The Drugs Wouldn't Stop The Nightmares, Chapter One.

a Horror by Fniff

Player Rating3.38/8

"#685 overall, #12 for 2010"
based on 147 ratings since 03/24/2010
played 1,199 times (finished 146)

Story Difficulty4/8

"march in the swamp"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.


hELp mE...

You don't know where you are. Where are you? Can you remember?

It all doesn't matter.

You cannot see anything. You are deep in nightmares.

The doctors occasionally inject you with some sort of drug, and you spend hours awake, staring. Thinking. Hoping you'll be better again. They say nice things to you. They think you'll not hear the "I don't think he's going to have control over his body ever again" or the "I can't do this anymore.".

It all doesn't matter.

Your life is just nightmares and drugs. And the latter doesn't even help.

Even worse, the nightmares may be a viable alternative to the fate that might approach you in the real world...

Player Comments

I didn't like it much.

First of all, it's another one of those two minute storygames that claim to just be chapter one, but then the rest never gets published. It makes it feel like a demo and it feels incomplete.

The writing was pretty decent, I would have added more detail though. The nightmares were pretty creative and fun to read through.

The plot itself seemed a bit cliche to me, but it was very well fleshed out. I would have had more character development if I were you, which is quite crucial in these whole "I don't remember anything," pieces.

I would have really liked a backstory, but I guess that was planned for the future chapters that never got published, and probably never will for that matter.

The small amount of branching was a bit annoying, but I guess there were a few paths. However, the short length doesn't really go with the branching very well...

3/8.
-- MinnieKing on 3/21/2017 7:07:37 PM with a score of 0
The writing and premise are good. The nightmares are creative enough to motivate me to play multiple times to read about all of them. I just want to see more than the short stories I read. I hope Chapter Two has more creative nightmares and gives some satisfying backstory on the protagonist.
-- Melike on 8/23/2010 7:58:32 PM with a score of 0
This is a classic example of a writer trying to find his own style by changing the rules of grammar to suit his whims. It really doesn't work and all it does do is distract the reader. When you use more sentence fragments than actual sentences, the reader no longer is able to focus on your plot and can only attempt to struggle through reading your words. Essentially, they cannot see what you are saying, they can only see how you are saying it. You need to learn to write in conventional English before you will be able to properly tell a story. Cut out the sentence fragments, stop repeating yourself and find a way to use words instead of grammar to convey a mood. I suggest reading the top storygames on the site (particularly anything by Endmaster) to see what I'm saying.
-- JJJ-thebanisher on 3/25/2010 11:02:32 AM with a score of 0
Jesus Christ. what a happy ending(not sarcastic)
;D glad our wife sucked us
-- Richard 'Horndog' Cranium on 10/3/2019 5:47:02 PM with a score of 0
I don't want to sound whiny but you can die way to easy, I was not given any clue that going to my wife would kill me yet it did.
-- Xavier on 10/27/2017 7:36:00 PM with a score of 0
Do better drugs.
-- Alion on 8/8/2016 7:14:25 PM with a score of 0
Pretty lame.
-- WizzyCat on 3/21/2015 7:57:37 AM with a score of 0
Good but not great. Intro needs to set the scene better and story could do with being longer.
-- Jordi P on 10/6/2014 12:39:12 PM with a score of 0
Well written and fun but needs to be longer.
-- insanebutvain on 9/7/2014 6:59:19 AM with a score of 0
Well, that was a bit trippy to say the least.
-- PcGenie on 3/1/2014 8:22:35 AM with a score of 0
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