HIGHWAYS to HELL

I really enjoyed the setting and overall tone of this story. You did a good job with making this quite a spooky and thrilling experience, there was some horror movie cliches, but they were done well. So I guess you can say that they benefited this story in the long run, which had an interesting and fun plot.

This story does suffer from some issues with grammar, and odd sentences that sometimes ruin the immersion of this story. I think that many of these issues could've been rectified with better proofreading.

There's plenty here for fans of the horror genre to enjoy, with the many movie references and callbacks, while providing a spooky atmosphere throughout the story. One which was rather long, but enjoyable. I can appreciate the amount of effort that was put into making this a fun read.

I would recommend this game for all to play, as there's many choices that are in this and it really felt as if I was playing two storygames, rather one. Because each of the paths, the interstate and the valley, offered plenty of interesting dialogue and choices.

Even with the issues that I sometimes found with the grammar, I can see why this was previously featured, as there's really quite a bit here to enjoy with this storygame.

So overall, this is a strong storygame. Good job!

Not bad at all, you need to work on your paragraphing and proof-reading because that was really distracting, but this was a good effort. I highly suggest the use of the advanced editor as that would have improved this in a multitude of ways.

I liked the movie connections, but it seemed a bit disorganized. Under certain circumstances it's possible to loop forever. The stories are good in and out of themselves, but depending on how someone progresses they may not make sense.

I liked the ending; I got choked by a wire. What a way to go.

eh

Infinite looping, no use of variables and instead relying on the reader to be honest, and just overall bad spelling/grammar...

Gave it a 4 for the effort, but do not recommend it.

This was a cool story. I don't really watch or read much horror so I didn't get a lot of the references.

I did enjoy the plot, though sometimes the story seemed to skip around a bit. I also noticed the fact that you used the honor system for picking stuff up instead of using items. I found a sentence from the story about waving to the man with only your middle finger outstretched amusing.

5/10

Got the quick and painless ending after kicking the eyeless cowboys ass.

All in all this seemed like a good story. The scenes flowed pretty well, and grammar and sentence structure seemed good. Can't say too much either way for character development/arcs because it isn't a story that really needs any of that.
I kind of like the carefree feel of it, just get on the road and see what kind of hell or horror awaits you.
I hope you keep writing and that we see more stuff from you.

This was fucking amazing I got all the endings after 2 HOURS! This is a great game!

""It's a little out of the way but it's the least we can do for saving my life." Alice says with a smile.
"I'll make you another bowel of my chili before we go."
You grin from ear to ear.
~THE END~
You got the "Gargoyle" ending and mastered this storyline. Good job. "

Prefer ice cold soda over a bowl of chili! But hey, what more can you ask when this is suppose to be a good ending. ;)