HAMSTER SIMULATOR (Part 1)

This is just like a game of rock, paper and scissors with extra steps. I think each type of hamster should have different abilities.

its been my dream since childhood to be slaughtered by a bird of prey. thanks for making this dream a reality!

The description of this game is a bit off, in that at first you are trying to escape from the humans you live with, not save hamster kind. Also, the 'girl putting you in a pot of boiling water for no apparent reason' scene was a bit random.
Spelling and grammar was mostly there. The fight scenes with rock paper scissors reminded me of Pokemon games.
A good first attempt at a storygame, but it could do with more description on each page and an option to not 'seek revenge' after escaping through the window.

Short pages with the only choice being "continue" can just be merged into one page. If a page is over 1k words, it's worth splitting, but these aren't even 100 words. The real choices are pretty sparse, and mostly lolrandom "you die". I must say, fighting the hawk with RPS was pretty funny, I'll give you that.

Otherwise, the spelling and grammar isn't bad, but there isn't any real prose here. It's just "you go here, you do this". There is very little description until the very final page of the story, and even that could use some more.

On top of that, part 1s are frowned upon because they never turn into a full story (and if they do turn into a full story, then why not just make it one storygame in the first place??)

There is potential, but squirrel simulator is better, sorry.