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9 years ago

I was getting tired of the junk on that thread XD

Whelp, here ya go.

@Kiel_Farren
@Stevewhateverthenumbersare
@Bucky
@MasonJarGuzzi
@WouldntItBeNice

((Oh, gawd, the number of competitors...nooooooo))

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

It's @Steve24833 and @WouldntItBeNice

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

There ya go!

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9 years ago

@Kiel_Farren

Finish your stupid story, Kiel! I'm curious to see where it's going.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Dolphins, dolphins :D

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9 years ago

Sorry, work was pretty bad last night. I did get some breaks, but they got eaten up by a dispute.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

@Steve24833 - There, and with two hours to spare. It's utterly stupid, but it's done.

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9 years ago

Hehe, I like. 

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9 years ago

Thank you. (I'm not even totally sure what a "grizzled" dolphin would look like.)

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9 years ago

Scars, a pack of smokes up it's sleeve, a permanent snarl, three day stubble.

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9 years ago

King Adollfin is most definitely a Nazi, and everyone knows Sharks are basically Sea Jews, so this war makes sense.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

xD Pretty much, yeah. (I'm quoting that.)

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

@Steve24833

Now that was a good story. I was looking for something like that!

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

I'm glad. I quite enjoyed writing it. The whole moral concept of cannibalism and killing was quite fascinating to me.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Well, now I know what goes on in your head. 

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Oh, I was planning to go with something MUCH worse, but I decided on the family dinner path instead, because I'm not in the mood to write something horrific.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Hmm, I might consider writing a grim story prompt in the near future. 

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Oh, that would be terrific. I'm hoping for something like "Like a story that emphasizes the bond between Mother and Child". That would be perfect...

Muahahaha...

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9 years ago

That made me a little sad.
 

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Awww, Kiel...

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Wait, what made you sad?

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

What you wrote. Or, rather, imagining needing to kill an innocent (if doomed) man for the sake of staving off your family's starvation and hearing his dying pleas made for his life and the benefit of his loved ones, only to then remember the way the world was before you were exposed to such desperation and ugliness--kind of like a second loss of innocence, but for adults. 

... >_> I'm feeling philosophical today, and philosophical Kiel is often depressing.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Oh, I thought you were sad when you read I enjoyed writing it, and was thoroughly confused. Well, I'm glad it brought up some emotion in you. 

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9 years ago

Oh, nah. I've enjoyed writing a lot of horrible things, including scenes involving cannibalism. Besides, it's artistic expression! You should be enjoying yourself! 

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9 years ago

Everything I write lately feels like it's "off" in tone somehow. Maybe I just need a vacation to get my muse back, it's like I'm not comfortable writing anymore. :\

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Kiel, you're so much better than me, so you should feel proud of what you write!

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Thank you for the compliment. I've seen you write some good stuff though... and don't get me wrong, I know my writing doesn't suck or anything like that. I have some talent, it just feels awkward to write anything right now and I guess I'm seeing it in my work, even if it's not actually all that noticeable.

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9 years ago

@Kiel_Farren

That was an amazing story; I enjoyed reading it. Very creative, reminds me of Natsu and Igneel from Fairy Tail. You did a great job with the symbolism! Now I have to start reviving my artistry very soon... >:#

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. Natsu is the guy in your avatar, right? Never really checked out Fairy Tail, but I assume you recommend it. 

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9 years ago

Kiel, you're a frustrating writer. Just as I get curious about the Dragon lady and invested in the story, you're like "yah, that's enough". 

Really good work, though. Very enjoyable.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Started one for yesterday's, but then I got busy and well... *shrug*

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

What was your B-word, Kiel?

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Bottle. (Water bottle, to be specific. Bed would've given y'all a bit too much insight into my life.)

 

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

I got some rather bad news today, and I need some time to get over it. Enjoy your points, guys.

Edit: Even on my worst days, I can't refuse a poetry challenge, and I needed something silly after that hell of a wake-up call.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Sorry to hear that, Kiel.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

That's sad to hear, Kiel.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Well, I suck at poetry, so I'll just skip this round and work on my contest entry.

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9 years ago

Tim needs to disqualified. I want the Mods looking at this. He rhymed "Can" with "Command". If that's the kind of shit we're allowing on the Forums, we might as well let Brennon post his child porn.

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9 years ago

I COULDN'T THINK OF ANYTHING ELSE

IT RHYMES

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Ban, Fan, Khan, LAN, Tan, Ran, Pan, Van, Nan, bran, clan, man, plan, quran, began, Japan, Sedan.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Than, scan, span, Dan, Jan, Ann, batman, afghan, bedpan, Iran, cyan, Tarzan... I could go on.

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9 years ago

Let me rephrase that:

I COULDN'T THINK OF ANYTHING ELSE THAT MADE SENSE

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

TIM

I GAVE YOU POINTS ANYWAY

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

THANK YOU

JUST TRYING TO PROVE A POINT

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

YOU'RE WELCOME!

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

WHY ARE WE SHOUTING?

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

BECAUSE, KIEL! WHY NOT?

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Tiiiiiiiiiimmmmmmmmm!

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Wait, so this week's prompt is a fanfic?

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9 years ago

Yep! Good luck! >:)

My body is ready

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9 years ago

... how many ideas do you have in AYT headquarters?

Ew.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Oh, many. 

Hehe

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9 years ago

... I think you might need another...

No. Stop that.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

Children! We get it! You're going through puberty! Stop being weird about it,  or so help me god I will turn this site around!

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9 years ago

*runs rampant through the streets* Spare me!

Let's get working, now! This is the last prompt! Kiel's getting his artwork, but it's taking a really long time. It's really......advanced for me to draw ;-;

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

D'awww.

Welp, congrats Wibbon.

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

I'm much obliged, Tim. Also, thanks to AYT for doing this contest (and drawings for the winners).

ART GIVEAWAY + WRITING PROMPT ALL WEEKS FEEDBACK

9 years ago

There's always next well! And you're welcome, WIBN, I spent a lot of time inking that :)