No Quarter

a Fan Fiction by WouldntItBeNice

Commended by JJJ-thebanisher on 1/28/2017 2:04:55 PM

Player Rating4.97/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 34 ratings since 01/26/2017
played 254 times (finished 38)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

This is a fan fiction of Led Zeppelin's song "No Quarter".

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It is also an entry for the New Frontier Contest.

Player Comments

Congratulations on being the first to earn a commendation on a storygame!

This was far from a perfect CYOA but the writing was strong and the author did an excellent job of establishing the setting and of evoking wintery imagery. I enjoyed how ambiguous the POV was for the first half of the story and I felt that the author's choices contributed to allowing the reader to engage with the sense of dread and hopelessness that the character's felt.

This storygame was too short and too linear to be qualified as an excellent CYOA, but it was a very good read nonetheless. I would really appreciate a longer, more branching version of this storygame where the author delves deeper into the world and establishes the events that led to this horrible realm. There were also a few awkward sentences where the same word was reused too soon, so a shallow edit would be useful too.

Overall, this was an engaging and enjoyable read but the author could have provided us with much more, so I am left a little disappointed.
-- JJJ-thebanisher on 1/28/2017 2:11:40 PM
Good work.
-- FazzTheMan on 2/24/2017 7:32:11 PM
Holy cow...

I got really absorbed by your story, Wouldn't. It is like every sentence is thoroughly explained, you've fulfilled my demand for detail in a storygame.

Still, this had some issues. Could have been longer, but I do understand this is a contest entry, and you can't delve into writing for too long because contests have deadlines.

The endings, too. Failure holds no quarter in your story. The best ending I got still looked like a fail. Your story, to be honest, is a tad too pessimistic for my taste. It seems you're just hopelessly outmatched by all except the will to go on.

Suggestion: You could make an even greater story by making a sequel to this.

In the end, never the worst, but will never be the best. 5/8.
-- AgentX on 2/11/2017 5:26:32 AM
I like the idea, and the pictures lent it a certain feel, and added to the depth and plot, and it certainly branched out, but there was no well-defined plot, and while it is easy to guess that same plot, it still could use some brightening. It has a somber mood that works well with the length of the story, and the words are easy to read and understand. There are a lot of great qualities to this story, and they compliment the bad qualities very well, but, to my eyes, if you fixed just one of the bad qualities the story would be ruined. You have a ton of potential, and I would love to see another story. You grasped the story, and made it a summary, but made the summary a story of its own. You could give a choice on the second page though, instead of 2 pages in a row of no choices. Keep it up, though!
-- Anonymous on 1/29/2017 3:37:58 PM
I don't want to write an essay explaining all the good and bad about the story, but here's what I was thinking: This story is fuggin' amazing!!

P.S. Out of the box idea for you story, I loved it!
-- Riversage on 1/27/2017 8:57:54 AM
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