EbonVasilis, The Wordsmith

Member Since

3/9/2016

Last Activity

10/20/2021 5:30 AM

EXP Points

200

Post Count

821

Storygame Count

3

Duel Stats

3 wins / 4 losses

Order

Architect Exemplar

Commendations

165

Hello there random user! You are reading the profile of EbonVasilis. Look down below for my storygames. All are original, but The Lost Realm is currently my crowning story. I am currently out of country/state, and will be unavailable until the approximate time of summer 2021. If you are reading this and it is the fall of 2021, then I am likely dead or otherwise incapacitated. If so, then I relinquish all my points to TharaApples. (for what they’re worth) If by 2022 I have not logged in, then feel free to ban/decapitate this corpse of an account. 

If I am back on time, then all statements above should be rendered defunct. 

If there arise any questions, then don’t pm me. Instead I would like you to open the forums up, create a thread in the lounge, and tag EndMaster three times in the same post. After that you should await further instruction within that thread. 

Enjoy the stories otherwise! 

Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points Won the 2018 Romance Contest Having 1 Storygame(s) Featured Given by EndMaster on 03/11/2018 - For righteous crusading against degeneracy (And stories)

Storygames

A Chosen Hero

A world on the cusp of disaster. Two sides on the verge of destroying each other, but there is hope. In the form of a hero. Now this will person..., will they be able to rise into the mantle of hero? 

Author's Note

There are links that lead to background information... I highly suggest reading those, as they contain fairly important information.

Criticism is very welcome. 

This is an entry for BerkaZerka's 2017 Summer Slam Contest

 


Featured Story Magno

A historical fiction based upon Alexander the Great and his rise to the throne. 

Note that not everything in this story is factually correct, but there is one path based upon true history.

Note: Nearly every choice has an effect on something, so make your choices carefully. There are four epilogues to be found. 

Criticism is very welcome.

This is an entry for Bucky's 2017 December Story Contest

 


The Lost Realm

On the night of your marriage, your wife is captured and you are left for dead in an alley. When you come to, your wife is missing, and your once perfect life now in tatters. What else is there to do but to kill those who have wronged you, save your wife, and restore equilibrium to your life? Before you can do this, however, you must venture through The Lost Realm...

Author's Notes: Your choices matter, so choose carefully. There are 3 epilogues to be found.

This will likely be the first story in a series of five that I'm planning, so be sure to leave feedback, and please leave any criticisms you might have. 

Special Thanks:

I'd like to give a huge shout out to Mayana for beta testing for me. This story game would have loads more mistakes without her help. Thanks to Mizal as well for her help with scripting. 

This is an entry to EndMaster's 2018 Romance Story contest


Ascendant
unpublished

Born into slavery, you've never had much. You've never even hoped for much, but a stroke of luck frees you from the chains that kept you at the bottom. With freedom in your heart, and the world in your hands there is only one thing to do. Ascend.


Recent Posts

Corgi vs Fem - Vote! on 10/13/2021 12:17:02 PM

True, but I've also not read anything by either of them in at least two years, so the writing styles weren't familiar to me. 


Corgi vs Fem - Vote! on 10/12/2021 10:30:43 PM

Revengeance wins this one. I wanted to like Fem's more, but it was way too messy. The flow was off, and way too many plot points were crammed into the story. 

Corgi wins because his story was more or less complete and was very easy to read and understand. 


Hi am a new person on 10/1/2021 2:06:22 PM

So I wanna follow-up with what I said previously, but just with the idea of practice. It seems you have a good desire write and improve, but, after reading some of your story, there is a clear need for refinement. This isn't bad thing; everyone needs refinement. My suggestion is start with something much smaller, and then work yourself up. Flash fiction is a great way to start off the basics of story creation/structure. It also helps enormously with how to write a story with good flow and transitions, and I think it goes without saying that it helps with practicing grammar, syntax, etc. 

How exactly you go through the writing process can vary, but one of my favorite ways to practice basic story structure is working from a 6 word story to a 1000 word story. The idea is to include exposition, rising action, climax, falling action, and resolution in each version of the same story. Here is Ernest Hemingway's famous example of a six word story:

"Baby shoes, for sale, never worn."

If you go through the whole process, then you will turn that 6 word story into a

100 word story 

Then a 

300 word story

500

750

And finally 

1000.

It's a good way to practice a lot of basics before you get into creating a 5+ rating storygame. 
 


Hi am a new person on 9/29/2021 7:19:10 PM

Read the articles and practice a lot. 


Will Ebon return? on 9/28/2021 10:35:11 PM

Many thanks Thara! I knew I made the right choice in leaving you what remained of my soul. Anyhow, I'll make use of this stipend and get to work on a storygame to redeem my name further. And instead of producing a half-baked one like the last time you loaned me some points, this one will be good. 


Will Ebon return? on 9/28/2021 5:07:03 PM

In short, really really good. It served as a great time to grow up a bit and think about more than myself. 


Will Ebon return? on 9/28/2021 4:56:38 PM

I think a well-lit pair of ears are a great addition to anyone's face. The well-part is key. Otherwise someone might end up looking like Sveld filth. 


Will Ebon return? on 9/28/2021 2:50:32 PM

Oops. I hate auto correct. Meant to say Vile. 


Will Ebon return? on 9/28/2021 1:51:26 PM

Yeah, I did end up reading it. I think I was missing a few endings, but I got through most of it. The new one you have is the Pure, the Bile and the Deadly, right?


Will Ebon return? on 9/28/2021 11:31:13 AM

Wizzy can't speak for themself?