Dead space

Player Rating3.63/8

"#411 overall, #38 for 2014"
based on 138 ratings since 06/09/2014
played 1,249 times (finished 160)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

You are an explorer who has traveled to outer space. Your ship has all of a sudden stopped and you have been awoken by the computer before you have reached your destination. It is up to you space explorer to discover what has happen. Good luck!

Player Comments

This was pretty interesting, and there seems to be much promise with this storygame. Issues with grammar were present, but nothing too terrible. For a short story this storygame was able to keep me curious about where it may have been going with each page that I've read.

Still, this does feels like something that would have perhaps benefited with more in terms of story. Maybe another 500 words or so could have been added in delving more into the setting, and even helped in setting the tone more. I must however say that the pictures helped in providing some decent visual enjoyment, as they fit with the actual scenes in which they were presented and didn't feel forced one bit.

For what this was, this was rather decent. There's some things that are left to be desired in term presentation, but the effort to make something to be enjoyed for those that happen to find themselves reading this storygame is there. I feel that the writer's voice is conveyed well enough at the end of the day, and that is something that I feel is to be valued when all is said and done.

Good work, ervol1.
-- TharaApples on 2/15/2018 7:13:50 PM
Okay, this really did leave want for more. I finished this in about 5 minutes, and I'm not convinved it took you much longer than that to write. Seriously, if it's less than a thousand words and isn't either a short story (which I didn't get the feeling this is), or a poem (which I hope for your sake this wasn't an attempt at), then don't think about publishing until you've got at least another 5000 words under your belt.
However, this could be good! You've got pictures that actually did create atmosphere, even if it probably took you longer to find and upload them than write the story. I have to say I'm personally a sucker for a tale revolving around spaceships and all that stuff, but I was a little disappointing. Your writing was fairly good, though could do with some more compound sentences and explosive language to vamp it up (maybe that's just me having my own stylistic, convoluted taste though).
A deserved 4/8
-- AzBaz on 6/16/2017 5:24:28 PM
Please add more! I finished it in like 30 seconds! I just wanted to get the bad out of my way so on with the awards and happiness! I was actually working on a Dead Space game as well until I found this. I deleted my game and then read yours thinking that this site did not need another game like that. When I found that this was a small game I remade it and fixed my mistakes and even made it better so, add more or make a sequel. Thanks for helping me improve my story and keep working on these stories. I must go now, my people need me.
-- fullmetalfan890 on 11/4/2015 3:00:46 PM
It's pretty short but offers promising continuation. Think of it as a short introduction to the possible main story.
-- ChuckShirley on 11/19/2018 7:12:42 AM
I enjoyed this, but it could be longer.
-- MusicalNerd7 on 11/13/2018 12:01:29 PM
The story needs more options and was too short.
-- Maples Community Vanture on 7/12/2018 12:15:04 PM
This took me about ten seconds to finish.

1. Don´t take off the helmet
2. Go to the engine room
3. Armory
4. Force open the blast doors
5. Alien Ship
6. Done.

Would drop a 1/10, like legit. This has no substance, and no offense, but I could write this easily, and if you want people to like your stories, write longer scripts please!
-- ViridianHaze on 3/2/2018 12:57:41 AM
Would be better if you used more sensory dialogue. It ended rather quickly. Still, the story was interesting while it lasted.
-- Frontierloc on 11/11/2017 2:31:17 PM
it's great!!
-- armyman254 on 3/2/2017 1:26:26 PM
I enjoyed the story. I look for shorter stories sometimes because I don't feel like muddling through long-winded descriptions and unnecessary storytelling. This story gave me exactly what I was looking for. I'm excited to see the next installment.
-- Victoria on 2/24/2017 8:22:29 PM
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