Prairie Fire I

Here's the thing, if the writing in your game is sparse and unengaging, and you've provided no plot hook or other means of keeping the reader's interest, you can't put a bunch of easy to access End Game links and expect the reader's not going to take one ASAP.

Short, and needs serious editing.
2/8

First page death storygames always get the lowest rating possible. At least try to stick to the medium.

Kind of a random game, not very amusing. I would rather play something else, but seeing as I'm here for a review, I cannot. Previously poking through the pages of the game I realized that there is an End Game link on the first page. Never a good thing to do; simply get on with the story! The pages were pretty barren, only a sentence or two. Don't directly speak to the reader or break the fourth wall, it makes for a rubbish story. Try to give the plot some structure, add detailing to your words.

The options were not very fruitful or meaningful to the plot as far as my play through was concerned, so I recommend you tend to that issue. They were sort of confusing, being quite...foolish. This was more of a "whoop-dee-doo" story where you were presented with a protagonist and no plot. It's like a water slide that ends five feet through.

Overall, from my experience with this game, I'd give it a 2/8.

Well, this was a bit of an interesting game. Events seemed to come out of nowhere, your entire life savings consist of only $20, and it's quite easy to be locked out of most of the good endings.

There were quite a few bugs involved. If you choose to visit the bank first, before anything else - you'll never meet the girl in the alley, and therefore never get the job offer. Pretty unfair there.

If you do choose to "take a stroll", and then try to go back to your apartment - nothing happens. The page doesn't go anywhere. Not that anybody would really need to click on that, but still.

Oh, and there are two phone numbers you can pick up. Both of them look identical and the second one does absolutely nothing (unless I've missed something). I'm not quite sure what it was doing there. For a moment, I thought you had two job interviews. It looks like a duplicate.

I will say that some of the bad endings were interesting but not very well done. Sleep on the streets, you die with no explanation whatsoever, stuff like that.

This was completely random and could've used some proofreading. Do you think you'll introduce a plot by "the third episode"?

At least I got an A!

I rated myself so obviously I give myself a perfect score, hahahalolol.