Big Foot

...That picture at the end...

That's your idea of Bigfoot?

Short. Very short. Granted, what was there was actually decent, with a self-contained plot and nice pictures, but there was really no build-up or payoff to finishing this game.

I might also point out that on the page where you give us the sword and shawl items, there's a picture of the sword and a picture of the shawl, then two default pictures for the corresponding items. That was a bit jarring and broke immersion. You can assign picture to items in the storygame editor - it's one of the drop boxes on the items page. Drop me a PM or make a forum post asking about it. Plenty of people on the site would be happy to walk you through it.

That being said, I do think you're a solid writer with the potential to make good games. Just make them a bit longer and spend more time building up to the climatic fight. Having the fight last longer than a single page is a good idea too.

Ultimately, I gave this game a 3/8. Not terrible, but lots of room for improvement.