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"trek through the forest"
"Make sure not to blink"
"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
You are a newly hatched dragon. Explore the world around you and live your life until your inevitable death.
The premise was cute, but regardless of which choices you make, the game just seems to end before it even begins. I hatch from an egg, leave the nest on the same day, make a new nest in a forest and... Grow fat and happy and die of old age, apparently. So all of the choices that dictated my whole life were made in a single day?
I think it could've been a lot better. Like I said, beginning the game as a newly hatched baby dragon has potential for a really cute story. You even have the opportunity to help one of your siblings hatch at the beginning of the game. Seeing a new born baby dragon playing and bonding with it's siblings could've been adorable! But instead, the sibling dragon just flies away as soon as it hatches, and you don't get to communicate with it at all.
It just seems like a waste really. You wrote a story about a new born baby dragon, and yet somehow, it still has no charm, no whimsy, no personality, and worst of all... No cuteness! It's a fucking baby animal, god damn it! I demand my baby animals to be cute! >.<
on 4/19/2019 6:14:39 PM
I didn't like it.
First of all, it was incredibly short and I noticed about one sentence per page halfway through, which leads me to believe you felt the need to rush it and publish it as soon as possible. Spend more time on your storygames, please.
There was really no branching, I saw that each page had about three links on them, but guess what? Only one of them would progress me in the game. Every path led to death one or two clicks in, or it would take me back a page. It's annoying, because this is Choose Your Story, not Try To Randomly Determine Which Link Won't Kill You.
It was badly fleshed out, I noticed almost no detail and the situations seemed quite illogical.
You need to put more effort into your storygames, because you want to make something you can be proud of. Reading this, I don't think you should be proud of it. This storygame can be fixed if you add more detail, an actual plot, a better setting, a longer storygame in general, etc.
2/8, try harder.
on 3/19/2017 2:52:41 PM
I like the fact that you have a unique story. I can't say I've seen sometone else with the main character being a baby dragon, newly hatched. But why does his life have to end at death- whatever happened to old age rather than murder to accident? I mean, I didn't see one of those endings, but I didn't go looking for them all.
Also, I notice that this rather lacks some realism. These newborn dragons don't really act like bumbling children- especially if they're already large enough to fly and eat people. And one more thing, I got the impression that in one of the endings, the dragon is shot by a gun. In the time of dragons, there are no firearms. It lacks historical integrity (if you can call medeival fantasy history). Once again, you had a really good idea to start with but no where to take it.
on 4/24/2011 10:01:01 PM
Why there are no ending where we met the other dragon and live happily togetherbas a family.
-- Bayaya n Azaza on 8/9/2019 11:00:07 PM
I don't know why, this is short BUT very enjoyable.
Firstly, the writing was decent. You wrote clearly about the character, and I guess its goal is to survive, so it was really fun. Despite being short, the grammar was great and made it even better.
You made the pages short enough to let me get interested in it. Usually when I see really long pages, I just feel lazy and doesn't read carefully. This time it's different. I read every word and enjoyed the story.
There were two to three real options, which wouldn't lead you back to the same place. I really appreciate that.
Overall, I see you put effort in it, and the idea was good. Rated 7/8
on 6/29/2019 2:44:44 AM
It was very good. Maby a few more endings would have been better.
-- Willy on 6/1/2019 7:16:45 AM
best game Eva!!!!!
-- BestBoiEva on 4/29/2019 12:39:49 PM
I feel like this is an okay story. Some grammar mistakes, I would look over before you post. Also isn't really engaging, none of your actions really seem to matter, or cause anything interesting to happening. It only kept my attention because I really freakin love dragons lol.
on 4/3/2019 7:09:50 PM
Don't complain a game is too short when you can see it's rated 1/8 for length.
It was a fairly simple game lacking in descriptions a bit but nice for a quick storygame.
on 1/18/2019 4:46:49 AM
This was way too short...
on 6/8/2018 7:52:13 AM
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