I Love You, My Sweet Kate

Player Rating3.17/8

"#797 overall, #100 for 2015"
based on 169 ratings since 06/22/2015
played 2,023 times (finished 211)

Story Difficulty1/8

"no possible way to lose"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

Kate was my first love, and she couldn't be more perfect. But when I heard that she died on the news, it changed my life.

Player Comments

Outside of originality issues (*cough* Snow *cough*), I found the technicalities of the story almost perfect. The singularity I found was in an earlier page where all the dialogue was in one paragraph.

It was sweet. I mean, regarding the type of story it was, it was cute. (But because I'm ignoring originality issues,) There could've been more characterization and branching. This story was linear and reminded me of a 2D DNA strand - at certain points, the two backbones reconverged.

In this story, you have a section for childhood and teenhood and then the ending section. In each section, there were "mini-stories" that you could read to gain insight on the characters. It wasn't enough—not enough characterization, as the characters were bound to fall in love and break apart (which isn't wrong, it's just predictable).

The way you introduced Kate was direct, boring, and not very insightful. I always dislike it when a writer so blatantly described what the person looks like all at once with such simple words, especially in love/romance stories because shouldn't personality (usually) be the thing the lover mentions first?

I think you could've tinkered around a bit with how the protagonist felt throughout the story. How did he feel whenever she kissed him? How did he react to that? And think about the ending—why? Why did he react this way? What made Kate so special to him other than being a loving childhood friend?

I don't see how the relationship could've developed in such a way. I'm sure it's possible, but it just doesn't seem right. Why did the boy never make a move on the girl first? Why is it always her kissing him? And besides, think about the emotional aspects of their developing relationship instead of just the end game.

The grammar/spelling was great, and the story was cute. It was very similar to Snow (and other similarly style games), and you could've made it more unique. The characters/plot wasn't developed enough.
-- Crescentstar on 3/6/2017 7:25:07 PM with a score of 0
It's not bad but it does follow an established genre. If you had to work harder to win the girl's love and then soon after you come together she dies that would add more depth, showing the aftermath of the loss or even if the reader was somehow responsible for his lover's death ("damn, shouldn't have had that third bottle of vodka before taking her flying in the family helicopter...") would all make this story take on a life of it's own. As it is at the moment it's a respectable effort but needs more to really stand out.
-- Will11 on 6/24/2015 2:38:08 AM with a score of 0
Unlike the others, I think I will try not to compare this to Snow. I will look at this and comment on this like a story made by itself.

For a first, the story was actually good. It was captivating and the grammar and spelling was overall Ok. My biggest problem would be the fact that there are so many stories like this already. Two people fall in love, one dies. That's more often than not the summary of most love stories nowadays. But, you obviously have potential and so keep on writing. Just try to find an original idea next time.
-- Penworth on 6/23/2015 12:43:16 AM with a score of 0
A way poorer Snow with worse scripting, 2/8
-- AzBaz on 7/11/2019 12:55:23 PM with a score of 0
This was more like a story than an adventure story, but it was well written with great grammar and spelling.
The story showed readers how they feel clearly. It was entertaining but very sad. From friends to admirers, and then hurting death.
I wish I had rated higher. You get 6 out of 8– it was worth every cent.
And for the little phrase to describe the story...
A great piece of writing.
-- StoryTurtle on 4/26/2019 6:26:39 AM with a score of 0
It's... okay. I'm not sure what else to say. But if it was based off a true story, well, sorry, bro...
-- EatTheCake on 7/30/2018 2:42:41 AM with a score of 0
Heart warming
-- Dakota on 2/6/2018 10:19:04 PM with a score of 0
It was an interesting enough story I just wish I could contribute to it.
-- Kokai on 1/4/2018 12:30:25 PM with a score of 0
Jumps straight from love to unresolved tragedy. A bit jarring.
-- Hewitt on 10/30/2017 1:58:38 AM with a score of 0
It's been a long time since I last went on CYS. I re-read this storygame, and now I realized it was quite badly written.

Perhaps I will make a new version of this in the future.

Thank you all for taking the time to comment on this... THING
-- feathersoul on 7/20/2017 9:11:11 PM with a score of 0
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