Homo Perfectus

Player Rating6.76/8

"#15 overall, #3 for 2011"
based on 2458 ratings since 09/09/2012
played 24,276 times (finished 2,242)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length6/8

"It'll be a while, better grab a SnickersĀ®"

Maturity Level2/8

"choking hazard for children under 4"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 6. To compare to the movie rating system, this would be G.

You are Adam, one of two of the Homo Perfectus's, along with Eve. You two have lived on father's facility for the last fifteen years and have no knowledge of any existence beyond those metallic walls.

NOTE-Items take on the form "capabilities" in this game, which generally means super powers.

Player Comments

This will always be my favorite series on the site. This storygame was the first one I ever read and it was what captivated me and drew me into the CYTian community. The idea behind this is amazing, and the whole series is worthy of being featured. I think that the length is great and the action is well-paced, and so good that it keeps you on your toes the whole time.

The writing flows magnificently, adjusting with each scene like water into a new container. The pace switches to accommodate each scene as well, and it just has a way of attracting the reader to keep reading and to play again and again to the the full story.

It was a very good idea to give a bit of a backstory for our character so that we as readers are not confused by being thrown into conflict. The plot thickens and is very structured, with everything a story needs to be featured. With the help of the advanced editor, this makes it even more complex and highly addicting.

One complaint I do have is the lack of descriptive writing. There is some of course, but I feel that a story along these margins requires a lot more than produced. I like to have a feeling of being a part of the story itself, like it is a film being played inside my mind.

Another problem is how characters are introduced. They feel thrown in, like someone being pushed inside a boxing ring and being forced to reveal themselves to us. With a bit of work, character introduction can greatly improve your story for a stronger attachment to the character from the reader. You did very well with developing the characters thoug, and this more than makes up for everything. Changes in Adam are easily seen and foreshadowed to give us an idea of how to use him effectively.

I can't say much about the practicality of your solutions, as this is a superhero story, but the conflicts are generally realistic and are inserted at a good pace that complements the plot line nicely.

The story avoids linearity and gives us as readers a wide variety of options, aided by the advanced editor so that we can play again and aim for a different ending.

If I recall correctly, English isn't the authors first language, so proofreading with someone's help is always important, and I didn't actually catch many errors. They do not affect the storyline, so no complaints about that.

7/8
-- Nyctophilia on 2/22/2017 12:14:54 PM with a score of 0
You, sir, have earned my respect for creating a game that is all at once suspenseful, funny, action-packed, and genuinely human without resorting to cheap tricks, shocking violence, or crude sensuality.

The pacing was balanced, and the content moved seamlessly from suspense to action to comedy to whatever else you've managed to fit in there. The story was excellent, relentlessly drawing me forward while allowing me legitimate alternative paths (as opposed to an obvious main path accompanied by stubby, shoddy dead ends). And the characters had real depth; I felt myself applying my own personality to Adam, wondering not what I might like him to do but rather what I myself would do! The first person perspective is a great choice for immersion.

I got stuck a few times trying to figure out which power to use, but the right choice always made the most sense in the end and was often ingeniously implemented.

Thank you for sharing your talent with us! I'm looking forward to continuing the saga...
-- WordSmith37 on 4/17/2015 8:34:43 PM with a score of 0
Excellent, creative story. Very well done. There are a few typos and what not but they didn't detract at all from my immersion. I cannot believe I haven't read this story before now. I very much liked the use of items; at times, I was basically clicking them to determine what you thought was a relevant enhancement, but for the most part there seemed to be a lot of choices on how to proceed by using "abilities." Great use of scripting. Looking forward to reading the sequels.
-- madglee on 7/20/2012 9:01:21 PM with a score of 0
Hey tricky ending. Good job.
-- JohnX on 9/22/2017 11:05:33 AM with a score of 0
A great beginning story. Slightly spoiled by typos here and there (oops, how do you spell typo?) like swapping from 'you' to 'I' and back.
I'll have to try again and save humanity this time!
I love it that you're not afraid to bring the Bible into a story and you make it work convincingly.
-- JohnX on 9/21/2017 10:51:43 PM with a score of 0
Wow. *slow, startled clapping* Amazing!
-- Sound_of_the_Strike on 8/20/2017 12:33:10 PM with a score of 0
Thank you for the great thing.
It's of the right dynamics, not to long, really intense, like a good movie - concentrated enjoyment.
-- TheWizard on 8/5/2017 4:57:04 PM with a score of 0
Universe is great but there's too much railroading for my taste, that its annoying to guess the correct power to use. With a bit of logic, theoretically, every power can be used for one situation.
-- RedLightning_07 on 7/15/2017 6:42:17 AM with a score of 0
This an amazing game!
-- aspiringwriter20xx on 6/25/2017 12:59:58 PM with a score of 0
This an amazing game!
-- aspiringwriter20xx on 6/25/2017 12:59:58 PM with a score of 0
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