Peak: Winds of the Forgotten

The description sounded interesting, but was ultimately not the same.

Got shot in the head at age 63. Meh. We all die sometime.

I kind of get it but it just needs more development. Lol, got shot in the head.

What on earth. There's little enough logic, or idea, or anything to keep interest. Stuff happens, click buttons, more unrelated stuff happens. Not too interesting.

Ways to improve. Either name the char, or give a choice of two or three, and put that in when it comes up. ("[Your Name], huh?" The officials raised a brow.) I'd raise a brow if I was pronouncing the [ and calling someone Your Name. Aside from that, some sort of interesting narrative, or idea behind it, not just, hey look a mountain. Hey base camp. Hey, game over.

'You have HAPE. You must either climb down or die. At your age, you may not continue the game.'

I don't know what this means or how it happened or why, except that apparently I lost. In fact...I don't really know what much of what happened meant. It was all sort of fragmented and disjointed--something about police, 'bones frozen like a living pancake' (that one did get a laugh out of me, though I don't think it means what you think it means...), something about mountain climbing, and then I lost.

The description really caught my attention, but what I saw of the game didn't resemble it much, which is a shame. It looks to me like you must be ESL, so that's likely a major factor...please keep writing and practicing, because I can see you have potential.