The Flame

Player Rating5.01/8

"#184 overall, #14 for 2013"
based on 105 ratings since 10/13/2013
played 692 times (finished 109)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

An allegory.

 

Author's note: the title of this story is actually The Fire, but someone else already created a storygame with that title, so I couldn't give it the title that I wanted. My second choice for the title was The Light, but another person already took that title as well, so, if you don't mind, just pretend that the title of this story is The Fire.

Player Comments

A unique and very compelling idea, but the illusion of choice is a bit of a bother. An excuse could be that no matter what path we take we always have a fate lined up for us. That would've been an interesting idea if it had been executed well. Unfortunately it just forces you into taking the option that the author wants you to.

Overall, could be improved greatly upon but I think the concept is great.
-- HJPike on 11/5/2015 3:53:27 AM with a score of 1
Let's just say that a lot of literary analysis had to be done to make the story good. Though, when interpreted into actual text, it is enjoyable, simpler readers will have trouble trying to find any entertainment from this overly simplistic story. I'm not sure if adding descriptions of your surroundings, your characters, and so forth will actually detract from the messages you've oh so cleverly placed in here, but I do suggest not giving your readers a wall of bland text to read.
-- Swiftstryker on 10/9/2013 7:56:57 PM with a score of 1
i really liked it....and then the ending. 1/8
-- iansjamsnsnsn on 4/22/2017 7:49:43 AM with a score of 1
I rated a 6. It is very obviously full of some very interesting symbolism, and you are an excellent writer. My only complaint would be that there was not quite enough depth to the story. However, I absolutely look forward to reading more of your work, and you have great potential.
-- LogstertheNewf on 4/21/2017 6:38:28 PM with a score of 1
just...amazing
-- _Lazer on 4/20/2017 3:52:07 PM with a score of 1
An interesting story although I wish the funnel had been wider to start and provided at least the illusion of choice. It could be improved upon but is deserving an honorable mention.
-- march5th00 on 4/20/2017 12:20:52 AM with a score of 1
nice story! would be better tho if u added more choices.but then again it is in progress! keep it up! :)
-- kman on 4/19/2017 8:28:51 AM with a score of 1
Spoiler!!!!! I don't really know what to rate this. It's just one big circle then? What's the point?
-- Quorrah on 1/11/2017 11:00:20 PM with a score of 1
It was a very nice little story. I liked the little twist at the end. In one way, it's kind of sad, but in another, I can't help but marvel at the endless cycle. Really good job. 6/8
-- Shadowulf on 6/15/2016 6:41:33 PM with a score of 1
not unique-there are some storygames that are built on this general line- but very good.
-- . on 6/13/2016 8:05:58 PM with a score of 1
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