Player Rating7.21/8

"#5 overall, #1 for 2007"
based on 8231 ratings since 10/09/2007
played 157,022 times (finished 9,878)

Story Difficulty8/8

"mosie through a minefield"

Play Length7/8

"It keeps going and going"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.


Additional Notes:

This story is definitely more "story" than "game", however there are two distinct paths that can be followed, each with their own pitfalls and additional choices. There is also "one true" ending in which can be considered a "win" (You'll know if you got it, because you'll get an epilogue)

This story can get long, and assuming you're surviving, years do pass in it and you and your environment will change. There are a few points in the story where there are links that lead to more background information on various people and things. While not completely necessary to understand the story, they do give you more insight into it. The text that accompanies some of the pics are also done for similar purposes (Your journal entries, personal thoughts, letters written to you, etc)

Player Comments

This is the first story I read in this site when I happily stumbled upon it a couple years ago, and it was the one that got me hooked to it. And after all this time, I still find it to be the best and most touching multiple choice story I have ever read.

I took the first way back then, and didn't play the other one up until now as I was so involved in the story I didn't want it to be any different. Needless to say, the second way is as good and interesting, and it also explores more in depth some of the characters of the first one.

Now with the real review:

I think that the most important thing in a narrative text are the characters. I find that good characters can justify a mediocre plot but that a good plot can't justify mediocre characters. The characters in Necromancer are all well crafted and have a personality, and as such they all feel like real individuals.

I can relate to the emotions felt by the main character, which helps in getting into the story and believing it, which is a big plus in this kinds of stories. In fact, I think that part of the special significance of this story to me is that I identify with it’s main character at some level. I’ve been there, and I’ve had those thoughts.

The plot of this story is pretty simple and straightforward, it being the necromantic career of the main character, but it succeeds in what it tries to do and it's interesting and overall well thought out. As with most of Endmaster's stories, it is a "vital" plot, as it is about the life of the main character rather than just a single story in it, and as such it deals with a lot of the topics a life has (war, love, family, sex, death, etc).

The feel of politics, warfare and intrigue and the choices to make in such fields are also very interesting. The choices are complete (as they included what I would do in those situations) and they can change the outcome of the story substantially. Such things are also very logical, as what would usually work in real life is what works in the story. It is, therefore, realistic.

Another important thing is the ending, as it can screw a good story without too much problems. Both of the major endings are satisfying and well thought out, and some of the dead ends are pretty satisfying and fun too.

It is important for a fictional world to have definite rules that are followed all the time; otherwise, it is inconsequential and its choices become just random luck. This isn't obviously the case with Necromancer, as the rules are clear and followed throughout the story.

Writing and vocabulary:
The vocabulary in Necromancer is rich and employs accurate wording, without ever feeling distant, cold or pompous. In fact, one of the best things about Endmaster’s writing is that it combines this sort of vocabulary with a closeness with the reader and some sarcastic smirks that makes his writing truly enjoyable despite it being opposed to mine (which feels long, tedious and is like basically reading your calculator’s instruction manual in Chinese).

Technical details:
An especially gruesome typo can be a distraction from the story, and a bad layout can make it unreadable. This of course doesn’t happen with Necromancer, as the layout is fine as it is. There are some typos and repeated words, but those are minor, scarce, and don’t detract from the story at all.

As I said in the beginning, I find this to be the best multiple choice story I have ever reed, although that is partially due to personal reasons. Analyzing it coldly, it may not be the best one, but it is certainly among them. I therefore give it an 8/8 (a 10 in my book), and I encourage everyone who hasn’t read it before to do so, it will be worth the time.

Also, thanks to Endmaster for writing such a masterpiece and giving it away for free. Your love for the art is truly commendable.
-- Martin_Silenus on 1/5/2017 6:26:27 PM
Wow... I must say that was truly an amazing read. Not something I would normally read, but I'm glad I stumbled across it. Took four hours to read as I basically had to read it twice (I went to hell hehe.) I loved the epilogue though. Leaves me something to ponder. Great story, Endmaster!! I look forward to reading your other stories...
-- breezy134 on 2/2/2016 6:07:44 AM
One of the things you do so well in your stories is make clearly distinguishable, and rich characters. It's almost as though you don't have a single flat character, all are well-rounded and seem fully developed from the moment they are introduced. This story is no exception.
-- donteatpoop on 10/9/2007 8:59:17 PM
As always, I begin by saying I am not an author and have no idea of the work and creativity that goes into creating these stories. I respect and admire all who put forth the effort. I found this story to be equal parts entertaining and disturbing. Amazingly well-written, I was always curious what was coming next. However the characters seemed a Maybe that was intentional, but it did hurt the immersion for me.
-- Perk1973 on 6/20/2017 6:53:10 PM
This was AMAZING. I was almost brought to tears a couple of times
-- Ghost on 6/19/2017 6:56:26 PM
Good Story and Plot From Characters to dialogue
To everything
-- Gab122006 on 6/10/2017 5:37:36 AM
Was very neat to read, however the choices needed more explanation before i picked them, Also the Diologe between people was very wooden or downright off compared to the situation.
-- Jake the Snake on 6/8/2017 2:51:23 PM
Clearly a huge amount of time has been invested into this, which is how it should be. This story is a brilliant example of how to write a CYOA story. Even with no more than two choices for any given fork (as far as I've seen and I've played it a few times now!), there is wide variation, realistic consequences for the choices you make, and believable characters. The beginning is written in a skillful depiction of how a lot of teenagers feel in the World, and soon matures and progresses with time as you make choices. The characters almost without exception have life of their own.
There are very few spelling mistakes or missed words, though I did find some of the pacing of the dialogue and description a bit fast. Then again, it might just be because I personally abuse commas.
All in all, an inspirational story that's surely influenced many on this site, and for good reason.
-- AzBaz on 6/2/2017 8:01:55 AM
Endmaster I bow to your skill in weaving a story that both enraptures and captivates those who start it. I found both the Necromancer and Eternal were enriching, Heart-felt, enlightening, and the emotion and personality you gave the characters in both made hurt when I saw them pass on.
-- Dethlord99 on 5/28/2017 9:37:16 PM
Would become a god of death again.
Seriously I hope the story I'm working on is as good as this
I need to get more pictures like you did with this story but they are difficult to make Hmm anyways ya I've read it before but it was good to read it again I think the reason I didn't rate your stories before is because either I was too lazy to write a paragraph or I didn't have an account, either way, it has been done gonna go re-read eternal now.
-- Multiverse on 5/27/2017 10:00:22 PM
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