Necromancer

a Fantasy Adventure by EndMaster

Commended by BerkaZerka on 7/25/2019 4:55:44 PM

Player Rating7.20/8

"#5 overall, #1 for 2007"
based on 10188 ratings since 10/09/2007
played 217,690 times (finished 12,634)

Story Difficulty8/8

"mosie through a minefield"

Play Length6/8

"It'll be a while, better grab a Snickers®"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

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Additional Notes:

This story is definitely more "story" than "game", however there are two distinct paths that can be followed, each with their own pitfalls and additional choices. There is also "one true" ending in which can be considered a "win" (You'll know if you got it, because you'll get an epilogue)

This story can get long, and assuming you're surviving, years do pass in it and you and your environment will change. There are a few points in the story where there are links that lead to more background information on various people and things. While not completely necessary to understand the story, they do give you more insight into it. The text that accompanies some of the pics are also done for similar purposes (Your journal entries, personal thoughts, letters written to you, etc)

Player Comments

This is gonna be less of a critique and more so my scattered praises about this game. I cover everything included in the story to the best of my ability, so don’t read this if you haven’t read the damn story. To be honest, I’m skimming this tonight because I love to consume my Endmaster stories in one sitting. It doesn’t matter to me, because I’ve read and enjoyed this many times on different occasions. I’m mostly focusing on reference points.

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I've played this many times and it wasn't until now that I realized that this game is only 70,000 words long. It feels so much larger. That's because of how mighty the story made me feel. Watching the Necromancer's knack for necromancy turn into expertise so quickly was pretty cool, and the ensuing megalomania and paranoia were great. It felt like a real life power trip! That’s cool. I’m a fan of magic and witchcraft in fantasy in general because of the potential for creative exercises of power, and this story is completely centered around this. I constantly feel like a mythical hero while reading this.

Yes, I typed ‘hero’ on purpose. One of the greatest touches in this tale is that in some of the circumstances, the Necromancer had the moral high ground. That’s definitely not normal for necromancers! Like when he slays the has-been fucking blood leeches. Those wretched creatures are posing as powerful beacons of might, but in reality they’re just human ticks with delusions of grandeur. A real conqueror of the mortal coil was all that it took to show them who’s the master of the puppets. The conquering of Aftermath was epic on both paths. I love the way that the demon-lich Necromancer channels spectral spirits, even though the ‘pure’ path is my favorite. Sure, a bunch of civilians died during the Nuro Incident, but we can just raise those corpses and blame their fate on those damn demonologists! While demon lich monster slaves were cool, I found the undead giants that the pure Necromancer gets to be cooler, and he gets all those spirits later on anyway.

Speaking of the Drozz Tribes, I love the Ghoul King. He’s a nice addition to the story and his character is instrumental to the turning point of the story. When I’m not paying attention to the invasion choice, I still tend to pick the Drozz Tribes over the Brot Kingdom because of how well that invasion choice sells GIANT ZOMBIES. That said, the Dead Dominion’s formation was a little quick for five years… but that didn’t harm the pacing in the scheme of things.

Back to the demons. Velzix and crew were an interesting and intriguing bunch. I like that the demon path has more characters that play a part, however now that I’m reflecting on this aspect, I do wish that these characters would have a more impactful part on the plot on both paths. The story works without many other personalities because of the egotistical nature of the main character, and I see the value in that, but I still find the story to be a bit lonely, even though that’s the point of destroying the world.

On top of all of this, I love the moment where the Necromancer can stop his own conception. That and the moment when the Necromancer can allow his sister to kill him were tragic. When given the option to make the Necromancer’s sister into a Hellspawn creature, this multiplies the sadness of it, even though the cruelty is so captivating.

The end of the game itself is fantastic. I mean, becoming the God of Death is phenomenal.

To sum it all up, I find this story to be top tier, and there are only two flaws I saw. The first was that there were a few moments when I thought the pacing was too fast, and the second was that the pure necromancer path could have used more characters. It started off strong on that front but it degraded after the capture of Aftermath.

8/8 game, Endmaster. This is one of your older stories and I can’t wait to see what you make next!
-- 3iguy on 1/1/2020 10:46:45 PM with a score of 0
Well I’m doing it at last. Necromancer was the first game I ever read by EndMaster, and is still my favorite game on this site, though I haven’t read Eternal or Rouges yet. I have put off writing this review on account of the fact that I knew in advance that it would be a very long one, and I didn’t know if I could stop myself from gushing out a 2k word review rambling about how amazing this story is. Well here we are at last, and I’m going to keep this as brief as I can.

Okay so let me start off by saying this game is a flawless gem written on parchment crafted from the fire of the underworld, and with a pen made from Hades skull, and even this would not be doing this game justice. If you have not read this game yet then FUCKING DO THAT RIGHT NOW! Out of the big three endmaster stories, Eternal, Necromancer, and Rouges, this is the shortest one. It’s only about 80k words overall, keep in mind that the other two are around 500k to 600k. 80k words is about the length of a warrior cat book. So make a choice, read this free masterpiece that will bring joy to your sad pathetic life, or pay for a literal pile of shit. Hard choice, I know, but I trust you will make the right one.

Now let me be a little more specific here. I have went on and on about how this story is one of the best things ever written, but I’m right now the main question going through your mind is why I think so highly of this story. Well I have many reasons for this, and I’ll do my best to explain them without spoiling anything.

One thing that I adore about this story is the concept. The whole idea of raising the dead, taking over land, and murdering everything in the entire world is just great to me. If I was talking about a normal story I would rant and rave about how I was let down that they teases these things and failed to provide them, but because this is fucking necromancer, it gives me all of this and more. This story expands everything it teases and does it in such a wonderful way that only endmaster could pull off.

Also it’s not all about the plot. The execution is also very important, luckily for me I’m reading necromancer, so that is covered in spades. I have stated this many times and I will state it again, EndMaster’s writing is fucking magic. May I repeat, it is fucking magic. The perfect amount of detail, word choices, and depth. Writing is something that one can not simply explain, for there are three sides to writing. There is the technical stuff, grammar, spelling, etc. There is the story stuff, character depth. Plot, ect. Then there is the magic. This is the stuff that is just so hard to explain. I don’t know what this is called, but EndMaster has mastered it.

In the end I could rant about this story forever. There is just so many things to love about it. Though I’m going to have to end this here. This story is perfect.

8 out of 8
-- MicroPen on 9/24/2019 9:16:29 PM with a score of 0
This is the first story I read in this site when I happily stumbled upon it a couple years ago, and it was the one that got me hooked to it. And after all this time, I still find it to be the best and most touching multiple choice story I have ever read.

I took the first way back then, and didn't play the other one up until now as I was so involved in the story I didn't want it to be any different. Needless to say, the second way is as good and interesting, and it also explores more in depth some of the characters of the first one.


Now with the real review:

Characters:
I think that the most important thing in a narrative text are the characters. I find that good characters can justify a mediocre plot but that a good plot can't justify mediocre characters. The characters in Necromancer are all well crafted and have a personality, and as such they all feel like real individuals.

I can relate to the emotions felt by the main character, which helps in getting into the story and believing it, which is a big plus in this kinds of stories. In fact, I think that part of the special significance of this story to me is that I identify with it’s main character at some level. I’ve been there, and I’ve had those thoughts.

Plot:
The plot of this story is pretty simple and straightforward, it being the necromantic career of the main character, but it succeeds in what it tries to do and it's interesting and overall well thought out. As with most of Endmaster's stories, it is a "vital" plot, as it is about the life of the main character rather than just a single story in it, and as such it deals with a lot of the topics a life has (war, love, family, sex, death, etc).

The feel of politics, warfare and intrigue and the choices to make in such fields are also very interesting. The choices are complete (as they included what I would do in those situations) and they can change the outcome of the story substantially. Such things are also very logical, as what would usually work in real life is what works in the story. It is, therefore, realistic.

Another important thing is the ending, as it can screw a good story without too much problems. Both of the major endings are satisfying and well thought out, and some of the dead ends are pretty satisfying and fun too.

Consequence:
It is important for a fictional world to have definite rules that are followed all the time; otherwise, it is inconsequential and its choices become just random luck. This isn't obviously the case with Necromancer, as the rules are clear and followed throughout the story.

Writing and vocabulary:
The vocabulary in Necromancer is rich and employs accurate wording, without ever feeling distant, cold or pompous. In fact, one of the best things about Endmaster’s writing is that it combines this sort of vocabulary with a closeness with the reader and some sarcastic smirks that makes his writing truly enjoyable despite it being opposed to mine (which feels long, tedious and is like basically reading your calculator’s instruction manual in Chinese).

Technical details:
An especially gruesome typo can be a distraction from the story, and a bad layout can make it unreadable. This of course doesn’t happen with Necromancer, as the layout is fine as it is. There are some typos and repeated words, but those are minor, scarce, and don’t detract from the story at all.

Conclusions:
As I said in the beginning, I find this to be the best multiple choice story I have ever reed, although that is partially due to personal reasons. Analyzing it coldly, it may not be the best one, but it is certainly among them. I therefore give it an 8/8 (a 10 in my book), and I encourage everyone who hasn’t read it before to do so, it will be worth the time.

Also, thanks to Endmaster for writing such a masterpiece and giving it away for free. Your love for the art is truly commendable.
-- Martin_Silenus on 1/5/2017 6:26:27 PM with a score of 0
Recently i have beed dping these vyoa stories and this is the only one i have rated the reason being how i felt after going tru whole story. Even the real ending which i hoped it would turn out different left me really bothered and drenched out of emotions. The cost of concuring whole world imo was being alone and knowing that fact i dont know single person who would indulge in such thing, and then when i put my self in his shoes i felt completely broken. It really hit me hard in the end because for me this wasnt really happy ending imo it was very sad that person would give away everything just to be the most powerfull being in his world
-- Killing god on 2/11/2020 9:46:06 PM with a score of 0
i played all possible ways and i loved it!
-- Amiro0o on 2/8/2020 3:38:53 AM with a score of 0
This is amazing and I love it
-- OfficalFrog on 1/27/2020 2:12:43 PM with a score of 0
heck yeah
-- kadeloft30 on 1/26/2020 10:01:19 PM with a score of 0
please make another story on how and where he walked through the portal plz. 8/8 fantastic story I really enjoyed it I went through every single path and I loved it all.
-- james collins on 1/23/2020 2:11:34 PM with a score of 0
I liked it a lot.
-- Disciple on 1/14/2020 2:54:51 PM with a score of 0
This has a horrible plot and you read SO MUCH and there are barely any choices and just this is BULLSHIT. Don't waste your time.
-- Fine on 1/13/2020 10:46:21 PM with a score of 0
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