Marvel Universe: Fallen

Player Rating3.12/8

"#510 overall, #29 for 2016"
based on 120 ratings since 04/21/2016
played 1,571 times (finished 180)

Story Difficulty6/8

"wandering through the desert"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

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You are the newest member of the Avengers, Thomas Maxamoff, AKA. BloodRush. You are a 17 year old kid. Here is some back ground. You are the child of Wanda Maxamoff and The Vision. All powers that run in the family, you inherited.

*Chaos Magic Reality Warping
*Change your density on command
*Flight
*Super Speed (From your Uncle Pietro)
*Magnetic Manipulation (From Grandpa Magneto)

Are you ready? There are so many more powers that you have that you don't even know yet! You will discover them as you go. This is the current Avengers team.

*Captain America
*Iron Man
*Falcon
*Ms. Marvel
*Scarlet Witch
*Quicksilver
*Spider-Man
*Vision
*BloodRush

*Hawkeye

Player Comments

First of all, I noticed many grammatical errors. You capitalized some parts where it isn't even necessary. There was a lack of detail, and proper punctuation.

The plot structure was quite weak, and also your character development skills in the book. It wasn't that long, and the book seemed to be rushed.

I noticed that you wrote the book in a play-form, which disappointed me a little bit. I mean, you can't really express the character's emotions by writing in play-script. For example, in play-script when someone is suffering from crippling depression, you just write it like this: (Bob sighs and places his head in his lap). In the actual book script you can write it like this: "Why is fate always so unlucky for me?" Bob sighed as he glanced out at the downpour of rain outside. He felt a twinge of anger in his heart, and pure sadness, etc.

There is always room for improvement, and you can certainly try better than this; I believe in you. A touch of humour would be quite nice, and the little touch of romance was well placed. I wish that you just developed their feelings a bit better.

If you plan to make a part two, please add more details, make the story longer, develop the plot and don't rush it, don't write it in playscript and try not to make any grammatical errors, and I assure you that you will get a higher rating than you received on this one.

4/8. Certainly not the worst, but not the best either.
-- DiniTheWizard on 11/8/2017 10:00:21 PM
Well, the plot was cool. Great idea. But the way your dialogue was formatted was really annoying to deal with. It was like reading a script, but not...? And it kept switching back and forth between quoatation marks and no quotation marks. You have to choose one and stick to it... And preferably stick with traditional dialogue and quotation marks!!
-- ViolinAndDeerstalker on 6/5/2018 3:31:53 PM
I'm a really huge marvel fan, so playing this game made me feel as if I were actually fighting. The author did an amazing job with the storytelling of the game so kudos to you! This person put some good researching into the game.
-- darkmagiciangirl on 5/20/2018 12:14:38 AM
It was great
-- Zach on 3/20/2018 4:40:46 AM
Loved the game??
-- Cameron on 11/17/2017 1:12:54 AM
Sorry, but this wasn't very impressive... Well, practice makes perfect, so keep up with it.
-- Griseo on 11/5/2017 4:21:45 PM
Not bad, not bad. (impressed smile).
-- Monkeyking16 on 11/2/2017 11:51:53 PM
please make the next one civil war sounds awesome
-- AurondragonTyr on 10/12/2017 2:43:28 AM
Hope the next one is even better
-- mwatson_54 on 9/15/2017 10:47:09 AM
I did a quick google search on the main character. It's Maximoff, not Maxamoff. You misspelt the name of the protagonist.

There's a part where the protagonist tries to formulate a plan, and Captain America just turns to him and says, "No, kid, we're just going to rush in blind. We're not even going to think of a plan." He wasn't being sarcastic, either. That made me laugh.
-- Saika on 8/2/2017 5:42:52 AM
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