Chess Master Stan!
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played 2,901 times (finished 233)
"march in the swamp"
"A well spent lunch break"
"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.
Stan's just a young college kid who's pretty good at chess, but along comes the evil Alexis, an evil warlord who ridicules young stan for his lack of chess playing abilities.
Bring that evil warlord to his knees
(the following game is purely a work of fiction, any resemblence to real people or situations is purely cooincidental)
This was a rather humorous game, and I do enjoy chess as well. While this is something that I found to be quite amusing, this isn't a storygame without it's flaws.
For one, this storygame is quite linear. Almost all of the choices seems to lead to the same outcome, so it didn't feel like that I as a reader was truly effecting the story in anyway. There's the illusion of choice, but I really wouldn't call what was offered in this storygame "real" choices. But still, even through its linearity this was still a funny story that I found to be endearing in its own way.
Grammar and structure, there were some sentences that seemed to run on and could've benefited from the use of a comma. Also, I encountered some pages that really looked unflattering because they were basically walls of text, and that's never really a thrill to read. Typos were also something of a redundant problem with this game and I couldn't help but feel that either a lack of care or foresight is what hurts this game in the technical sense.
While this is a humorous game that's filled with it's own charm, this is a game that doesn't offer much in terms of branching or meaningful choices for the reader. So this is more story than game, however this isn't something that I found to be a terrible experience.
on 3/13/2017 5:58:14 PM with a score of 0
I enjoyed the humour in how seriously Alexis takes chess, and commend you for writing such an original storygame!
There were a few grammatical errors, like starting a sentence with a lower-case letter, capitalising nouns that aren't proper nouns, and just capitalising random words.
This storygame was linear, and for a good portion of it you are faced with the same choices, which are essentially 1. don't play Alexis (all of these links lead to the same page) and 2. proceed.
Nonetheless this was a fun read, even if it is a little unpolished.
on 3/3/2013 12:10:56 PM with a score of 0
Very linear, but amusing. I enjoyed picking the obviously wrong choice to see what response I would get, and the fact that I didn't have to restart or go back and just pick a link. However, it wasn't really a game, but a one way street, so I rated it 4/8.
on 9/22/2012 11:45:04 PM with a score of 0
Absolutely adored the humor in this! My only complaint is that it just felt a bit linear at points.
on 8/11/2016 6:26:23 AM with a score of 0
on 4/27/2016 7:49:40 AM with a score of 0
on 11/1/2015 6:21:28 AM with a score of 0
Not bad not bad at all I liked it :) thnx 4 duh gaim
-- Me on 9/11/2015 10:49:44 AM with a score of 0
like it but make it a little longer
-- sam on 4/25/2015 8:44:01 AM with a score of 0
I LOVE CHESS! THANK YOU FOR MAKING THIS! although maybe next time give us options for moves we can do, Queen D4 ect.
on 3/31/2015 2:01:47 AM with a score of 0
IT WAS ASOME ASFDKJGH just kidding it was good
-- Random Person of shadows on 9/20/2014 3:59:02 PM with a score of 0
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