Player Comments on Nutters

Well, this was certainly random. I did like that pictures were included, that did help a little tiny bit. Random CYOA stories can be hard to pull off. Sure, you did explain that it would be random; and some of the original CYOA books were quite random. But I’m not sure this really pulls off the randomness that really makes sense (if that makes sense). It was nice to have choices, but why were there choices, other than just them being random?

But there were also a number of different spelling errors throughout the story. That takes a barely readable random story and makes it even worse. Also, despite the randomness, even with a random story it is nice if there is some kind of idea of direction and hints as to what direction to go. I did appreciate that there were options, and a good number of options, but no one really had any idea which options were going to lead to a quick death and which would advance the “Story.”

So thank you for sharing this with the site and for the attempt, but IMO this one really needs a bit of work to be more of a story and more of a CYA. Even just adding more descriptions and details on each page would expand the randomness of the story to be more readable. That, and editing for spelling errors would be quite helpful.

I'll just say it right away. I didn't enjoy this.

First of all, it was very random (which you literally admitted in the description), and I couldn't even tell what was going on through all the linear writing and awkward, underdeveloped characters. All I know about Mandy is that she seems to get pissed really easily and knows boxing, but nothing much at all beyond that. Even for lolrandom games like this one developed characters are VERY important.

Then there was the fact that there was little to no branching (just about each link leads to death), and I really couldn't make any choices that effected the story without killing myself.

There were also some spelling errors, such as "sueal" and not "squeal." This is very annoying, because this story is incredibly short and this makes it feel like you didn't proofread at all, because stories so short with such little branching should be incredibly easy to proofread.

I didn't pick up on any emotion either, but hey, there's way worse on the site I suppose.

2/8.

It was an average game for me. It had a nice amount of options and I liked playing a squirrel looking for nuts to eat. On the other hand, the not so great spelling and random deaths kind of held the game back for me. I suggest next time that you give a hint when I am close to dying.

5/8

Your description is very accurate

This game was ok, except for the spelling mistakes.

Ok story...

There's some errors in grammar or just mistakes in the story.

You get bored more often then other story's.

And this story is short...

I think you could improve all of what I said and get a better rating.
Final rating: 3/8

Cute story. I really loved the pictures! All the spelling errors made reading a bit difficult

short, spelling was bad... but it was a good plot

Died every time....

I like the idea and branches out nicely, but this was filled with many, MANY spelling and grammar errors. And sometimes sometimes you would repeat a word.

Please go over your story after you finish it. For now it's a 3/8. But if you fix those errors then I might rate it higher.

heheheh

It is a great idea for a book but the grammar was dreadful and I wish it was longer.

Life of a squirrel…interesting!

Ugh! Veary challenging!

Could've been better, but it was certainly educational!

Now I regret shooting that squirrel yesterday. I'm joking. He made a nice squirrelly hat for my pet wolf.

I agree with dbzfan94.

I thought it was okay if it could be your first story game. I can help you come up with better ideas.

Something to read, kinda funny, overall pretty good for a random story i picked.

Squirrels are cool ^_^

Seth says MEH!!! I'm a sucker for random stories :) 4/8

Not that fun, but at least you tried.

Pretty good. Nice premise, being a squirrel. a bit linear though. Try to add more to the plot, more characters and stuff. What you have is nice though.Good job! 6/8

never thought squirrel's life would be so hard...

lots of grammor errors

i killed my self it was funny 5/8

Killed by skunk gas.

Kinda short...

Bo approves

Funny, but mistakes are on the pages I did.

ha real funny i got eten

good story. pretty realisitc with the path i took. but with the "Sure mandy i'll get some" page, you spelled either "pets" or "pelts" wrong. either way, it's not the right way to spell it. but still a good story.

cute.

meh, okay, ive seen better, but I've also seen alot worse.
Overall nice story

For a second there, I thought I would never win. Not bad, as far as random games goes. I'll give you a 4/8.

It sucks. Mutant bats? What are you? 3?

pretty good.

Nice concept and writing. Your grammar and spelling could use some work.

Nice idea.

cute idea

Aww!

Well actually madglee.... Eagles do capture prey by movement EXCEPT this eagle was directly overhead of you therefore you can assume it already saw you (Or it wouldn't have dove in because like you said they capture by movement) then when you stayed ABSOLUTELY still, it had already seen you and its perfect eye sgight (like 500/500 lol) easily picked you out.

Madglee for lunk, LMAOROFL.

Decent writing and reasonably fun. I thought Eagles kill prey based on their movement, though. Maybe that's not true.

It's an interesting game as long as you be careful with your decisions.

Learn to spell and use punctuation, little brother.

Suprisingly good. Almsot no holes in the plot, although the plot wasn't large. I love the caracters but I really don't like the subject. Great spelling. 5/8!

Is there any way to actually win? And do squirrels get married? Where, at Vegas? And how do you poison nuts? I am confused...

Pretty dang good, especially for a first game! Great job!

well that was a cute game. it was really adventurious(however you spell that word). You should try and make it longer.

It is an okay game. Nice work.

i'm new here, i don't know wat's good or bad, but i reakon this is preety good.

This was a funny game

Preety entertaing

Cool game nick, but make the next one a bit longer.

Brilliant

Fun

thats a neat little story there. you do know how to tell a story. bring more depth and more advanced concepts to your next game and it will be pretty good.

This game is preety good. Not very funny, but not everythings perfect.