will become by the end of your struggles.

Player Comments

I enjoyed this story, I think a good effort was done in making a rather emotional piece, but I couldn't help but feel that the end came rather abruptly.

This doesn't mean that the writing was bad, but this story was honestly very short. Also, nothing was explained as to why the city is suddenly collapsing, and by the dialogue, that happening didn't seem to be a single occurrence either.

I would like to acknowledge that this was a interesting premise, but it doesn't feel like a full story when all is said and done. A backstory as to what, where, and why these things were happening would've done a great service in fleshing out the narrative.

There's potential in this story. I liked the writing and the tense atmosphere, but there just isn't much here. The biggest issue that seems to plague this story is it's lack of explanation to the reader.

It is rather hard to get connected to something that you know little about, at least for me at times. And I knew so little about the situation and characters. Even a little exposition is good when you want the reader to feel certain emotions while experiencing the story.

So in the end, this wasn't a storygame that I disliked, but it wasn't one that I found to be wholly enjoyable.
-- TharaApples on 2/14/2017 9:15:04 PM with a score of 0
This is a very short story and is ultimately very boring because of it. It could have paid off with a longer story, explaining some of the weird things some of the stories end with. It was very short and ultimately, I found it a waste of my time. It had a lot of potential, but it was not used, leaving the story lacking.
-- TheHuntress on 2/11/2016 5:09:11 PM with a score of 0
1. Originality
2. Nonlinearity
1. No explanation for setting or backstory
2. Random deaths/endings- it's not a Difficulty storygame, where the reader has to think or read carefully for clues, but rather just random results
1. The Description hints at character and emotional development, but there's none of that in the story
2. Unclear what character motivation or reasoning for actions are- some character behavior is unrealistics, and setting really isn't clarified to be fantasy
-- urnam0 on 6/14/2011 9:37:42 PM with a score of 0
The first page was really interesting with a nice emotional dilemma. But then it just sort of fizzled out. The pages got shorter and shorter and there was no real sense of character. This could be really impactful if it was fleshed out a bit more and we got to see the character's emotional connections to those in the town.

The core dillemna of whether to focus on saving self, spending your last moments with those you love, or helping others is really good. It's just not enough is done with that.
-- Kurischino on 7/1/2020 10:30:45 PM with a score of 0
pretty short needs some work but besides that its good
-- Jakethebro on 2/9/2018 5:58:02 PM with a score of 0
Good game, I likes the feel, I could picture the whole scene in head, good work
-- Gabe on 4/26/2017 12:30:06 AM with a score of 0
It was too short
-- Chickdove on 3/27/2017 7:29:11 PM with a score of 0
Too short.
-- crusader on 6/26/2016 1:06:42 PM with a score of 0
Little shorter than I like. Good job though.
-- MasonJarGuzzi on 3/19/2016 11:52:00 PM with a score of 0
Cool, just wish it was longer.
-- corgi213 on 9/20/2015 10:01:18 PM with a score of 0
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