Player Comments on I'm leaving

Hahaha, I love reading unpublished storygames. I died of laughter after this one.

I really enjoyed the narrative's hurt and honest tone. The author is obviously very skilled in consciously putting on another person's skin and write from that point of view. This ability allowed for this whole story to come alive, and it was almost as if a child truly talked to me through the screen.

Mizal is indeed a menace to this site. Luckily, there's a ban button in the works. Keep your eyes peeled to one of the upcoming updates!

Mizal is a mean, mean. Shame on him for making this little boy cry!

That Mizal, he can be tough but fair.

lmao

Mood. ????

Take criticism young one

You should've posted this in the forums, instead of making a storygame.
Also, yes, someone's going to swear in the comments. Not everyone's going to be like "OMG BEST STORY EVAAA!!!!1!1". But you won't see this comment, because you left this website.

I was actually 9 when I discovered this, then I wrote a story and there were no positive comments (I did write a WC story, but that doesn't matter). I stayed. If you're so easily offended, you shouldn't have joined.

A showcase of an onionskin...

Learn to take criticism, madam, especially the constructive criticism kind.

Until you do, you're a walking hazard that we need to stay far away from. 1/8.

This probably would have been much better as a forum post, seeing as it's really short and not interactive. Still, to critique it, leaving was probably a good idea this is the Internet, after all, and it's not made for easily offended 10 year olds.

this gave me cancer

Unintentionally helpful.

It's the internet kid! Deal with it!

Plot development was sub-par but satisfying, in a 'Well this burger tastes terrible, but it was $1.50.'

Nuuu mi su herd dat mee ruhn 2 fa fa laend! Dem h8rz gon keel meh bruh! Effuh hurt off whore moans?

Keep writing - it's the only way to improve. But if you're 10, of course your writing is rubbish. I wouldn't expect a young child to have the life experience to write a captivating story. But the more you write, and the sooner you start, the faster you'll improve to a level the general public would consider competent. Quitting because someone didn't praise you is cowardly.

Uhh... Really not sure what to say to this. Honestly, if you really are ten, you shouldn't be posting your work on the internet for the whole world to see. True, a lot of people are just jerks for no reason, but most people just give their honest opinions and if their honest opinion is that something is bad, they'll say so.
Even the best writers get negative reviews, and when they do, they know to either ignore it or let it motivate them to do better next time. If a negative review is going to upset you so much to the point where you're crying, then you are definitely too young and not mature enough to post your work online.
I hope you're being honest and that you actually are leaving instead of just posting a sad story for attention, then writing another one in a week and complaining when people leave negative reviews on that.

This is terrible, you're really a baby if you think that way. Gladly leave.

You posted a "story" with only six pages in it, of course people criticized you. You have read a book before, right? Even baby books are more than 6 pages long. Yes, you're ten, and you're still learning, your brain has another fifteen years before its done developing--but if you put your work on display in a public place, it will be judged. If you're not ready for that, then leaving and coming back when you're older is your best option.

The camel that broke the fee fee's back.

Umm, btw.. Mizal is a girl so you failed there with the assumption she's male. Lol.

You even gave yourself an eight for this. Shedding a tear right now, they should've sent a poet.

Oh my God. This was beautiful.