Tikal Warrior

The main problem I had with this storygame is I felt like I was reading a textbook. The want to be immersed in the story but this was so short there was zero time for me to do that.

If this had been longer and more developed and furthermore not been a regurgitation and of historical facts and instead an interesting plot surrounding the time period of the Mayan empire, than I would have enjoyed it and this would have a higher rating.

Instead I found myself disappointed because the potential of the story was never fully explored and I found myself unable to enjoy it due to the brevity and the boringness of it.

I feel that while this game was informative, it lacked detail and could have been fleshed out a bit more. I liked how it dove into history and allowed you to see the world from a different perspective, but it could have been introduced better, as I didn't realize what was going on for a short while. I also slightly disliked the way this game worked - the choices provided were sometimes confusing (for instance: result A or B). Also, I felt that the events occurring after the choices were explained in a matter-of-fact tone rather than shown. Having the facts told to me in a clinical tone made me feel detached from the game. But the grammar was great, and the writing - while simple - had the potential to become even greater if details had been added.

I understand that this game was probably made for a school project (at least it appears that way to me). The plot here felt more like an outline or a skeleton than a real story, but you honestly have the potential to create a great game. If you have the time, passion, and patience to create stories, I encourage you to stay on here.

First off, the 'school-based' category is for games that take place in a school. You should move this to edutainment.

Secondly, this was far too short and lacking in any kind of detail or description. There IS a plot, but I felt more like I was reading the outline of it than a completed story in its own right. How about showing us the things that happened instead of just briefly mentioning them after the fact? 'Result A' or 'Result B' determining the ending you get is kind of out of place too, the reader is expected to just click randomly at that point instead of making a real choice.

A story about a Mayan king could be a very cool thing, I wish you'd done more with this.

not much substance

A very nice game!

I love how it was based on actual historical evidence, this story would be great if it was fleshed out a bit. Add in some descriptors, some emotions, then you got yourself a great story.

Would recommend if you are interested in some Mayan cities/kingdoms.

Keep up the good effort!

... I kind of feel like every war should be settled with a ball game. ^_^

very cool

Weird. Is that true?

I chose to destruct those evil people for taking my brother!! This said I was evil. That is stupid. I wasn't evil, they are. If they hadn't taken my brother, I wouldn't have been merciless. I wouldn't ever be merciful to anyone who would take my brother! Stupid.

This was actually rather interesting. Nice.

I would have liked to see it a bit more fleshed out, but this was a solid, short and informative piece with a bit of fun and ruthless carnage.