No Man`s Land (Zombie Survival)

Wow. This was definitely good! I enjoyed reading this the first time through, and going through again, and again. Multiple paths and stories to take. This was well thought out and well written (despite a few, minor spelling mistakes).
There are some issues in continuity and plot that I had. Like, 'how long was I passed out in that car'? You stated that the surrounding structures were in various states of disrepair, which made me wonder how long I was out. Was it for a few hours? If so, then those zombies flooded that city faster than a tsunami. Was it a few days? If so, that's understandable, when looking back at Telltale's The Walking Dead, when Lee was unconscious for a few days in the Police Car. Was it for a couple months? If so, no. Not even Rick could have survived that long (luckily a doctor stayed behind and took care of him.)
But my issues aren't quantitative, as this story is well executed, and makes sense. You say this is your first story, so I'm excited to see what else you can conjure up!

6/8

I must say that this was a pretty fantastic storygame overall. I've experienced many games with this exact setting, but I believe that you've done a pretty decent job with making sure that your story was both intuitive and interesting at the end of the day. There were a fair bit of choices and paths to be taken, so hats off to you on that front of things. I definitely see much promise and growth from you as a writer with what you displayed in your writing in this piece.

The idea for having achievements to be earned throughout the story was a concept that I found to be rather fascinating. While I do believe that maybe such at thing could have been better implemented, such as possibly having achievements with a bit more difficulty in achieving, and perhaps having all of the achievements that a reader was able to get displayed at whichever ending they received would have made the conclusion to a path more fulfilling.

While I did have my fair share of enjoyment with this story, I feel that some improvement could have been made with fleshing out the dialogue and giving it some more depth. I feel that such a decision would have made the choices feel more impactful, and the story as well by extension. Sometimes it simply felt that the emotional aspect of things took a backseat to other facets of this story, though those aspects that I feel that were given more focus weren't done poorly.

In conclusion, good work. This was a zombie game that I found myself enjoying with each achievement and ending that I received.

underrated

Kinda zippy, but well done. Bravo!

BETTER TOGETHER. That is true. For zombies and things like that.

This is amazing.

I liked it but.. what about about the kids? It's like you completely forgotten that they exist.

military rescue, product placement, out on a limb

Enjoyable. Making it longer and more diverse, I believe, would increase the rating.

This is a solid zombie survival. Good endings, funny scenes. overall good, grammar is a bit messed up but, minor detail.