Aww, you're making the OP bashful. :)

Very light politics, mostly romance if I may correct my words lol.

He's more yandere than creepy, if that makes any sense and he is attractive, brown haired and intense gray eyessss

There's other suitors, his sister who is named Priscilla, some mysterious dude, the poor charming older man, and one or two others who haven't escaped development 

And don't worry, none of them sparkle or are vampires.

Mwahahah, my goal was achieved! Anyway, the story is essentially about a corrupt country several years after leading a complete massacre of an Eastern continent. The gods were pissed at them and so they took up a single survivor and raised her in their castle along with their children as a really bad apology. The game is essentially romance based, the first romantic interest is introduced right off the bat, Edwin the creep. 

Eventually, the royal family is almost wiped out by a disease and boom politics, romance, etc. 

So yeah, it's for the romance genre. 

Oh, okay. I'll go see for the past and  present tense and change stuff~~

When I describe stuff, I tend to use words that have little to no correlation to each other like "swift blonde hair" for some reason, I'll try to find some new words to describe things lol.

And yep, you pretty much got him immediately, he is psycho yandere. What exactly made you notice this? You always get a sorta of dark undertone when Edwin comes into play but it only explicitly says so if the character completely just throws away Edwin and reveals his true self. 

And thank you! It's always great to hear that somebody would be interested in playing or reading your work.  :^)

(*silently starts deleting all the remarks on hair that the protagonist can make*)

Okay, hey. So well, I began writing this CYOA in August, I haven't really gotten as much progress as I would like  because I am a slight procrastinator and I always negatively compare my writing to others without actually asking for any evaluation or anything - so that's why I made this post! I'd really like if somebody could just read this early snippet of my writing and just tell me if it's decent or not, I've always found that people commenting on my work has strangely always motivated me, whether it be criticism or positive comments.

So, here's the very small snippet :

It is one day, December of your fifteenth year, that a change does indeed occur. You are sitting with Edwin in the snow of the gardens. He is entertaining you with his charm and wit, hpis eyes seemed to pierce into you as you sit there, enjoying the talk. Edwin had gentle brown hair and stormy gray eyes, he had a gentleness and sophistication about him that you had never seen in a boy. You, by this time, had acquired feelings for Edwin, oh, how he charmed you with his wit, his remarkable beauty but, you couldn't help reminding yourself, there was something off about him.  
 
Suddenly, Edwin leans onto you, his breath grows more rapid as his cheeks gently flush. He brushes a strand of hair out of your face. He remarks, slowly. 
 
"I am very fond of you, more than anyone else." His voices catches at the last note as he leans in to you, further. There is literally a complete lack of space as he looks you in the eyes. 

So uh, yeah. I'm not exactly as experienced as any of you guys in writing or using the site, so I probably sound ignorant in many ways, if so, please forgive me.

Anyway, I suppose tha would be it. Um. Yeah.

Yes, totally, watching middle aged mothers getting devoured by large unclothed giants is totally what hooked me onto the show.

Or maybe it's just Jean. Same thing, really. 

Perhaps SNK's plot twist isn't really what it's hyped up to be but I really find the show irresistible. There's just something oddly seductive about it that I can't put my finger on. 

Yes, I suppose I did label you guys quite a bit! I apologize, they were just prominent things I noticed and I posted because I was to  nervous to just jump in like you had wisely stated! Though I do find Aman's mustache oddly seductive. ;;;;;;)

But thank you for the warm introduction! :)

Thank you! I think it was actually one of your drawings that led to 'good artists' comment. But still, thank you for the warm welcome c:

Thank you! The entire site is not like what I previously described, though a vast majority - it's mainly several subforums including the one I just described -- Think of it as a whole bunch of /b/'s, I suppose. Most of the other subgroups of the site are quite kind, though immature in their language and nature.

And as you may have expected, not many newcomers actually make it through the 'initiation', the average lifespan of a 'weak' newcomer is only a week or two -- sometimes even a day before they retreat back to the safe haven known as essentially, anywhere but the forums and never return.