ninjapitka, The Novelist
I found myself lost in the CYS epics, and even though I'm more of a reader than a writer, I wanted to create my own.
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The Providence of Kria consists of two major nations: The Kingdom of Brelia and the tribal territory of Rath. The ten-year peace between Brelia and Rath is quickly unraveling. In attempt to prevent another war, heir to the throne of Brelia, Prince Urijah, is sent on a diplomatic mission to appeal to the Rathans. In your older brother's absence, the burden of defending the kingdom falls to you. Your choices will determine the fate of the kingdom.
Runner-up for Corgi's Unofficial Contest: The Lords of the Land.
9/1/19 Update: Corrected a few punctuation errors
The story adds fantasy elements to events occurring in the 1700s. There are many real life characters and places in the story. Many are factually accurate, and many are not. I highly encourage you to research the people, places, and deities after reading.
Entry for Gower's Battle in the Ruins of a Dead Civilization contest.
1852 - The Territory of New Mexico
The hunt has taken me to to the outer edges of civilization. Out here, lawlessness abides. There are no godly folk. Only heathen. The inner demon in me can relate to the call of anarchy. No rules, being bound by nothing; it sounds like freedom. In the end, that "freedom" is simply the self-indulgent, care-free living that is a poison upon humanity. If killing a man will save society from the infection of lawlessness, then I will gladly do what is necessary.
You eye the journal at your lap. The freshly written ink expands and bleeds to the perfect width of the quill. Satisfied that it won't smear, you shut the book and toss it aside. The meager fire at your feet does little to warm your body, but its original use was already completed. The frail, thin-boned squirrel did little to satisfy your hunger. Still, it would keep you alive until the next meal. You pull the leather waterskin from your pack to gauge how much longer it would last. With a gentle shake, you estimate it'll last a couple more days with strict rationing.
The road is lonely. In a former life, you dreamed about wandering the world without any responsibility or burdens. The reality of the road's harsh living conditions were nothing like the trigger-happy romanticized versions of the lawless west. Here there are no home-cooked meals, no warm body to lie next to yours. It's only you and the necessary task. Someone had to die.
You gaze up at the night sky. It seemed foreign at first. Without city lights to disorient the constellations, it looked like an entirely new sky. If you traveled at a good pace, you'd reach Canyon Diablo by midday. You pull the bone-carved pipe from your pack and light a match against the sole of your foot. You lie down on your bedroll, breathe in the relaxing tobacco, and drift off to sleep...
The Wild West is a dangerous place. Be sure to make good use of that "back" button. I've hidden three achievements throughout the story. Yes, your total score will show if you've discovered them or not. The highest score possible is an 8/8.
Achievements: 1 point each
Epilogue: 5 points
Entry for mizal's Lone Hero contest.
8/28/19 Update: Fixed the symbols appearing in the description
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And no, I didn’t write that locked on top of a tower. Well, I’m done. Remember when @Gower suggested a book a month? That aged well. Anyway, I was fascinated by this book's “element of eternity.”
There’s a mountain of things to cover since page 200. Perhaps starting with the relationship dynamics is the best place. Cassandra outlines the “food chain of love” perfectly near the end of the book. Instead of the love triangle I mentioned previously, the love interests in I Capture the Castle can be shown in a linear fashion. Someone’s always chasing another who’s chasing another who’s chasing another who’s chasing another…and who would have known Neil is at the top.
The relationship between Rose and Neil felt out of left field, although I suppose it was meant to be that way. As we are limited to Cass’s perspective, the fact it was surprising for her meant it was surprising for us. And why shouldn’t it be? Cass is rather inexperienced with love and really is only exposed through Rose’s endeavors with Simon. The realization of seeing Rose and Neil, along with the inclusion of previous events, gave a nice flashback moment. It was like scenes in a movie where the MC puts together seemingly normal events like puzzle pieces to figure out the mystery. I don’t think there’s a doubt in anyone’s mind that Rose actually loves Neil. The song she sang kind of cements that fact.
Now, let’s get to one of the characters I enjoyed most: Thomas. Just kidding, it’s actually Stephen. Stephen’s lap dog loyalty to Cassandra is baffling to me. Even more so when you consider the events of their late night walk. Stephen is the only young man in the history of young men to control himself in the heat of the moment, especially considering his lifelong infatuation with Cassandra. It’s only been a few chapters since he dropped the “Miss Cassandra” formality. Compared to Simon who would rather have an unloving Rose than no Rose at all (I think that’s mentioned, I don’t have the book in front of me now), Stephen will not advance things further with Cass unless the feelings are mutual. I have to imagine his un-mutual disposition with Mrs. Fox-Cotton came into effect here as he knows the feeling of passionlessly slingin’ “D.” I think his transition from farmhand to actor, along with being the only reliable support for Cassandra, makes him the unsung hero of the book.
While Simon, Rose, Neil, and to a degree, Mrs. Cotton, play an important part in the book, the most important character in the latter half of the book is Mortmain. Hell, Cass even stays in England rather than going with Simon for her father. The final chapters are really the only time you really see Mortmain’s character. There are small glimpses of him with Mrs. Cotton, but we get to see him, truly, through Cass’s eyes near the ending. Like the castle they live in, Mortmain feels like a crumbling shell of the man he used to be. The triumphant days are in the past, and there doesn’t seem to be a promising future. His tendency to suddenly explode reads exactly like Cassandra’s, though comes off as untrusting of himself in those situations due to the cake knife incident. Ultimately, we get an explanation for his reclusive behavior. I think one line sums it up perfectly, that Mortmain is “on the line between genius and insanity” (paraphrasing). The entire book alludes to Jacob Wrestling as a masterpiece. The view we receive of Mortmain doesn’t feel as if he could write something so great, but the reveal of his work is the first “show” of his expertise rather than the “tell” from all the dialogue before.
The theme of religion and spirituality was a significant portion of one of the chapters, but it never really appeared again. Well, scratch that…the mention of praying came up in the final chapter, but that’s pretty much it. With Cassandra’s visit to the Vicar, it felt like religion would play a bigger part in her life. Well, perhaps it did, though not in the way I imagined. I’m still thinking this through – can you tell? Religion mostly affected Cass in the way she viewed love as an idea. The mind automatically draws to romantic love, but love is not always romantic. As Cass is growing into adulthood and experiencing love for the first time, her experience with religion, the Vicar, and Ms. Marcy helps her understand love as a whole. I think the time in the book spent on religion and prayer all led up to the phone call with Stephen. In Cass’s most desperate need, she was lucky to find a return quarter for the call. Divine intervention?
There’s a ton of action in the second half in the book compared to the first. The mentioned topics were the ones that stuck out to me. What stuck out to you all? I didn’t even mention Simon’s relationship to both Rose and Cass, Topaz and the reemerging Mortmain, Thomas’ apparent usefulness in the “Ocean’s 2” plot, Mortmain’s new book, and Cassandra’s future at the castle. As someone not well educated in the literary department, I'm curious to hear your thoughts on theme, motif, and other words I picked up (but can't remember) half-asleep in my English classes.
Despite my slow pace, I really did enjoy the book. Cassandra’s love for writing is both topical and inspirational for being a member on this site. The attention to detail is something I’d like to include in my own work for creating an immersive experience for the reader. Read the margin, my fellow book clubbies, there’s a message written for you.
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