Player Comments on Gay and Depressed

"You guys see the mugger come back and he shoots you"

So far the mugger is my favorite villain in a CYS story,the way the page just wraps up how he came back and murdered us.

So beautiful.

This story could have been longer, it feels like you make 2-3 choices before committing suicide, making someone get hit by a bus, or getting offed by the worlds best villain.

I think you could have gone into more detail here, why is our hero depressed? A major life event, several? Is he depressed just because he is gay? If so, does that really make much sense?

Does the hero have any other reason for living other than having someone to get killed with?

There's a lot of details that could have been worked in pre-depression and during/post depression. Any way, story was alright.
-- corgi213 on 8/12/2018 3:40:08 PM with a score of 0
Well this was interesting, I'll give it that. A few random things to point out.

1. You do realize that on page one, there are three options that all say the same thing but lead to different pages... What is the point in that?

2. You forgot to sign your permission slip? I kind of thought the whole point of permission slips was that somebody else is supposed to sign them.

3. You try to tell your crush you like her, but end up accidentally screaming in her face? ... Whoops. Yeah, that's going to set off a few red flags, try not to do that to do that in the future.

4. The girl you had a crush on doesn't like you back, and so your only option is to kill yourself? Oh the unspeakable pain of first world problems. I really don't understand how anybody makes it past the age of 20 in this cruel, cruel world.

5. The game doesn't really make it clear that the character you're playing is a girl, (except for that one scene where your girlfriend punches you in the boob. That was random.)

Other than that, it was definitely a fun read. Kind of puts me in mind of the Harry Potter fanfic My Immortal. If you plan to do a follow up game, try making the main character a satanist, and have her breakdown crying, asking "Why did Satan make me so beautiful?" ^_^
-- Briar_Rose on 11/18/2016 5:54:10 PM with a score of 0
Bumping up my rating to help this struggling story, which by tradition we keep around purely because the title is funny.

My girlfriend got smashed by a bus and then my dog ran up and ate her chunky giblets, and it was just as good as the first time.
-- mizal on 7/1/2020 6:49:55 PM with a score of 0
hahaha i now see a burguler in the mirrior
-- kaden on 10/11/2019 8:00:56 PM with a score of 0
well i'm not sure if this is really how it is, but i feel just a lil gayer after my first play-thru
-- mammothe on 8/16/2018 2:41:00 PM with a score of 0
It can use some editing and perhaps more interesting events. I can't be the only one who is distracted by the giant "SCENE #" that takes up almost as much space as the text.
-- HugsGoodbye on 12/8/2017 10:43:55 PM with a score of 0
Summary of this story: "You get up and run after her. She sees you approaching her and gets scared. She punches you in the boob, it starts to inflate. You slowly fly into the distance and she just screams. Never get breast implants, or maybe you’ll fly away. You fly and fly for hours, and then your boob pops. Welp, You're dead."
-- Kim on 11/24/2017 3:56:57 AM with a score of 0
Oh my gosh! So unexpected and gross. That was great! Please add more to the story! PS: Using paragraphs would make the story easier to follow.
-- Quorrah on 3/5/2017 1:56:09 PM with a score of 0
OMG why so dark?!?!?!?!?!?
-- koolkatkid on 1/3/2017 11:57:37 PM with a score of 0
a tiny bit fun
-- koolkatkid on 1/3/2017 11:54:54 PM with a score of 0
bad !
-- kale man on 12/31/2016 12:26:29 AM with a score of 0
It was alright. I liked some of the endings
-- CowBoySkinnyLinny on 12/10/2016 5:24:58 PM with a score of 0
Okay, I tried this again, and a dog ate my girlfriend's intestines. A much better story now.
-- mizal on 11/21/2016 11:55:20 AM with a score of 0
4/8. Funny but short. Also, if you are female then you would be lesbian, not gay.
-- Matthias on 11/20/2016 8:34:41 PM with a score of 0
Clicked once and the game decided the character committed suicide, with no input from me. Wow, that sure was interactive.

My first instinct was to give this a one, but by special request I'm giving it a three. Somebody thinks the title is funny and wants it to stick around.
-- mizal on 11/20/2016 5:43:13 PM with a score of 0
Still spookier than The One In The Mirror.
-- ISentinelPenguinI on 11/20/2016 4:26:45 PM with a score of 0
My story experience was too short !!
-- Ozzy on 11/19/2016 11:45:25 AM with a score of 0
I give you kudos on your creative endings and seeming lack of spelling errors. There's not much in the way of plot or character development though. Seems like a good start to a bigger story.
-- BigRonn77 on 11/18/2016 11:39:08 AM with a score of 0
The title alone makes this one a lot more amusing than the recent crop of craptacular stories.
-- EndMaster on 11/18/2016 7:48:43 AM with a score of 0
Should I leave a constructive comment or just kind of move on?
I mean, one of the endings were so absurd, I can't even...
At least this was of spelling mistakes and it was at least a 4/8 in length? Though, the font was kind of big,
That's er...all I really can say about this.
-- Seto on 11/17/2016 12:17:42 PM with a score of 0
-- queenlatifa04 on 11/15/2016 2:44:06 PM with a score of 0
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