The Nightmare Realm

Player Rating4.80/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 39 ratings since 12/14/2018
played 0 times (finished 0)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length7/8

"It keeps going and going"

Maturity Level7/8

"anything goes"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 18. If this were a movie, it would probably be R.

Take control of James, a young boy who has suffered from horrific nightmares all his life that seem to be far more real than anyone else thinks, their effects seeping into the real world as your entire life becomes a nightmare. Try to stay sane throughout your miserable existence, while trying to end this curse and find some way to stop this hell.

Well, it's Halloween, and I haven't written anything in a while, so before your old Irish feen goes out and about on sesh, I thought I'd publish this. Enjoy!

Player Comments

Wow! WHAT. A. STORY. I definitely think this story deserves a spot in the Featured section of Horror games. This easily trumps so many horror stories on the site right now.

Let me start by saying this world the author has crafted, the Nightmare Realm, is ripe with rich imagery, sensory-invoking scenes that trigger every dark impulse and imagination of the human mind.

Throughout the story there are these amazing, show-don't-tell moments that I absolutely nerdgasm'd over. For example, there's this one moment with Archibald where he says he'll "savor" your character in one of the death scenes, and it doesn't go through the tedious work of describing the hours-long torture. Instead, it just ends with, "Hours later, when your broken form has finally expired," or something similar. Now THAT is good writing!

The Nightmare Realm really places you in a vivid hell-like world where you don't belong in. I wish there was more good endings, but it makes sense how James has no true way to combat the Nightmare Realm beyond putting a g-... well, that's too much of a spoiler.

This story also embodies the CYOA spirit. There are so many endings! So many little choices that MATTER! It was really fun seeing the different endings, and, jeeze, the sheer amount of content in this story means its 7/8 length is GREATLY deserved.

I just, I've never read such a great horror story on this website. It excels so much. It gives me hope that there are writers here that go beyond an amateur level.

There are only a few moments in life where you read something written by some random nobody on a website you frequent, and think to yourself, "wow, it's like I just read a professional author's work." This is one of those moments. I can say with 100% certainty that Steve24833 is one of those authors.
-- henshaw_13 on 6/17/2018 5:27:17 PM with a score of 0
The plot was well written out, and I didn't notice any serious grammar mistakes. Really loved the blood and gore, and it was really mysterious and intriguing.

You really made this extremely dark and gory, and that touch was well written. It certainly seemed lengthy, and I liked the plot.

It was extremely horrifying, but some corpse fucking could do some good. Well, it's optional.

Really loved the endings though. I'm glad you made them as gory and miserable as possible...

Anyways, great book, great plot and another traumatizing story by Steve. I think you achieved your goal of making children gag and run out the of the room screaming with terror. Ah, I loved this book. I think you did a fantastic job (as usual) my little irish friend, and I rated this a 7/8.

-- DiniTheWizard on 11/6/2017 9:15:30 PM with a score of 0
This is the first storygame that I've read by Steve, and I have high expectations for the rest. This was quite good, but I get the feeling that it's not quite up to par with your more popular storygames. My first impression from the beginning was your attention to detail. The situation that the character finds the self in is well given, and creates a set mood for the rest of the storygame. It's far from linear, and there a healthy amount of links for the reader to choose from. I don't like that a few of them are already End game links, but at least they are still well written deaths. :)

Going deeper into the storygame, the writing is very captivating and interests the reader. It compels us to continue with the storygame and to go through the different branches provided. The description give the reader an image for the story, like a movie in our heads. The weird guy from the beginning was really, really creep, so an excellent job with that. I actually liked it though.

I really enjoy that it was such a very long storygame. It gives so many different options for the reader, letting us explore each different path. It's not linear in the slightest.

There wasn't any grammar or spelling error that I noticed, so good job on that. I'm excited to read one of your other storygames, as this one had quite the impression on me. Keep it up, and you'll excel. 7/8
-- Nyctophilia on 11/6/2017 7:45:13 PM with a score of 0
Your writing style is really good. The sights of the Nightmare Realm were chillingly descriptive. You have a dark imagination.

I went for the lighter and died right away, though, lol.
-- Becca on 6/17/2018 11:47:28 AM with a score of 0
That was fantastic
-- kwetwz on 11/25/2017 2:53:37 AM with a score of 0
i like how you can save the last girl but that should be a option with every girl
-- choices on 11/24/2017 2:35:35 AM with a score of 0
This story was much better than I expected. Especially with your signature fucked-upedness. I had the choice between two endings and decided on a bitter sweet ending.

All in all this was good, a little horrifying, but very good. It had a good amount of length, description, character development. I did notice the characters were less eccentric than they usually are, it seems you traded that for characters that are far darker....and kind of demented in their own way. I will definitely be reading through a few more times to try and find some of the other endings.

Good work as always.
-- corgi213 on 11/1/2017 5:33:51 PM with a score of 0
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