Player Comments on Nutters

Well, this was certainly random. I did like that pictures were included, that did help a little tiny bit. Random CYOA stories can be hard to pull off. Sure, you did explain that it would be random; and some of the original CYOA books were quite random. But I’m not sure this really pulls off the randomness that really makes sense (if that makes sense). It was nice to have choices, but why were there choices, other than just them being random?

But there were also a number of different spelling errors throughout the story. That takes a barely readable random story and makes it even worse. Also, despite the randomness, even with a random story it is nice if there is some kind of idea of direction and hints as to what direction to go. I did appreciate that there were options, and a good number of options, but no one really had any idea which options were going to lead to a quick death and which would advance the “Story.”

So thank you for sharing this with the site and for the attempt, but IMO this one really needs a bit of work to be more of a story and more of a CYA. Even just adding more descriptions and details on each page would expand the randomness of the story to be more readable. That, and editing for spelling errors would be quite helpful.
-- Ogre11 on 7/5/2018 9:44:44 PM
I'll just say it right away. I didn't enjoy this.

First of all, it was very random (which you literally admitted in the description), and I couldn't even tell what was going on through all the linear writing and awkward, underdeveloped characters. All I know about Mandy is that she seems to get pissed really easily and knows boxing, but nothing much at all beyond that. Even for lolrandom games like this one developed characters are VERY important.

Then there was the fact that there was little to no branching (just about each link leads to death), and I really couldn't make any choices that effected the story without killing myself.

There were also some spelling errors, such as "sueal" and not "squeal." This is very annoying, because this story is incredibly short and this makes it feel like you didn't proofread at all, because stories so short with such little branching should be incredibly easy to proofread.

I didn't pick up on any emotion either, but hey, there's way worse on the site I suppose.

2/8.
-- MinnieKing on 3/24/2017 12:42:02 AM
It was an average game for me. It had a nice amount of options and I liked playing a squirrel looking for nuts to eat. On the other hand, the not so great spelling and random deaths kind of held the game back for me. I suggest next time that you give a hint when I am close to dying.

5/8
-- JMgskills on 4/28/2012 3:43:58 PM
This game was ok, except for the spelling mistakes.
-- MusicalNerd7 on 6/4/2018 10:32:08 AM
Ok story...

There's some errors in grammar or just mistakes in the story.

You get bored more often then other story's.

And this story is short...

I think you could improve all of what I said and get a better rating.
Final rating: 3/8
-- TheGamerKing777 on 11/15/2017 2:32:59 PM
Cute story. I really loved the pictures! All the spelling errors made reading a bit difficult
-- Quorrah on 1/26/2017 3:02:19 PM
short, spelling was bad... but it was a good plot
-- thebigE on 4/26/2016 6:46:39 PM
Died every time....
-- TitanOfShadows on 1/9/2016 1:52:20 AM
I like the idea and branches out nicely, but this was filled with many, MANY spelling and grammar errors. And sometimes sometimes you would repeat a word.

Please go over your story after you finish it. For now it's a 3/8. But if you fix those errors then I might rate it higher.
-- SonicTurboTurtle on 10/31/2015 5:25:12 PM
heheheh
-- AthenaT on 4/25/2015 10:06:53 PM
It is a great idea for a book but the grammar was dreadful and I wish it was longer.
-- Madbrad200 on 6/14/2014 9:38:52 AM
Life of a squirrel…interesting!
-- Nightsky on 4/26/2014 5:34:19 PM
Ugh! Veary challenging!
-- erose524 on 3/24/2014 4:20:51 PM
Could've been better, but it was certainly educational!
-- EarthCollision on 2/27/2014 1:15:53 PM
Now I regret shooting that squirrel yesterday. I'm joking. He made a nice squirrelly hat for my pet wolf.
-- LiLPKThunder on 12/15/2013 3:26:16 PM
I agree with dbzfan94.
-- Author4 on 10/22/2013 8:05:59 PM
I thought it was okay if it could be your first story game. I can help you come up with better ideas.
-- dbzfan94 on 5/5/2013 8:02:20 AM
Something to read, kinda funny, overall pretty good for a random story i picked.
-- ringo98 on 2/3/2013 2:24:21 PM
Squirrels are cool ^_^
-- Briar_Rose on 11/17/2012 5:27:47 PM
Seth says MEH!!! I'm a sucker for random stories :) 4/8
-- SethIsBeast on 11/7/2012 7:08:35 PM
Not that fun, but at least you tried.
-- CovElite on 10/6/2012 6:03:34 PM
Pretty good. Nice premise, being a squirrel. a bit linear though. Try to add more to the plot, more characters and stuff. What you have is nice though.Good job! 6/8
-- ChaiHai on 8/29/2012 3:25:46 AM
never thought squirrel's life would be so hard...
-- Nicpinkygirl on 6/24/2012 12:50:26 PM
lots of grammor errors
-- betaband on 5/10/2012 5:54:29 PM
i killed my self it was funny 5/8
-- masterelf on 2/14/2012 10:14:04 AM
Killed by skunk gas.
-- BerkaZerka on 1/13/2012 12:45:15 PM
Kinda short...
-- DRBickham on 7/22/2011 8:16:01 PM
Bo approves
-- ThisisBo on 6/14/2011 3:28:22 PM
Funny, but mistakes are on the pages I did.
-- Killer999 on 6/3/2011 10:23:44 AM
ha real funny i got eten
-- detectiveyaya on 11/14/2010 10:49:25 PM
good story. pretty realisitc with the path i took. but with the "Sure mandy i'll get some" page, you spelled either "pets" or "pelts" wrong. either way, it's not the right way to spell it. but still a good story.
-- fergie14233 on 11/11/2010 2:02:03 PM
cute.
-- hummingbird3 on 2/26/2010 10:46:01 PM
meh, okay, ive seen better, but I've also seen alot worse.
Overall nice story
-- th*mage*of*kings on 9/20/2008 2:07:13 PM
For a second there, I thought I would never win. Not bad, as far as random games goes. I'll give you a 4/8.
-- Leon101 on 6/22/2008 11:59:56 PM
It sucks. Mutant bats? What are you? 3?
-- Hater on 3/19/2008 4:39:08 PM
pretty good.
-- Rommel on 4/12/2007 5:16:29 AM
Nice concept and writing. Your grammar and spelling could use some work.
-- PrinceOProvidence on 12/31/2006 3:14:20 PM
Nice idea.
-- October on 10/27/2006 10:30:23 AM
cute idea
-- Sethaniel on 10/17/2006 3:16:58 PM
Aww!
-- primates on 9/23/2006 9:46:41 PM
Well actually madglee.... Eagles do capture prey by movement EXCEPT this eagle was directly overhead of you therefore you can assume it already saw you (Or it wouldn't have dove in because like you said they capture by movement) then when you stayed ABSOLUTELY still, it had already seen you and its perfect eye sgight (like 500/500 lol) easily picked you out.

Madglee for lunk, LMAOROFL.
-- JJJ-thebanisher on 8/9/2006 11:01:47 AM
Decent writing and reasonably fun. I thought Eagles kill prey based on their movement, though. Maybe that's not true.
-- madglee on 8/8/2006 9:11:50 PM
It's an interesting game as long as you be careful with your decisions.
-- Jamie on 8/7/2006 9:59:27 AM
Learn to spell and use punctuation, little brother.
-- e-dogg on 1/21/2006 1:00:38 AM
Suprisingly good. Almsot no holes in the plot, although the plot wasn't large. I love the caracters but I really don't like the subject. Great spelling. 5/8!
-- TheAssasin on 1/10/2006 7:04:16 PM
Is there any way to actually win? And do squirrels get married? Where, at Vegas? And how do you poison nuts? I am confused...
-- Miccy2000 on 1/2/2006 5:26:06 PM
Pretty dang good, especially for a first game! Great job!
-- JJJ on 1/2/2006 3:31:48 AM
well that was a cute game. it was really adventurious(however you spell that word). You should try and make it longer.
-- laffytaffykitty on 1/1/2006 3:37:45 PM
It is an okay game. Nice work.
-- Havacoman on 12/30/2005 12:45:08 AM
i'm new here, i don't know wat's good or bad, but i reakon this is preety good.
-- Agent 09 on 12/29/2005 3:52:56 AM
This was a funny game
-- Jeremy on 12/29/2005 3:50:20 AM
Preety entertaing
-- Fiona on 12/29/2005 3:43:04 AM
Cool game nick, but make the next one a bit longer.
-- Fitzy on 12/29/2005 3:40:53 AM
Brilliant
-- Tom on 12/29/2005 3:40:13 AM
Fun
-- Jackson on 12/29/2005 3:17:02 AM
thats a neat little story there. you do know how to tell a story. bring more depth and more advanced concepts to your next game and it will be pretty good.
-- flesh on 12/29/2005 2:44:51 AM
This game is preety good. Not very funny, but not everythings perfect.
-- Jeremy on 12/29/2005 2:04:13 AM
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