Secrets of Target

Player Rating2.42/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 47 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

Tags

Get ready to go on the quest of your life at.....TARGET dun dun duuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu. NOTE: there WILL be a sequel.

Player Comments

Well, that certainly was... something... I understand that this is your first story and I really think it's great that you put time into writing this. However, I'm kinda sorry to say that your game isn't great. In my opinion it is waaay to random. I have the feeling that you might have been trying to write a funny/quirky story and that the general randomness is part of that, but I personally didn't like it, though others might.

I have given your story a 3/8, because I can see that you put time into writing this and it at least has some choices, though most of them lead to a random death scene. However, the, in my opinion, poor writing and random randomness prevent it from getting a higher rating. However, I'm sure that your next game will be better.

Good luck writing!
-- Romulus on 8/20/2014 1:04:18 PM with a score of 0
This story is a rudimental one at best, however I appreciate the time at much have been put into it. The writing style is incredibly imaginative and creative, and I feel like you could really come up with some brilliant plots and ideas. Although, saying that, this seems based off the Wal*mart game quite a bit. Also tone down the randomness a little, run your story through a grammar checker, and maybe elaborate slightly on each page you make. There were two main paths in this story, one being considerably longer than the other. Next time, think more about how you can let the reader influence the way the story leads out in a more meaningful way. 4/8
-- insanebutvain on 8/19/2014 7:07:26 AM with a score of 0
But but but... I just wanted to watch TV mom...

Can I please have my head back?
-- CurseOfTime on 3/24/2016 10:55:00 AM with a score of 0
This game was very random. None of the deaths made sense.
-- ZagHero on 12/14/2015 3:41:03 AM with a score of 0
I don't want to echo nmelssx comment but...no one likes random games.
-- Serenemyth on 8/21/2014 5:27:19 AM with a score of 0
"You start walking. Suddenly, some of your basketball Buds come racing along. One pulls out a dagger and 3 ninja stars, and throws everything toward your head. They don't miss there mark. You fall over dead, while they start devouring your body like cannibals, your mind gives 1 last thought before you die:"

Dude, your game is random. No one like random games.
-- nmelssx on 8/19/2014 11:53:31 PM with a score of 0
One thing I noticed is that you tend not to put a space when you start a new sentence. The writing style is rather childish, but that is excusable, since this is supposed to be humorous. On that subject, I would like to point out that most of the tags you have put on this game are inappropriate. It is not a war game. It is not serious. It most certainly has no puzzle elements. Social importance? Yeah, right. The only tag you currently have that would be even somewhat appropriate is "part of a series", and that's just because it's impossible to disprove that you are working on a sequel. Still, you did seem to put a little effort into it. 3/8.
-- jamescoker1226 on 8/19/2014 9:36:11 AM with a score of 0
Meh, it was entertaining enough.
-- coins on 8/19/2014 7:14:08 AM with a score of 0
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