Don't get distracted!
A
modern
storygame by
Clayfinger
Player Rating
?/8
"Too few ratings to be ranked"
Based on 6 ratings so far
Story Difficulty
1/8
"No possible way to lose"
Play Length
3/8
"A nice jog down the driveway"
Maturity Level
3/8
"Must be at least this tall to play"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 10. If this were a movie, it would probably be between G and PG.
Tags
Contest Entry
Humor
The target has been decided. The deadline has been set. All that is left is for you, Adam Finch, assassin extraordinaire, to execute your mission. Success is inevitable. Because you are weapon made flesh, and nothing will stop you from completing your mis- Oh! Look! A story-game!!
There are 5 endings: 'Double kill', 'War in the shadows', 'Retiree rescue', 'Kiss of death' and 'Who let him cook?!'.
Submitted for
End Master's Prompt Contest 4
for the prompt of: 'A story involving being an assassin'
Player Comments
Short. Definitely short. But I loved this.
There’s something endearing about how oblivious Mr. Lee is. It borders on slapstick comedy at times, which honestly works in the story’s favour. He’s a borderline super assassin with the odd quirk of barely taking his job seriously, clumsy, aloof, and entirely too casual for someone so lethal. But that actually gives him a kind of humanising charm that really works. He’s not just a weapon; he’s a character.
There’s also a surprising amount of hidden depth in the outcomes. You can really feel the butterfly effect taking shape based on the choices made. It gives the piece a quiet realness and choice beneath the humour.
Stylistically, it's just well written. It's immersive, engaging, and genuinely fun to read. My only real critique is that it felt too short. I think there was room for more worldbuilding, some extra space to let the setting breathe and unfold. But for what’s here, it’s rich, clever, and really well executed.
Great job. Would love to see more stories from you to be honest.
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Crimson
on 4/30/2025 6:36:22 PM with a score of 0
I cannot say I was expecting a love story between an assassin and a knife.
This story branches wonderfully, and as it is a short read, it's 100% worth it to read through all the endings. Adam's general silliness contributes to the chaotic nature of the story.
Adam is a very consistent character, just wanting to do things in his own way. He's not evolved on much, but that does feel in character.
The writing style reminds me of an old comic book, if a comic book had no pictures. By that, I mean not very serious and action packed. This is one of the settings I feel like this works. The dialogue feels natural for a majority of the story, although corporate-speak has always seemed gibberish to me.
I thought this was overall a very funny story, and it gave me a sense of nostalgia for Bond parodies like Austin Powers. I still wonder about the logistics of the knife romance, but I don't particularly want it explained either.
My only real issues with this is that it's too short, and even though we know a bit about Adam, we don't get too much about him, or anything from other characters.
In general, a great story, very funny for a quick read when bored. I did knock a point for the characterization, but I still give it a 7/8.
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Liminal
on 4/30/2025 11:03:14 AM with a score of 0
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