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I want to write a storygame that takes place in a dystopian society called Nazbolia. Obviously it's not meant to accurately represent a society of either ideology and there are other ideologies mixed in like radical environmentalism, liberalism, feminism, white supremacy, animal liberation, Gadaffiism and anything else that a person would want from a government. Nazbolia is a society that looks like Western depictions of the USSR and North Korea with added racism, feminism, monarchism, anarchism, contradictory political ideas and a population where the average person cannot function in a society. There are rations of food and posters everywhere celebrating the virtues of Nazbol civilization. There is no ideology that is banned, but opposing the government directly gets people to disappear.

The reason that pedophilia exists in Nazbolia is thanks to the Libertarians which abolished the age of consent, and incest was advocated for by the monarchist Nazbols. Cannibalism was never really planned by any political group, but became common once starving people ate the sacrifices made at the top of the pyramid to the Nazbol gods.

What does everyone think? Is this too silly or is this perfect for a Grimdark story? If it sounds too much like trolling I might just brainstorm a new idea. This website probably wouldn't like it anyway.

Spoiler alert for the lore:
This place exists because during a great war in the year 2100, the government had no recourse to keep the citizens from reblling and decided to give out street drugs and other illicit substances at its disposal to stop rebellions from the masses. In the end it did not work, but instead the radicals of every political belief had their brains damaged by the drugs, and decided to unify into this strange hybrid ideology.

The currency of Nazbolia holds philosophers and occultists of varying ideologies. The faces of Savitri Devi, Lenin, Stalin, Himmler and The Queen of England can all be seen on the Nazbolian currency.

I see someone is getting a head start on Edgelord story of the year for 2022.

Anyway don't get graphic with pedo shit obviously. The rest of the content is fine, though whether it's "good" or not we'll only know if we read it.

Sounds more over the top silly though so I'd imagine this going over better with a more humorous tone. Of course humor is always a roll of the dice, so you'll just have to write and take the risk if you're funny or not.

Now that I'm no longer manic, I'm not sure that this dystopia would work as intended. It's too humorous and silly that it would potentially ruin or negate the intentions that I wanted for this kind of dystopia. It would probably confuse people who think it is satire but cannot figure out what I'm trying to satire since it's not meant to be one.

I had this whole story about how England loses its African colonies in WW2 and the Belgians side with hitler and use drugs in South Africa to stop rebellions to their genocide, but I guess that doesn't even work either.