The Foreigner

Player Rating3.53/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 16 ratings since 01/07/2021
played 293 times (finished 18)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length5/8

"Not going to lose any sleep"

Maturity Level3/8

"must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.

Typical life. Abusive father, drunken mom, and no friends. I'm sure you know what that's like. Maybe not. Well maybe you do, who knows! You deal with this stuff all the time and it's pretty crappy. That all changes one night. You get the chance of you're life. A chance to start over.

This is my second story and if you haven't read my other one, it is listed in horror: Friday the 13th. Again, this is only my 2nd story so please leave feedback if you find any major grammatical or spelling mistakes/broken links/broken items, I check comments frequently. Anyways I hope you enjoy.

There are some places where you will get a link that leads to a death and there are no other options. If you run into one of these, this means that you need to use an item in your inventory. Also every time you die and it says End Game and Leave Comments with the link to a previous page, that means you didn't get an ending. If you get one of these without a link to a previous page, click it. (You will be suprised!)


P.S (There is some Latin, so if you do not know that language it is recommended that you pull up a translator to figure out what the words mean.}

Please don't leave comments about my Latin speaking, I don't really know it. (May or may not have used google translate).

Finally, this story is kind of like how I evolved with my story telling. This is a story that I wrote over the time of a couple years because I would go on a hiatus of some sort every now and then. At the beginning was a couple years back and I just finished the story a couple hours ago, then I proofread it a couple times.

Anyhow, enjoy!


Player Comments

I think because of the way the game's set up, most people are going to find the edgy ending before this gets going and just take their point. But there's actually quite a bit here and it does get sort of interesting when you start finding out more about the aliens.

The writing itself is kind of sloppy and full of errors unfortunately, in addition to pretty obviously being written by a kid. In that sense it reminds me a bit of that Super Tale story published recently by 325boy. (Although that one had more signs of proofreading.) I don't regret reading it or anything and the potential is there, it's just missing a few layers of polish, and there are issues with character interaction and pacing that mean what are meant to be dramatic moments don't always work.

Is the Alzheimer's ending the only "winning" one btw? Because that was pretty anticlimactic.

Anyway, I can't really say this was a *good* story, but the sheer amount of writing, the items, puzzles, and so on all point to a lot of effort put in and that's admirable. And the enthusiasm behind it sort of won me over despite the other issues. The biggest flaws here are simply the amateurish nature of it all, and that's something the author will improve at with time and practice. (And proofreading!)
-- mizal on 1/24/2021 6:17:52 AM with a score of 0
The author is so obviously a 13 year old writing out their fantasies of being the most abused kid ever so they can justify violent revenge. It's all a bit silly.
-- HHH on 1/9/2021 5:13:52 PM with a score of 0
Pretty decent except for the typo here:

"Ok coming mom," you say.
-- ninjapitka on 1/8/2021 10:09:00 PM with a score of 0
The objects and usage of them are really bad designed. Most of times you only can use one and is the only choice, a choice that you know will end in a dead end. The plot is really bad developed and seems a mere filler for fewer objects than don't bring anything to the story. They also fail to be a puzzle.

Still, with more usage of different objects in the same scenes and more dialogue and character development,  it could be a good story. Maybe adding an intro with dialogue or portraying the childhood could make that readers care more for the protagonist.
-- poison_mara on 1/8/2021 6:18:27 PM with a score of 0
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