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"trek through the forest"
"Make sure not to blink"
"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
You are a newly hatched dragon. Explore the world around you and live your life until your inevitable death.
The premise was cute, but regardless of which choices you make, the game just seems to end before it even begins. I hatch from an egg, leave the nest on the same day, make a new nest in a forest and... Grow fat and happy and die of old age, apparently. So all of the choices that dictated my whole life were made in a single day?
I think it could've been a lot better. Like I said, beginning the game as a newly hatched baby dragon has potential for a really cute story. You even have the opportunity to help one of your siblings hatch at the beginning of the game. Seeing a new born baby dragon playing and bonding with it's siblings could've been adorable! But instead, the sibling dragon just flies away as soon as it hatches, and you don't get to communicate with it at all.
It just seems like a waste really. You wrote a story about a new born baby dragon, and yet somehow, it still has no charm, no whimsy, no personality, and worst of all... No cuteness! It's a fucking baby animal, god damn it! I demand my baby animals to be cute! >.<
on 4/19/2019 6:14:39 PM with a score of 0
I didn't like it.
First of all, it was incredibly short and I noticed about one sentence per page halfway through, which leads me to believe you felt the need to rush it and publish it as soon as possible. Spend more time on your storygames, please.
There was really no branching, I saw that each page had about three links on them, but guess what? Only one of them would progress me in the game. Every path led to death one or two clicks in, or it would take me back a page. It's annoying, because this is Choose Your Story, not Try To Randomly Determine Which Link Won't Kill You.
It was badly fleshed out, I noticed almost no detail and the situations seemed quite illogical.
You need to put more effort into your storygames, because you want to make something you can be proud of. Reading this, I don't think you should be proud of it. This storygame can be fixed if you add more detail, an actual plot, a better setting, a longer storygame in general, etc.
2/8, try harder.
on 3/19/2017 2:52:41 PM with a score of 0
I like the fact that you have a unique story. I can't say I've seen sometone else with the main character being a baby dragon, newly hatched. But why does his life have to end at death- whatever happened to old age rather than murder to accident? I mean, I didn't see one of those endings, but I didn't go looking for them all.
Also, I notice that this rather lacks some realism. These newborn dragons don't really act like bumbling children- especially if they're already large enough to fly and eat people. And one more thing, I got the impression that in one of the endings, the dragon is shot by a gun. In the time of dragons, there are no firearms. It lacks historical integrity (if you can call medeival fantasy history). Once again, you had a really good idea to start with but no where to take it.
on 4/24/2011 10:01:01 PM with a score of 0
It could use some more work, but its decent
on 4/8/2020 11:44:51 AM with a score of 0
boring on all level
-- drax on 3/14/2020 6:32:33 AM with a score of 0
my friend led me into my death
on 3/5/2020 3:34:04 PM with a score of 0
As always spoilers ahead so be warned.
I actually liked the idea of playing a dragon very much. It could have made for some great interactions with the world around you. Seeing how a dragon would grow from a weak small baby to an apex predator without much to fear.
The story was sadly very short and not even very descriptive. You simply get born leave your nest and find death either by violence or magic or some natural reason.
There was no chance to actually interact with the people of the village or with your brother (or sister?) you free from the nest. This could have ended in so many different and better ways. I for example imagine a scenario where you could be forced to serve a evil wizard or end up in something like Eragon just from the view of the dragon instead of the man.
So all in all it was a nice and very innovative, but the execution of the idea was quite lacking in may aspects. Thats why I rated 2/8.
on 2/24/2020 4:42:53 AM with a score of 0
I wished they had more options. But I really like it
-- Poe Rachel on 2/5/2020 5:21:04 PM with a score of 0
Okay, I played it again, and since I knew what not to do, I liked it a lot more than I did before.
on 2/3/2020 11:45:36 AM with a score of 0
It’s olay. I rated it a four because it could be longer, and maybe you could describe what you look like? Or the dragon you break out becomes your friend. That would be fun!!!
on 2/3/2020 11:38:59 AM with a score of 0
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