Hansel and Gretel's Great Escape

I enjoyed this, but I feel that there was some wasted potential with this storygame. It really felt like a retelling of a fairytale, one with minimal changes at that. Yes, there was a GPS used instead of bread crumbs, and yes, the woman planned to do something else rather than eat the children, but those changes didn’t feel like they were enough.

So much more could've been done to truly give this story a modern twist, rather than only change minimal things of the original tale. It certainly wouldn't of hurt to see a bit more originality.

Also, I ran into some grammatical issues such as using 'women' rather than 'woman' in some instances. There was other slight mistakes in grammar, but that one in particular is what stood out to me as I read. Don't be afraid to read over your story and proofread if need be, because while grammar isn't everything, it is rather important and something that a reader will notice.

Now for the good, I liked that you added the choice to either play as Hansel or Gretel, and while the differences of each path weren't major, it still was a rather nice addition to this story.

In the end, this was a rather interesting spin on a old fairytale, but one that I felt was missing something to truly make this stand out on it's own.

this game is so much fun

good story!!

Good story line.

I would happy if we do activity like this

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It's a sad story. I've ever heard about this story, but I haven't ever read about this. Such a poor Hansel and Grentel. I hope they will be safe.

it ok

I liked how the story went and the ability to choose what would happen next, that led to plot twists!

short and sweet