The Story of the Mystery Mansion

Player Rating1.25/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 28 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty1/8

"no possible way to lose"

Play Length2/8

"So short yo' momma thought it was a recipe"

Maturity Level1/8

"appropriate for all ages"
Stories with this maturity level will not, by design, have any potentially objectionable content. An example of a type story with this rating would be a quiz on mathematics.


Just a little thing I made up off of the spot  to read for fun. Also don't judge so harshly of my stories.

Player Comments

1) 5 pages. Wow. Really?

2) Not a choose your own story. Instant 1/8.

3. Oh, and you called them Chapters per page. I think you're mistaken, as a page DOES NOT EQUAL a chapter.

4. Your story has plotholes.

5. You rated it 8/8... You do realize that doesn't affect your story's score, right?

6. Please, take more time on your story GAMESSSSSS G A M E S
and don't make them an utterly barebones story.
-- mattstat716 on 5/6/2016 8:23:36 AM
Okay, I have a serious question.

HOW THE FUCK DID HE WRITE THIS STORY IF HE'S DEAD? (spoilers: the main character dies)

The other issues this story has honestly aren't even worth bringing up since it's not a CYOA in the first place and will be removed shortly.
-- mizal on 5/6/2016 1:24:08 AM
Sad Fact: someone who writes five pages of easy-to-read stuff will get dozens of reviews, comments and critiques. Someone who actually spends a month or two to write 100+ pages will get less than half the reviews and comments the story that took one hour to write did because it actually takes time and brain power to read a long story.

-- Will11 on 5/5/2016 11:29:00 PM
Uhh... what... was... this...? This is not a game. This is a story. If you want to make a story, go somewhere else.
-- rosystar on 5/5/2016 11:08:00 PM
Not only is each "chapter" one page long, but it's been given praise by its own author, who, while perfectly able to fake his name in a comment he wasn't logged in for, DOESN'T EVEN PRETEND TO BE SOMEONE ELSE, AND MAKES HIMSELF LOOK PATHETIC!

Return thee to Wattpad, Troll!
-- ISentinelPenguinI on 5/5/2016 10:16:39 PM
This website is called "Choose Your Story". You have a story that's petty good, but you're missing the "Choose" part of it. What you did is sort of like trying to drive a car that's out of gas. It won't work.
-- WouldntItBeNice on 5/5/2016 8:50:16 PM
Why the heck are you writing this here? The story isn't even that long, anyway! go to the forums and post the story, this is for GAMES. okay? GAME. G.A.M.E.
-- Honeydusk842 on 5/5/2016 7:43:15 PM
This is not a game, it is a story and one without choices which calls pages chapters and is being praised as an 8/8 by the author. It's a damn shame because the writing itself shows potential, but as an addition to CYS, this is an utter failure.
-- Kiel_Farren on 5/5/2016 6:41:18 PM
It was alright, actually, it was really good, and I applaud you for this story, but when I made chapter stories without choices on my last story, I was told not to, and I now prefer the choices, so if you might be able to make this a story with choices, it might become so much more popular. It was great, but I give a 5/8
-- RedofPalletTown on 5/5/2016 3:12:08 PM
Well... this was not a storygame. This was an awful story. Also, pages are not chapters.
-- Steve24833 on 5/5/2016 2:51:46 PM
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