Love or Magic

Player Rating2.76/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 249 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

You are a girl who is 16. For a long you have been wishing for two things. You true love, Alex Wild. Except he is totaly made up. And something cool and magical to happen.

This is my first game O.K.

Player Comments

Despite the other comments, I actually expected this to be longer. I really did. I actually, being a typical (dreamy, lonely) teenage girl, really looked forward to reading it when I read the description, but it was very short. The first two pictures set a sweet, dreamy, magical feeling (like the title suggests), and I found it very endearing.

However, grammar, character, setting, plot--basically the story in general--need major working-on. The idea of the story can actually attract quite a few readers (again, mostly teenage girls), which is very good, but the story is a letdown.

It's not the best "first story" I've read, but just improve and you'll find much more pleasant results!
-- Crescentstar on 12/2/2016 4:42:41 PM
... Listen, I won't be harsh since this is your first try. The pictures were nice and the story was... cute? But it's shallow, flat. It lacked detail and -sorely- lacked depth to the characters, the world, the goal, so on. Sure, the idea of "pick your magical monster" and "jump into their world to save it" is actually a _great_ idea. I think it has lots of potential. If you had -expanded- on that idea here? It would've been good. Also, you could use a writing mentor or a beta reader to help you with spelling and fleshing things out since it's too short, and again, needs detail. On that note...if you can't find anyone, I've been a beta for my friends for years and I've mentored a couple people, so you can message me if need be.
-- Kiel_Farren on 8/26/2012 2:18:24 PM
Well,there were some spelling mistakes,butttttt......it was good,buuttttttttt too short. <3
-- Annonymous_Lady on 11/3/2017 2:49:50 PM
please build on going with torch
-- AurondragonTyr on 10/24/2017 11:39:32 PM
Much promise, needs editing and needs to be take more the 45 seconds to complete, but I have to admit, spelling errors and all, I was hooked, wish it was longer.
-- MrSnuggles on 9/18/2017 11:57:43 PM
I'm generally not a big fan of 'this is my first time, please don't be harsh' descriptions, because I feel that if you want to publish something you can be proud of, you should put the effort in to become familiar with the editor and put a lot of effort into writing. However, you clearly put some effort in, though watch out for some spelling and grammar issues. There were a couple even on the first page, which detracts from the whole story immediately. With a little more effort and slightly more build up and realistic dialogue, you might make a good story. I did like the different colours for different people speaking. 2/8
-- AzBaz on 6/6/2017 7:18:35 AM
awsome game
-- jasminewinx44 on 4/27/2017 8:35:07 AM
i kind of wish it were longer so that i could experience all the adventures. Overall, though, it was a really good start that you can build off of! :)
-- saltycat on 1/1/2017 9:19:58 PM
May i be honest?

This is poorly written, the story is horribly boring, and it has NO depth. If this was a demo, I would understand the shortness, But since it's a FULL storygame? It's far too short and i think this should be taken off the site.
-- A Critic on 11/28/2016 1:58:56 PM
THIS IS PAINFUL FOR ME TO PLAY
-- AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH on 11/28/2016 1:42:46 PM
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