Day of the Dog

*SPOILERS*

It started off really good, then ended up just ok.

The first page actually pulled me in really well. The description was very nice and I could almost feel the day. Then, of course, the immersion was broken by a painfully obvious typo. Next came immature writing style that just disappointed me. You can't start off so good then just derail instantly.

I get it, it's supposed to be a cute little story about being a dog, but it could have been done so much better. If you kept the tone of the first two lines for the whole story, I would have absolutely loved it. A wholesome, descriptive story about the life of a dog. But it just wasn't. The writing style kind of ruined it for me.

There were several spelling errors throughout, usually a missing letter in a word that sticks out. You need to proofread before you publish so that those things don't happen, and you need to refine your style so that the reader isn't lost after the first two lines.

pretty short but it was very funny enjoyed it whie it lasted

Lol but make it possible to not bump in to a pole pls

epic

Too long
dont want to read

Really funny and entertaining story game. I broke down laughing when I saw the "Hump James" Option XD

Started with some interesting description, fell immediately into basic description. Lost it's grip, but my eight yo enjoyed clicking through.

It's a cute, touching story.

This was a nice little story. The picture's were cute and the writing was all pretty competent. Good work.

I would say, this is nice.
The grammar was good, with neat sentences and not much mistakes.
Maybe more description about the dog, though. Where does it come from? Where is he now? How is his relationship with other dogs in the house? Needs more describing.
There were three to four interesting options, which was very good in my opinion. I enjoyed the story, but the fact is there is no actual storyline. What is the dog planning or what is his goal? The story would be much better with that.
Quite a good storygame, rated 5/8