10/12/2024

1/5/2025 10:53 AM

5

0

4 wins / 1 loss

Warden

Rum

unpublished

"Oh a drop of Nelson's Blood wouldn't do us any harm." Is what they sung in unison as they worked, burying you under the waves.

Yep, one hundred percent right. Couldn’t be more right. Matter of fact, you should write a short story or something.

Think whatever you want dude. Also, how could it be a scam if I have more points than the bitch.

Look, if you’re gonna write this kind of shit, at least commit. Don’t half ass it. And what the hell was up with that dress description? Like, nobody cares that the fabric is held together with corset strings. Get to the fucking point, what’s the character actually look like? Oh, and the biting scene? Yeah, that was kinda weird how you stayed on it.

I’m not a part of this contest, but I figured I would say anyways in light of the recent contest’s theme, this is my writing music. Here

I don’t really see anything wrong with the poem, but I’m kinda lost on the symbolism. Like I get that ‘sand pelts my back in a swirling attack’ means something, but I just can’t figure out what you're trying to say.