"Too few ratings to be ranked"
played 838 times (finished 80)
"walk in the park"
"A well spent lunch break"
"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.
You wake up hungry. It's time to go to the supermarket.
I have very mixed feelings about this.
The story itself had a lot of choices, but little detail. The branching was pretty good, but a storygame just doesn't feel like a storygame when you don't provide a lot of detail and plot development.
This storygame certainly had quite a bit of lolrandom humor, but I did smile a few times. Some of this was funny, but some parts were rather cringy.
The storygame isn't something i'd really want to read again. I mean, yeah, it's entertaining, but only for the first few clicks before it just becomes stale.
The characters had no development at all, and pretty much every single one seemed to be thrown in for plot convenience. We don't get any details on them, and they just have no personality.
I did like the writing style. I'd want to read more from this author if they were a little more careful with the lolrandom humor and provided more development for the setting, characters, and plot.
The situations were very illogical, and the "artwork" seemed pretty lazy. All in all, a good way to pass five minutes I suppose, but nothing too special.
on 7/25/2017 2:43:18 AM
This wasn't a bad storygame. The artwork was interesting. The story was random but sort of funny and entertaining. You did a pretty good job with branching paths, but there were some issues. It was short but it told a story.
There was a loop where you could go to the church, walk away, and go back to the church again. It didn't feel like that was intentional. The links that you weren't "allowed" to choose unless you chose a certain path could have been solved with variables. I agree with others in the comments that the page numbers and letters for choices were distracting and felt unnecessary.
on 10/13/2014 3:06:21 PM
There were a few grammar mistakes and overall the story could have been better.
on 5/31/2018 11:59:11 AM
Just a so-so game. Too far-fetched to be real, to real to be fantasy. Fail. Sorry. :(
on 1/23/2017 5:39:50 PM
Loved it! So many different paths and choices to mess around with, oh and it was pretty funny.
on 7/31/2016 8:24:05 PM
Really short, but funny.
on 2/15/2016 12:54:36 PM
As far as length it could have a few more choices. But overall it is a fun game.
on 10/1/2015 12:57:49 PM
It's a bit random. Not a bad story, but not great either
-- Jordi P on 2/26/2015 12:16:58 PM
it was ok not bad to much pictures
-- maiya on 11/27/2014 8:11:47 AM
Hey, that was actually pretty fun. :D. You did have quite a bit of grammar errors in your story though. Try using better English skills in your next story! Still, overall I liked this game.
on 5/27/2014 12:38:03 AM
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