Deer89, The Contributor

Member Since

9/11/2019

Last Activity

8/4/2020 8:20 PM

EXP Points

131

Post Count

10

Storygame Count

1

Duel Stats

1 win / 3 losses

Order

Sage

Commendations

57

"If you know the enemy and know yourself, you need not fear the result of a hundred battles.

If you know yourself but not the enemy, for every victory gained you will also suffer a defeat.

If you know neither the enemy nor yourself, you will succumb in every battle.”

Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points

Storygames

When Johnny Comes Marching Home
February 7, 1968 You are a hardened Marine Sergeant returning to the jungles of Vietnam in the wake of the Tet Offensive. In command of a new platoon, you ready to face the challenges and horrors of war once more. However, the jungle may contain more secrets and dangers you would expect... Entry for Mizal's Welcome to the Jungle Contest. Special thanks to @enterpride for proof-reading and feedback!

Camp Elhorn
unpublished

Recent Posts

How to get fast points? on 7/28/2020 8:04:41 AM

Rate stories with lengths of 1/8. 


June is Noob Threshing Month! on 7/15/2020 7:43:53 AM

Congratulations everyone! It was a lot of fun. 


June is Noob Threshing Month! on 7/14/2020 4:32:39 PM

Update? 


Interesting Comments 5 on 7/6/2020 6:32:33 PM

Alright, I'll have fond memories upon looking back. 


Interesting Comments 5 on 7/6/2020 5:57:01 PM

Yeah, is there anyway that could be removed?


Noob Contest Roll Call on 7/5/2020 11:06:23 PM

There, it's done and over with. A bit more time would have helped a lot, but nonetheless, I'm proud of creating my first real writing project. 

Check it out here: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/when-johnny-comes-marching-home


When Johnny Comes Marching Home [Readers Needed] on 7/3/2020 11:26:39 AM

Thank you so much for taking the time to read through my story. I must admit, I was a bit too ambitious about the branching and really glossed over many of the things that give a story substance. Your feedback brought my attention to the characters, where I'm having a bit of difficulty characterizing an entire squad of men. Do you have any advice on how this may done? Also, what are your thoughts on Corporal Bronski, the MC's best friend? 

Thank you again for helping me out. This is my first real writing project, and you showed me how friendly the community here is. I've learned a lot from entering this contest, and I hope to do a lot more writing in the future!


When Johnny Comes Marching Home [Readers Needed] on 7/2/2020 8:32:08 AM

I'm a newbie completing an entry for The Jungle contest. I've taken my time getting it done, and hope that doesn't end up biting me in the butt. I've gotten most of it finished, just need to get several endings done and then proofread the story. I'd appreciate any feedback, though note that I'll get around to editing and fixing grammar and misspellings eventually. 

In the story, you take the perspective of a hardened Vietnam War sergeant. After the opening days of the Tet Offensive, you are back at the front commanding a new platoon against the Viet Cong. However, the jungle may hold more secrets and dangers than you'd expect...

I hope you enjoy!

Link: http://chooseyourstory.com/story/when-johnny-comes-marching-home

PS. Don't mind the comment in the storygame. My sister was messing with my computer and used my account to comment on my own story Lol. 


June is Noob Threshing Month! on 6/5/2020 11:25:13 AM

Edit lock. 


June is Noob Threshing Month! on 6/5/2020 11:24:51 AM

I'm in for 50 points.