1) Work on your punctuality and vocabulary. I mean your spelling is fine... but try to work on using capitals, commas, etc, etc. This site puts a lot of emphasis on these things and your readers wouldn't be very pleased if your punctuation was... well...below the standard.
2) I don't really immerse myself in the romance genre but I can tell you this. People don't like typical smart, strong, handsome jock or generic hot-ass, dumb blond. It's kinda like other genres really. If you want a really intriguing, fascinating movie about... dreams (for example)... you don't want a boring plot about having a crazy dream then waking up and everything goes back to normal. You want something... like Inception. Really interesting and juicy. Watchers get attached to the characters and they're quite literally 'on the edge of their seats'. Plus, at the end, it still makes you question and think about the movie. The word that I'm looking for is 'Unique'. Making your game unique is up to you...tbh.
But the again... those are movies and not books or pieces of literature. If you want a more relatable example, think of your favorite books and ask yourself, "Why are they such great books?" or "What hooked me into the story?". Things like that.
