I think by 'Choose Your Story' users tend to take the phrase literally, meaning second person adventures are the norm...however, an interactive story's x factor is giving the reader the ability to dictate the crucial choices of the story protagonist. It adds an extra dimension to the potential immersion because the reader feels like they have semi-control over this constructed world.

Anyways. my point is that the protagonist doesn't have to be the reader 'i.e second person', I actually prefer third person because it has a novelistic, narrative tone overall. Either way if you can write well, you shouldn't worry about which perspective you use, because i don't think anyone reading is gonna crucify the creative decision, or take a massive dump on you in the review section.

Thought this was long past it's use by date too lol, I was gonna just start writing my idea myself if nobody has any objections or really wants to collaborate. I don't mind personally.

I just find the anal references a bit overused personally. I'd wait to see what other people think though, I'm just one douche-bag haha, everybody has different tastes about what makes them spit milk from their nostrils. 

No problemo man, hope you remember my name if you ever need a beta-tester for the near finished version lol.

I could play test If you want me to.

Well, I think with more experience and by reading more books and novels in general you could eliminate a lot of non-specific and vague descriptions like "no matter how many times you press the little button on it". I know small things like that sound insignificant but they pile up, so finding concise words for descriptions really helps a reader immerse themselves in your writing.

The spaceship could have used some description, even if it was just 'a typical steel plated flying saucer'. The grammar looks fine to me, and i didn't see any spelling mistakes too, so that's a great sign lol. I'm not sure if it was intentional, but i liked the double entendre (i think that's how you spell it) of the line "Probably time to stop looking at your watch".

The humor of describing the alien and the main characters thoughts about anal probing didn't hit home for me haha, seemed like an obscure thought for a guy that just discovered the existence of extra terrestrial life. I admire the creative choice if that's the tone you're looking for throughout the story though, a sort of light hearted space adventure.

Anyways, It definitely looks intriguing so I'll make sure to check it out when you're done! Peace oot.

I'm happy with it being a book #Book01

hmm..you could try the text adventure version of 'Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy', It has a lot of amusing moments filled with witty situations and dialog, and is absolutely brimming with creativity. I'd give it a go.

Hey everybody ^__^ For A while now I've noticed that When writing any story or series of events a character goes through, there's a set of points that pretty much every good story follows through their journey. There's a great article posted by professional writer Dan Harmon where he explains the concept of a story circle, so I'll leave a link below in case anyone's interested in checking it out, It can really help a writer understand how to introduce and set out their story and the developmental arcs the characters go through! I probably made it sound boring, but it's fascinating as shit if you're interested in immersive and complete writing.

http://channel101.wikia.com/wiki/Story_Structure_101:_Super_Basic_Shit

wow, thanks everyone for welcoming me! Thanks to all

If you're referring to my story then can do my man.